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What is your opinion?
Overwhelming
"Like it's literally perfect. Really good description. Glad I came across this."
A great first chapter
"I enjoyed reading the details you put into this first chapter. I did find it a little hard to stay focused, though. When writing, I try to think of writing like listening to music. If my eyes don't feel like they're transitioning between notes (words or sentence structure) it's good to try and change it up some. Mixing in long and short sentences is a great way to do this. Overall, it was really well thought out. There was a great amount of detail, and it moved from point to point well."
