AB

Hi I'm AB, and I love writing and music! I also really love dogs and people. I'm a huge people person. Please email me at [email protected] for any questions or predictions.

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Strong!

Strong storyline, strong characters, and I loved it! The cover design is incredible as well, and you'll definitely get some eyes from that. I think this was an incredible start, and I cannot wait to finish it!

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FABULOUS!

I was reading, and reading for quite some time, but it was worth it! This book is soooooo sooooo good! The cover, (chef's kiss) and the detail! The detail made me fall in love with this book. The beginning captures your audience, and makes you feel like you're there! I loved that aspect of the book. The fact that you put so much effort into each chapter, is noticeable, and I do not take it for granted. I love it sooooooooooooo much!

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Choir problems

I love this! I don't see many narratives, and this one spiked my interest. Love the honesty.

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LOVE

Ok, like I'm in love with this story so far. I love high school drama!!!! I think this is set up for an awesome story! I love how she is the popular girl, and is very open about her personality!

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Impressive

I was reading this story, and I became so jealous of the author's writing skills. This is an incredible read with relatable characters, and brilliance in every chapter. To say I'm impressed is an understatement. This is fantastic.

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You've got some skills!

Gosh, this story I fell head over heels for. I could not put it down, and kept me on edge. The entire story, I found myself wanting more and more and more. There is not a lot of advice I can give you, except fix a few grammatical errors. Other than that, AMAZING! You are an awesome and talented writer, and I wish you all the best in the future!

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You've got a great set up!

I really love this story! I know it's just the first chapter, but I'm DYING to know what happens next! It was a great written piece. Really intriguing. One thing I'd like to note is that your dialogue felt pretty crammed. Maybe if you would space it out a little more, it would look a little bit nicer. Other then that, I LOVE IT. I think you are a fantastic writer and wish you all the best in the future!

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It's quite a start!

It's hard to say much for just a chapter, but I can tell this is set up for success. I like the school drama aspect, but some of the bursts of energy left me a bit confused. It made me think like, 'I don't think I would talk to my best friend that way.' Even if it's just a personality thing, I don't think I'd treat my friends that way. Just a note. Maybe in the future, you might want to adjust some of the language she uses. But, I do like it a lot! I will be watching this one for further additions! Keep on writing!

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Nice!

You've got a nice story here. I would love if you would space it out a bit. It felt awfully crammed. Harder for my eyes to read. There were a few grammatical errors I spotted, but I'm very picky, so it's probably not that big of a deal.

I loved the personality of the characters, the emotions, and the details. Very enjoyable. I appreciated the heart the story had. It felt like I could understand the characters, even though I've never been in their position. I don't really know why I felt this way, but I did. I think your story is dreamy, and I hope you continue to write!

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Craving more

I was fascinated in the characters. Their storylines intrigued me, and I was obsessed. You have a really nice plot, but sometimes it can be a bit confusing. Just smoothing out those would help the story a lot. A very well written and imaginable book. I hope you continue to write!

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I was hooked

I loved this story so much. I was on the edge of my seat, curious to what was going to happen next. I think you expressed emotions in Miranda very well. I constantly knew what she was thinking, knew what she was feeling, and I enjoyed that. I was hooked into the story.

Even though you've only got 2 chapters so far, I still felt like you were lacking description. I wanted to know more about what the mysterious doctor looked like. Like, was there something wrong with his coat, or his name? I think if you spiced that up a little bit, your story would be a lot better. I also noticed a few grammatical errors that could be quickly fixed. Also, when you're introducing her family and such, I felt like that introduction could've gone a little bit smoother. Make it flow into the story a little easier.

Overall, great story! I loved the suspense and the thrill of it. I am curious to see how it ends. I will definitely be waiting for more! I hope you continue to keep writing!

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Good start

So, I'd just like to say that I found it an enjoyable read, and I liked it.

I did feel like there was some missing plot. I don't know. It felt like there should be something more. I also noticed a lot of punctuation errors. It's harder for me to understand the story when I see those. I felt like there was a little bit of lack to Cassidy's personality. It felt kind of hard to understand her. In future chapters, I think you should expand more on her character.

Again, these are just suggestions. You don't have to take them seriously if you don't want to. I'm just trying to help your story a little bit. Overall, good job, and I will continue reading when you make new chapters!

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Great!

I think your story is fantastic! I think that it was really clever. I thought it was really funny that Zoey called those girls after their favorite potato chip or candy. I remember in Elementary school, me and my best friend would call the popular girls pimples, and the popular boys zits. We'd also give codenames for cute boys. I don't know. I just loved that detail.

Even though your story was incredible, I did see some room for improvement. Sometimes I found it unclear on who was talking. Also, try not using the word 'said' as much. If you use words like, hollered, or spit out, it adds more detail towards how the characters act. Just a suggestion.

I thought the smelling hair thing was clever as well. Because little kids are curious about that sort of thing. I liked how you described what type of hairstyle they were wearing as well.

I thought their friendship was adorable as well. I learned more about Damien's backstory as well, which I really liked. I think you did a really good job at capturing the different characters perspectives, and traits. It left me loving it. I hope you continue to write!

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I like it

I think you got something good going. I really love the detail. I love the MC's feelings. Overall it is very descriptive and an enjoyable read! I hope you continue to keep writing!

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LOVE IT!

Really great plot, and characters, and I appreciate all the emotions expressed in the book. Overall a great story, and you should keep on writing!

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JAW DROPPING

Loved it so much! The back and forth dialogue between the two of them was very well put together. I liked how the details were there, and I loved everything about it! I really don't have anything else to say except, if you want to read a good book, read this one!

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SO FRICKIN GOOD!

Ok, no notes for this one. I am loving it so far, and fans of romance will too! I think the situation of friend ditching friend to protect her was so cute and adorable. I read it in one night, and was obsessed. The detail is scary. I love the imagery, and how I could imagine the characters, and every little detail.

This is normally the paragraph where I give feedback on how to make it better, but it's perfect. The complaint I have is that it is too short, and I want to read more! So please update soon! It is such an edge of your seat story because of what I am wanting to happen. I want Sloane to be involved in everything! I really want that.

I think if you're looking for a read you can't put down, and you love romance, and mafia, read this!!!! The author (Love you!) knows how to write! Looking forward to reading more!

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INSANE

This one took me a while to read, I might admit, but worth it! This book was sooooooooo good! The detail of each chapter was so good. I literally closed my eyes, and imagined it. It was beautiful! I loved it with a burning passion! I would be personally offended if you didn't keep writing! Keep on writing!
P.S. Sorry it took me so long

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Author here!

So, thank you to anybody's previous feedback!!!!! It means a LOT. I really appreciate it. I think all of you guys are awesome, and if you have a suggestion for me, of a book to read, (Especially romance) please alert me!
LOVE TO ALL MY READERS! I'm not sure you understand how thankful I am!

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SLAY GIRL!

I thought this was so so so so good! I literally put my hand over my mouth when she was diagnosed. The suspense was downright terrifying, and I FRICKIN' LOVED IT! This had me wondering if this was a narrative. Is this actually something you experienced? If so, or not, the detail of the hospital was incredible! I felt like I was watching a movie, and it was incredible.

One thing I noticed was the few grammar errors. Not many, but a few. Some times, like I think in the first actual chapter, there was a sentence that was like, 'We made the championships. the'. Just make sure to capitalize the 't'. There were also some errors with not putting in periods. Just scan through it, and spot those small things. That's really all.

Also, I liked how your chapters were short. Long chapters lose my interest immensely. I was told, when I first started writing, that my chapters weren't 'Long enough' and they, 'Should be between 1000-1500 words'. Don't ever listen to that. It's your story, and your chapters can be the length you want. If someone says your chapters are too short, just ignore it. Long stories are often sickening to me.

I, however, enjoyed this story. I really hope you post more chapters, because I'm so curious on what happens next! Is she going to have to cope with it in her high school life? Like that's a good thing to write about! Not a lot of people think about that sort of thing. I'll be waiting for more, and I hope you write frequently, because I will definitely be waiting.

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Laura

The relatability of the protagonist is admirable. I thought that this author is clearly skilled. The cover is straight gold! I was mesmerized by it, and wanted to read it so bad!!!! Some advice maybe is to not space your paragraphs as far apart as you do. Great story, just the paragraphs are non proportionate. Just maybe smooth that out, and it might appeal to some readers eyes a bit better. Other than that, GREAT JOB! Keep on writing, and keep on slaying!

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SO GOOD!

It's hard for me to find a book I genuinely enjoy on here, and I found what I liked in this one. The plot blew me away with how frickin' genius it was. I loved it soooooooooooooooooooooo much. A pinky promise. AH! GENIUS! My favorite character is probably Skylar. She seems like a cool friend. But I also like how rounded out these characters are getting. However, I felt like it was a little fast paced, and maybe next time have a few more chapters before the hot tub scene. But, I did really really like it, so far. I want more chapters! I feel like it's be such a twist if they ended up NOT getting together. Because the basic romance structure is;
Go on first date
Go on another
Date
Find out one of them has something they're hiding
Falling out
Reunion
Happily ever after
I love how it's going so far. I really wat Chloe and Austin together, but again I think it's be cool if like on of her friends started to like him. That might sound insane, but again, no story is ever THAT perfect. But I LOVED IT! So please oh please oh please keep writing. I'M NOT EVEN JOKING! I love it so much!
P.S. Suggested this to a friend

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Dark, but incredible!

I thought this story has immense opportunity. A little dark at times, but I loved it! The smoothness of the chapters, and the creation you made spiked my interest. I really like this story for multiple reasons. One being this; I was on the edge of my seat the entire time. Really fascinating! I really enjoyed this story! I hope you decide to keep writing! I'M LOVING EVERY LITTLE BIT!

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So relatable

My best friend's parents are divorced, and I'm sore she could relate a bit to this book. I think it's brutally correct.

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So slay

I literally am in love with this book. The author is clearly very talented, and knows what they're doing. The description was jaw drop amazing as well. The relatability rocks, and everything was on point! So just keep on slaying queen! 👑

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Jaw drop

Ok, you're clearly showing off. This story is just so so so so so good. I love it! It was a little bit scary at times, but it is very good! I love how you incorporate characters emotions very well, and you are great with description. I think this story is genius! I love love love and I hope you keep writing! 💖

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VERY GOOD

I was reading this, and I fell in LOVE with it. Very well done. Sometimes, I felt like their could've been more description. Describing scenery, and face features better would be my idea for you. It's an incredible story, I thought that this story would be good based off of the cover. Super cool cover. Made me very interested in this story. I love this, and you should keep writing, and I wish you all the best in the future!

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Nice

It is only the first chapter, but I really enjoyed it. Very well done, great set up and everything. I think this story is going someplace great, and you need to add more! This was a fantastic well written first chapter, and I love it! I pray that you keep on writing, and I wish you all the best in the future!

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IN LOVE!

The first paragraph stole my heart. I'm not just saying that. There was so much description throughout, and it gave me chills with the descriptive language, and detail. I wish I could give you an award or something because, you deserve one. This is an insanely awesome read! I wish you all the best in the future, and I encourage you to keep writing!

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I liked it!

I'm big into poetry, so I'm a pretty harsh critic, but I really love these. I wish that some of them would be longer. Some of them would be deeper. But, overall I think it's a very good collection of poems! Keep on writing!🖤

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No words

There aren't many words for this story. It is just straight brilliance. Kudos to the author. I loved the characters especially. Very well written, and very awesome.

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Weak

Such a clever story. I really think this requires talent, and that's what you have. Everything about this story kept me wondering and curious. I think you've done a really good job here. Keep on writing!

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FANTASTIC!

This was a brilliant story so far, and I really have no notes. Just keep doing what you're doing and you're going somewhere great! Keep on writing!!!

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The Dangerous Elysium

There's only one chapter so far, but it's going great! The only thing I would recommend is smushing your paragraphs together. It's very spaced out, and it fells like you're trying to make it look longer, but other then that, great plot and story! Keep on writing!

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AMAZING!

Sorry it took me so long to read, but it's quite a long book! I love the drama and romance of it. I thought it was very clever. Everything I thought was clever and creative. The grammar was on point, the plot was followable and entertaining, and all around a great read! Great job! I'm really impressed!

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Blue Liaison

I think you are an incredible writer. I really do. This book kept me hooked for a while. I kind of sped read it, and really enjoyed it. I felt like you could've opened up the characters a little bit more though. I think that would've been better for the reader to understand them. There were grammatical errors like most books have, but that's an easy fix. There were a few plot holes, but I get that sometimes happens. Other then that, phenomenal job on this story. Great job, and I wish you all the best in the future!

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The lost Fae

I found this an enjoyable read! The characters were relatable, and everything flowed easily. If I were to give you some advice, I'd say add a little bit more emotion into your work. The whole story was great, but sometimes I felt like it lacked emotion. There were a few technical errors, but other then that, amazing. I love this story, and will be watching it closely for updates.

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Fantastic!

I really, and I mean really, love this story. It has a lot of details, blood, and mystery elements. I thought it was very well done. I love how you showcase Isabelle's thoughts very well. I loved how I constantly knew what she was thinking. In the first chapter, I loved the use of language. There was a lot of swearing, but again, that helped me understand the characters better. The titles of the chapters were captivating as well. You need to have a good title for the chapter so it doesn't give the chapter away, but provides enough information so that you're curious on what's going to happen when you click on it. I thought that was very well done.

The grammar bummed me out a little bit though. I loved the story, but it was hard to focus on it when I saw a lot of these things. I would encourage you to look over it for errors. In chapter 2, I noticed quite a few. I saw a few stray letters floating around, and missing punctuation. You need to make sure your grammar is correct so that the reader can understand it. Also, be careful with homophones. I noticed a few of those as well. Just make sure you're using the right word for what you mean. I used to struggle with homophones, but I did some online exercises that helped me with that. If you would spruce that up a bit, I would be diving in head first into this very well made story.

Another thing I really liked was the length of your chapters. In some of the stories I read, they are extensive and get quite boring. Your story did not suffer from that. I liked the length. I felt it was perfect for me. Sometimes authors often do them too short. That just lacks details. It's frustrating when that happens. A picture is normally not very well painted. Your chapters had a perfect picture painted, and did not bore me. I get quite bored in books sometimes. But it all depends mostly on the genre for me. Your genre was captivating and entertaining. I felt intrigued the whole time. I love this story.

It obviously was only the first 2 chapters, but I could get a sense of where the story was heading. I was asking myself questions like, 'What happened?' And, 'Oh my God is she okay?' If this was the effect you were going for, that's a job well done. This story is going someplace great! I will be watching for updates on this one, and will be hoping you fix those grammatical errors, and then keep everything else how it is. Because, this story is brilliant, and it's going someplace great. Give yourself a pat on the back for this great beginning, and keep on writing! I wish you all the best in the future!

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I love it!

It was very detailed! I really liked that. The beginning of the story was very well written, and it's important to have that so your readers aren't bored. I think you did that very well! You did a really good job! There were some confusing parts in the book, but you can probably smooth those out easily. But, some authors want confusion, so if that's what you're going for, then don't worry about it. Anyway, I found it an incredible read, and I hope you continue to write, and I wish you all the best in the future!💖

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ABSOLUTELY AMAZING!

This whole story was great, and I loved every single part of it. A few grammatical errors, but other then that, FABULOUS! You've got a really great story, and I'm jealous of your writing skills! I hope you continue to write, and I wish you the best in the future! 💖

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BRILLIANT

There are hardly any words to use for my love of this story. Gorgeously written. I played it like a movie in my head. I could picture every single moment, and I was obsessed. I felt like Chapter 2 was lacking a little bit of dialogue, which I might've wanted more of. This is also only the first 3 chapter. 3 lovely chapters. I loved the sass of Morrigan's character. She liked to create mystery. I liked that. I love a good mystery. It always drew me in like, 'Why does she want her uncle dead? Does he have a fortune she wants? Is he mean?' I wanted more answers! You perfectly put me on edge which I really liked. This story has an amazing start, and I hope it has an amazing finish! I'll be watching this one!

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OBSESSED

I think you've got a really strong story here. Great frame, middle, everything. The first chapter was very captivating. I was hooked from the cover to the details in the story. I felt you did a very good job with little details. Another thing I liked was that you did very well with writing out emotions. It was quite impressive. I felt like you did a brilliant job on the characters as well. From the start of this intriguing story, I knew I was going to love it. It was right up my alley. I really enjoyed it to be honest. I think this book is a wonderful book, and if you didn't continue writing, I'd be very offended. I wish you all the best in the future!

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Nice story

I loved the description on the characters, and emotions. I could feel like I could imagine the characters exactly. One thing I did notice, was that it was hard for me to understand the setting. There were some confusing parts.

Another thing was that I felt like it was much to short. I was surprised that it was only one chapter. It felt like there was more to it, and wasn't really lengthy enough for me. But that is just my take.

One of the things you did really well, was creating a good theme for the story. There was a good feel to it that I liked. I wanted to keep reading!

Other then that, an enjoyable read. Those things are just suggestions. I'm not going to force them on to you, but those things I feel will just make the story better. Overall, very well written, and I hope you continue writing! I wish you all the best!

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Fantastic start! Obsessed!

I really like the genre of this story. It has just started, it's not even really a story yet, but the setup is fantastic. I really loved the description. I felt hooked in the short chapter. I felt like it was greatly showing emotions, and characters.

There were a few grammatical errors, but any story will have those. Overall, very impressive. I am going to be watching this one for more. I envy your talents. You are an incredible writer, and I hope you continue to write! I wish you all the best in the future!

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AWESOMESAUCE

Honestly, I felt like I had bought this book, and this was a bestseller. It was also just the first chapter! I really have no notes. This was a perfectly edited, and created story. I really was intrigued on all levels, and admired your writing. It'd be a disgrace if you didn't continue writing with your talents! Amazing job, looking forward to more.

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Great book!

I really think this book is fantastic so far! But every author has room for improvement. No matter how much we deny it! Haha. You have a really great book going! I really love all the details, and the royal aspect of it! I love stories about royals, they entertain me, and keep me hooked! One thing I think you should maybe work on, is the dialogue. The dialogue is great, but at the same time, it could be better. Try not using the word, 'said' and be a bit more descriptive. Sometimes that's hard for me to, so if you see that in my book, so don't call me a hypocrite! I really liked how I felt like I knew the main character, like I know my friends. It made reading this story a whole different experience. One extra thing I'd like to add, is that in royal books, I really love knowing exactly what the characters are wearing. Makeup, hair, dress etc. It gives me a better mental image of the character, which I enjoy. I like imagining a princess walking into the ball with silky hair down her back, in a large ballgown, and her eyes lined with the smallest bit of black. I want to know your image, and your vision. I really enjoyed reading this, and I hope you continue writing. I'll be waiting! ;)

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Great!

The only reason I rated the story 4 stars, was because I'm not a big fan of the genre, but everything else was on key, and intriguing! The entire story felt very official, and I loved it! I'm a big reader, and this story entertained me. I hope you keep writing!

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Glamorous writing!

I really think that you are a great writer! The story had a great complex plot, and I just couldn't get enough. At some points in the story, it felt like there was a little plot missing. But other then that, 👍. I craved your writing style. It was elegant, and I can tell you've put a lot of effort into this. It shows.

I was intrigued at first. Mainly because of your amazing cover. It really is able to hook your future reader's attention. Sometimes, I felt like the story lacked detailed description, which I would've really loved if there was more of. Keep in mind that you want to paint a picture for your audience. You want a nice clean image. Sometimes it was hard for me to receive that.

Overall, I really enjoyed it. I thought it was well written, and creative. I hope you continue your beautiful writing, and I wish you all the best in the future!

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