What is your opinion?
Handsome Man
"I'm a bit confused why Milly has entered this story, I guess it will become clear later?"
Handsome Man
"A story set in Thailand. It is more than boys in bars. A dangerous man has dangerous aims for the future. I'mm looking forward to reading more and find out what happens."
b story
"So imagine a B rated movie but transfer that into pages. It's okay but it's a one time read."
Handsome Man
"This was one of the most discombobulated pieces of work I’ve ever read. As a reader, I feel overwhelmed as I couldn’t really follow the sequence of events in this book. I felt there wasn’t a clear flow of the storyline and i became more and more confused as the story progressed. I get that you’ve attempted to show the story in a complex manner but when it gets too abstract, it hinders readability. Perhaps, adopting a more simplistic writing style and just say things as it is without beating around the bush would make things a lot more clearer and easier for readers to understand. One silver lining from the work is probably the language. Mostly, it wasn’t too bad; still tolerable and can definitely be brushed up by editing! Overall, this work wasn’t the one for me and I just hope this can be a stepping stone for you to improve upon!"
