What is your opinion?
Intriguing
"The short story brings to life a wonderful(ly deadly) world. The first person narrative makes the entire setting more intimate and easy to connect with. The reader has no difficulty feeling, seeing, and sensing whatever surrounds the "hero" of the story. The language is descriptive, eloquent. I would have loved to read more about the world that was presented, my curiosity was peaked."
Poignant
"The short story is simple and impactful. What I liked -Simple but Effective Main Character. I like that the story didn't give the main protagonist a lot of unnecessary baggage or backstory, just relevant enough to know what he's doing and why he's doing it. -Simple but Effective Conflict. The stakes are clear as are the consequences. The story offers nothing more or less and that's remarkable. -Great Flow of Thoughts. I think the story worked exactly as intended and the pacing was just right to convey the message. What I Would Consider -Colorful language It's a nitpick of mine but if you'll allow, some areas of prose work better with simpler words that instead convey more meaning. There can be a way to treat every single moment in such a grand manner that the peaks don't feel like peaks anymore. But I do know people who appreciate the style so I won't treat it as more than a minor issue. -Slightly more world building. Another nitpick if you'll allow but maybe a tiny glimpse more into the world you have cultivated in your short story might boost curiosity about it. I genuinely loved the vagueness of it and I think it worked for the most part but I wonder if there was one or two other placements of the foreignness would have worked better. Maybe if the tribe had another name for the mountain, or if their winter outfits were made from certain animals as a result of their faith. Something like that that evokes curiosity into wanting to know more. The fact that I only have nitpicks is proof of how much I liked the short story. You nailed it and I wish more people find the story."
