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Lovely

This was amazing! The characters, the plot, the writing. Seriously had me entertained these past couple of days! Adorable, funny, adventurous, and I highly recommended read on my profile! Once again, bravo! You're got some major talent!

Terrifying

This. Is. Crazy. I'm anxious to read morw, but I'm creeped out at the same time. The DVD player and CD with the pentagram really did it for me. Not to mention the bit with the screaming yellow balloon and the cryptic message at the end to keep all the light on without elaboration as to why. Seriously, this was very well written and this is coming from a fanatic of anything horror/paranormal/supernatural. Somehow, this also reminded me of the Addams Family for some reason. Anyways, nice work on this! I'm waiting for chapter 2!

So cool!

I hope you update soon because I'm loving this Beyblade story so Mich! its suspenseful, intriguing, action-packed, and explosive! I love Beyblade (Ray Kon biased) and I think you're doing an amazing job with this! Please continue!

Awesome Idea!

Whoa....this is yet another great story I've had the pleasure of reading. Seriously, the story line itself is just so unique and different and intriguing. I was upset when it ended with the character expiring. I was hoping she would find salvation somehow. Anyways, I think that you did a great job of giving the reader insight on what's going on with the character emotionally, mentally, and physically as well as providing a reason behind the existence f the program the short people are in as well as its primary function. Well done on this piece! I'm loving your writing style too in case ti's not so obvious! You're a great writer!

Beautifully Written!

Hello there! Boy, am I glad that I ran into your story. All I have to say is that it was a very well written and beautiful read. The flow of the story, the plot itself, the characters, the haunting and angelic effect the story seems to produce. It was almost like a traveled back in time and I lived through what the main character is describing. I guess the fact that I'm listening to classical music right now helped me get into the story even more, but honestly, I think this is one of the best stories I've read in a while and I've been absent or a very months. Very well done my friend! Bravo! I enjoyed reading this very much!

Very cute

Aw, i think this is a very cute story. Personally, I always felt as thought Aries natives would have a better- if not the best- chance with a Leo. A Sagittarius second to that. Scorpio and Aries pairing sounds really strange and messy to me. Anyways, I didn't find anything wrong with this piece. I enjoyed the light feeling behind it, the concept (I'm a HUGE fan of the Zodiac), and especially the ending. Punctuation was great and the flow was easy to follow. Very nice work on this!

Fantastic

Hello there! I really liked this piece a lot. The suspense, horror, and mystery behind it really made this write worth reading. Honestly, there wasn't anything about this story that I didn't like. The writing was fluid and very well done, the main character was well developed and three-dimensional, the plot was intriguing as well as dark and thrilling, and the ending took me off guard. I didn't see that coming. Well done on this my friend. This is a very good one.

Disturbing

I honestly don't even know what to say about this piece. I've never read anything like this. It's intriguing, it's haunting, it's disturbing and gross in a lot of ways. I'm not going to lie: when I was introduced to Marcy and her mother, I automatically took a disliking to the mother character because of the way she would treat her own daughter. Like she was a mistake or an abomination or something.It irked me a bit. But after Helen's character was introduced and I got to read more about Marcy and Helen's 'close' relationship, I started to understand to a point why Leigh-Ann is the way she is with her daughter. In all honesty, both Marcy and Helen sicken me. The incest relations both girls have with each other, Helen hiding dead bodies in the empty rooms in order to collect money (obviously she killed them both but Marcy can't see that), purposely brainwashing Marcy into thinking all these terrible things are good things to think, say, and do. Man, they are both just so... whoa. I did not see this coming in the lease even if I did suspect that Helen was lesbian. But you, my friend, are a splendid writer! Just the fact that you have me ranting like this, paying so much close attention to the details of the story and feeling so strongly about the characters proves that you have a phenomenal gift for writing. Despite the disturbing plot of the story, I couldn't turn away. It was just one shocking twist after the other! Well done! The writing was great, the technical writing skills were great but with a flaw here and there, and the characters were very vivid and real. Nice work. This made my day!

Awesome Story!

Hello there! I enjoyed reading this story a lot! I think the story was interesting enough and easy to read without being bland or boring. The characters were well thoughts out and I like how you took your time telling the story rather then rush through it just to get to a certain part. The ending really surprised me though. Based on the genre of this story and how the male character approached the female, I thought the guy would be the one to do something to the female. I'm glad I was wrong. Nice job on this. This is a very good story.