What is your opinion?
scary
"I thought the story was good and I hope the author keeps writing."
Interesting concept that needs revision
"I want to preface this review by acknowledging that there is an interesting premise here, and you clearly have a vision of what you want this story to make the reader feel. However, I don't think you're there yet. I like the use of blog entries as chapters, and I think using the entry dates as chapter titles is an interesting technique. However, as the book goes on, certain chapters feel real-time, rather than recollections. I found some story points entirely unbelievable. After witnessing a terrible death of the police officer, they decide to go back into the house? They then decide to go investigate the attic? Abigail decides to burn the house down without even investigating if her partner is still alive? Malcolm thought everything could be attributed to HONEY? I also found that the writing needs editing and refinement. For example, Abigail commented that the police officer's death was 'one of the most horrific she had ever witnessed'. How many horrific deaths has Abigail witnessed? I understand what you mean, but this should edited. Perhaps instead, 'the most horrific she could imagine'. I also noted some spelling and grammar errors. Perhaps some can be explained away because these are blog posts, but I still feel these should be corrected. Overall, I believe there is absolutely potential here. They story has the components and building blocks which make up a good horror, but it needs refinement and revision. Keep writing and you'll have something here!"
