Original and Interesting with a Good Lesson
Let me begin with all the things that made this a great story. It was original, imaginative, complex and relevant to the current dilemma our world is facing. As someone who has a Neuroscience degree, the complexity of BRAIN's neural network and functions is fascinating. This is something that I could imagine would happen someday in the future. I also found the religious themes and concepts a welcome aspect, as it's not often authors include these themes to such complexity in their works. This story offers a great lesson on how important it is that we come together as one to do what we can to preserve our world, so that perhaps we won't need to find a new one. It's a deep and philosophical kind of message, and I found it to be very refreshing.
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The only fatal flaw I could mention in this story is with the massive walls of exposition text. The story does have a complex element , therefore some is to be expected, but this had so much at some points, I had a difficult time staying focused and even got a bit bored. As some other reviewers have mentioned, perhaps employing more of a show and not tell method would alleviate this if you do anything similar in the future. Also, it was sometimes difficult to tell when the scene had changed at times, so I suggest making clear distinctions on when the story is changing scene by using asterisks or Inkitt's divider. The average reader will lose interest when faced with these challenges or if the details are too much to understand or follow.
Overall, this was a unique and imaginative story and I think it captured the theme very well. I could absolutely see this in bookstores one day and even being adapted into a movie. Wonderful job and keep up the great work!