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Summary

A skilled fighter, A prophecy, and a Threat. Will Cometpaw overcome all these challenges to save the clans or will he disappear with the Clans coming after him

Status
4yrs ago
Chapters
1
Rating
n/a
Age Rating
13+

Chapter 1

Cometpaw slipped through the forest silent as a mouse he opened his jaws trying to pick up a scent. He picked up the faint smell of shrew so he tried to pinpoint it soon he started seeing it.

He put his paws directly underneath him and put all his power into his hind legs and then he leaped batting the shrew down with his two front paws and quickly gave it a swift killing bite on its neck. After that, he promptly buried and set out to find some more prey he quickly scented vole as he was slowly stalking softly around the leaf litter I will catch this one and pass my assessment. He had failed his previous assessment because he messed up trying to catch a vole but had scared away all the prey within earshot trying." At least I caught that vole" he thought. As he neared the vole he noticed he was upwind which meant he could only smell the vole and the vole couldn't smell him he realized with satisfaction slowly he came within pouncing range of the vole 1,2,3, pounce! Cometpaw flew through the air landing neatly on the back of the vole and quickly killed it with a swift nip to the spine" yes!" he thought with excitement. As he picked up his catch and headed back to camp he noticed that some leaves were rustling behind him "Finleap is that you?" he asked. No response maybe it was just the wind he thought. Cometpaw picked up his catch and started to head back to camp suddenly something small jumped out of the bushes and landed on his tail! "Got you!" said Cometpaw's little sister Frostkit her little white pelt looked as if it was glowing in the greenery of the forest "you know kits aren't allowed outside of camp!" blurted Cometpaw. Cometpaw's nose twitched and a disgusting scent came to his nose "what is that smell?"Cometpaw asked then it came to him FOX! It was fox scent! He quickly grabbed Frostkit's scruff and ran back to camp. As soon as he went through the bramble entrance to the camp he was greeted by his mother Dewleap who also was the deputy."Where were you!?" she asked Frostkit. You can scold her later said Cometpaw "I think I scented fox in the forest and I had to leave my catch back there as well to bring Frostkit back quickly," said Cometpaw. It's okay Cometpaw, you made sure your clanmate was safe even if it meant you might not get to show off your catch that speaks for itself said Dewleap. "Go to your den and get some rest I'll report to Moonstar about that fox and your assessment," she said. Maybe I will be a warrior after all he thought. Cometpaw went to his den at the back of the apprentice's he curled up into a tight ball and fell asleep as soon as he closed his eyes. Cometpaw opened his eyes and the sun-high light filtered through the branches of the apprentice's huh what I am I doing here? Then he remembered that morning's events the fox had his assessment and ran back to camp with Frostkit he walked out of his den to find the camp nearly empty because hunting patrols were sent out just before he woke up "okay so today's assessment didn't go as planned, but that doesn't mean I didn't pass right?" He asked himself. Suddenly Cometpaw heard Moonstar say "All those old enough to catch their own prey gather under the high ledge for a clan meeting!" hmmm what's this about? thought Cometpaw. "Today one of our apprentices saved a kit from a fox even though he knew he might not be able to show off his catch which I am sure was very impressive this was completely selfless and what a true warrior shows so Cometpaw step up," said Moonstar. Now? Me? A warrior?! As he stepped up he saw his mother and father smiling at him. "Cometpaw do you promise to honor the warrior code and serve as a true warrior?" asked Moonstar. "Yes, Moonstar!" said Cometpaw. " Then from this day forward, you shall be known as Comettail. "Comettail, Comettail, Comettail!" cheered his clanmates. Finally, I have it...


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