What is your opinion?
Love it
"Great read!"
Very Intriguing
"This is a review based on 3 chapters. What I liked -Good chemistry between characters. Maya and her fellow cast seem to get along well. They don't seem to have manufactured conflict or annoying personalities. They are good characters. -Overall Nice Pacing. I do have an issue I'll point out but the general direction your story seems to have is a good one. It has a direction worth investing time on. -Loads of mystery potential. I like the fact that the story not only seems to play with the idea of time but is also set in a time period not many stories seem to tap into. What I might Have Changed/Considered -General Editing Fixes. Every writer needs them but the story is really affected by what needs fixing currently. That definitely makes it harder to invest time. Possible Fix. Grammar and tense would be easy fixes but if you also have a friend who can help, that would be awesome. -Better Pacing and Exposition Fixes. Audiences tend to not retain information when it doesn't immediately translate to plot. By that, I mean if you introduce a character in Chapter 1 with information that won't be valuable until Chapter 26, there's a chance your audience will forget. A good example is Maya's friend who has a backstory that might be forgotten very early on. Maybe if a chapter or two was dedicated to their friendship, it would really give the journey more weight. Some plot elements are also too fast for the story you're trying to tell. An example would be Antonio and Maya's relationship happens too early, considering Antonio and Alex's history. It ends up making Maya look like she doesn't care about that. If they instead built that relationship on the trip, with Alex learning to forgive Antonio, that would be more interesting. But a time-travelling mystery story is a success waiting to happen. I'm confident that with some fixes here and there, it would be nothing short of wonderful. I personally see the potential."
