What is your opinion?
Great work
"It's great it seems pretty ok to me "
The inheritance
"This chapter was wonderful it reminded me of my senior year of high school with my friends. Great job. The characters love for each other definitely comes through. Absolutely wonderful chapter. ✌️☮️"
The Inheritance
"Good description, linear plot, pure characters, overall a great story. Here are a few things that stood out. Punctuation needs some work. There are a boatload of exclamation points, and that's not necessary. It makes the content a bit awkward. In addition to this, the dialogue needs quotations. It was a bit confusing having to figure out when a character was speaking amidst the narration. Add more realism to the dialogue as well. The way your characters converse doesn't feel real to me. You did pretty well with character building. Keep that up through to the end. Just a few grammatical errors, but those can be noticed and dealt with during your revision periods."
The Inheritance
"Young love is an elixir once tasted and is forever remembered. You retread that path for readers very agreeably, amidst the devil in the details. The genius of writing is moreover thought that need be properly translated and in our haste we transgress in not proofreading. Take care also to make complete sentences. Ask me how I know?! "
Sorry
"Okay so I'll try and point out everything in the comments but I hate to drag your story through the mud here. Because what you do really well is character development. But it is the emotional portrayal that is not hitting home. All your characters talk like robots with he said she said type of deal. Mix that up and I'm 100% sure that the story would be a five-star."
