What is your opinion?
Laura
"The relatability of the protagonist is admirable. I thought that this author is clearly skilled. The cover is straight gold! I was mesmerized by it, and wanted to read it so bad!!!! Some advice maybe is to not space your paragraphs as far apart as you do. Great story, just the paragraphs are non proportionate. Just maybe smooth that out, and it might appeal to some readers eyes a bit better. Other than that, GREAT JOB! Keep on writing, and keep on slaying!"
Good start, but needs editing.
"The overall plot of the first 2 chapters moves quickly. The main character, Laura, moves from one place to another fast, with no detail on the setting. There are quite a few typos and grammar issues, so maybe take a few extra minutes before post to check those. It definitely feels like a YA story, but it's missing something. I imagine that, if you took some time and connected the different pieces into a more flowing nature, it would move easier, making it less difficult for the reader to grow tired of it. You have a solid start, just take your time and go through it once or twice, tweaking small things, and I'm sure it'll turn into a great piece."
Laura
"I didn't finish the novel so I can not say for sure if the novel improves but from what I read, the novel needs a lot of work done on it. The description of the novel is the second thing that attracts a reader– the first being the name which you nailed by the way– and it carries a lot of grammatical errors and the author doesn't really explain what happens before moving unto the next and that is a horrible way to start as the readers are already lost before they start reading the novel. This alone makes you loose a lot of readers cause not many would want to carry on reading a book with a confusing description, but I did. And I guess, I fall among the second group of people who are willing to give the novel a try despite the way the description is. The first chapter confuses me even more than the description and as a result, I could not venture to the next. Although, there are may negative features that I believe need to be worked on, there are some that are really nice. The character Laura, seems mysterious and that alone is what will keep anyone reading. Many books have great settings and grammatical structures but not many have great characters. Laura is a great character who I would love to read her story. There is a connection between the character and the author which I believe can only be found in great authors. The plot of the novel from what I read is beautiful, and with the right explanation and grammatical structures, I believe it could become even more beautiful. "
