Tanique Adams

I'm Tanique and I'm a girl with a passion for writing. If you like my work, please review it! Thanks!

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Original and Interesting with a Good Lesson

Let me begin with all the things that made this a great story. It was original, imaginative, complex and relevant to the current dilemma our world is facing. As someone who has a Neuroscience degree, the complexity of BRAIN's neural network and functions is fascinating. This is something that I could imagine would happen someday in the future. I also found the religious themes and concepts a welcome aspect, as it's not often authors include these themes to such complexity in their works. This story offers a great lesson on how important it is that we come together as one to do what we can to preserve our world, so that perhaps we won't need to find a new one. It's a deep and philosophical kind of message, and I found it to be very refreshing.

The only fatal flaw I could mention in this story is with the massive walls of exposition text. The story does have a complex element , therefore some is to be expected, but this had so much at some points, I had a difficult time staying focused and even got a bit bored. As some other reviewers have mentioned, perhaps employing more of a show and not tell method would alleviate this if you do anything similar in the future. Also, it was sometimes difficult to tell when the scene had changed at times, so I suggest making clear distinctions on when the story is changing scene by using asterisks or Inkitt's divider. The average reader will lose interest when faced with these challenges or if the details are too much to understand or follow.

Overall, this was a unique and imaginative story and I think it captured the theme very well. I could absolutely see this in bookstores one day and even being adapted into a movie. Wonderful job and keep up the great work!

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Pretty Good Lesbian Romance

I read a lot of romance and even more Lesbian Romance, so that fact already made me interested. Having read through it, I can say this is a great story at it's a core, but may have benefited from a perspective change. First person views are easier and so the common preferred style to new writers, but it's not always best. Third person views are much better at giving a bird's-eye view of the complete picture and explains the situation fully, rather than just what each character is thinking in the moment. I can say this now because I've experienced this personally. I used to be a solely First-Person writer, until someone pointed out the same thing to me and now I only write in Third-Person and I've found my stories and writing skill have improved as well.

Despite this, I find you write very well and your prose is enjoyable, so it makes up for the limited scope of story view. I think this story is great overall, and I'm happy to have read it. Please continue to write more, and I will surely be willing to read your future work.

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Interesting read.

I've read through Chapter 20 so far and I really like where the story is going. It's a very interesting concept and I really like seeing the growth that Jay is displaying. I'm curious to see what comes of the major predicament the cast finds themselves in and am eager to know how it'll all end up. The romance between the main pair is sweet and enjoyable, so I'm excited to see how that develops as well. There's some editing and grammar issues, but the plot makes up for it and it's not hard to become hooked. It's a great story so far, and so I definitely recommend it.

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Interesting and addictive, but feels incomplete.

I found the general plot to be interesting and I found myself a bit addicted and on the edge of my seat to know what happened next. The relationship between Drew and Roccio was sweet and felt natural, making it one of my favorite aspects of the story. Technically, the writing was well done even as first person, which I tend to shy away from and there were only a few grammatical errors I can recall. I think it was a great story overall, but it's in desperate need of a continuation. I felt that the end was a bit rushed or maybe abrupt would be more appropriate. Great job however to the author, as the story was definitely a compelling one and I'd love to read more.

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A Dark and Twisty Journey of Self-Discovery and Love

When I read the synopsis for this story I was intrigued because I love reading wlw stories and Romance in general. I knew it would have mystery elements as well from the tag, but I definitely was not expecting what I got. This was a story about wanting to discover your past, but it becoming a far more dark and twisted journey than it first seemed. Imagine finding out everything you thought you knew about your parents was a lie and that there were mysterious forces out there looking to keep you in the dark. Add in the ex from the past you wanted to forget tagging along and you have a complicated romance. This all interweaves into a crazy adventure that will keep you glued to you screen and have you feeling a wide array of emotions.

Technically, the story was well written and the plot was well executed, though the ending almost seemed a bit abrupt. However, this didn't take away from the overall experience and still proved to be satisfying. There were some grammatical errors present, but that's to be expected in a work that was ongoing. Overall, I really enjoyed this story and the romance was complicated but also sweet. I'd definitely recommend this to anyone that loves a good mystery with romantic themes. Great job!

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A sweet read.

I'm a romantic, so I tend to pick up as many Romance stories as I can and Need Someone was one of them. While the story isn't exactly anything new plot-wise and most will know where it's going, the execution was done in such a way that you still were eager to see the journey. I loved reading the progression of Sabine's and Ziggy's relationship and the dynamic they shared. The tension between them was quickly apparent, but things became much deeper than such shallow sensations. I could feel their emotions as though I was experiencing them myself. The use of first-person was better than most I've seen, however I personally would have liked to know more about Ziggy's inner feelings. However as a whole, this was a great story that I enjoyed and I recommend it to other romance lovers as it won't disappoint.

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