Great companion piece!
I read your story and loved it as I rather enjoyed the Pirates trilogy. I felt the story flowed rather well and worked extremely well within the framework of At World's End. It was also creative and gutsy to incorporate an OC into such a well known franchise, however this was handled with respect to the original source and created an extra layer of interest for me as the reader. All in all, a creative and neat feel good story that will make you want to revisit the Pirates movies- I know that I did.Read the story now
Well written and engaging
I really enjoyed this story, but it was such a shame to find out that it hadn't been updated- I wanted to know what happened next. Despite the fact that the story was familiar, it had a unique feel to it even though some parts had been lifted from the original film. All in all, it was engaging and fun :)
However, I feel that it needs to have a list of translations at the end of each chapter to make it clear to your readers what the characters were saying in Spanish. I do not speak a word of Spanish and so it was a little bit difficult to understand what was being said in certain parts. In addition, it would benefit from a proof read and edit- I am a bit picky when it comes to these things, sorry :)
Overall, I enjoyed it and love the original source as you seem to :)
Great intro to the story
Ok, so these are just my initial impressions of the story (based on chapter 1). The story itself is interesting and engaging. I had no problem reading the story, meaning that it flowed quite well.
However, there were a few errors and typos (hence my rating of the technical skills) that slightly annoyed me, as I feel that it is important to make sure that the language eg spelling etc is as good as it can be. I understand that not everyone is fluent in English, and so I would suggest that a Beta is engaged for the duration of the story, as well as some initial proof reading and editing before updating.
Apart from this, I enjoyed your story and hope that this review doesn't stop you from continuing the story. I know that you may not want to hear the negatives, but by knowing how to improve your story, it can be the best it can be,
I would recommend that others read this story and would like to continue reading it :)
I read this story a while ago and didn't leave a review- blame my iPad for that! I just wanted to say that this story was well crafted from beginning to end with tension and suspense that made me want to read on to see what happened next :) Well done on an excellent story :)Read the story now
Loved this story so much!
Having read the entirety of this story, I can honestly say you have an absolute gift with words and creative writing. I fell head over heels into 1870's France and into the Opera Populaire and when the story ended, I wasn't sure that I had returned to reality.
The plot was very engaging from start to finish and the emotions were real. Out of all of the Phantom stories that I have read, your's is honestly the best and I keep coming back to it because it is my absolute favourite.
Having said that, the characters come to life, especially Erik/Phantom, who has to be my favourite literary character. You wrote him true to character and in a deep and complex way that keep me wanting more of him in each chapter. The same goes for all of the characters that Kayla interacts with including Raoul. You captured his character and made me love to hate him in a way that I hadn't before.
Thank you for this absolute gem of a story. If you ever publish it, I will likely purchase a copy and I don't say that very often, if ever.I meant to write a review a long time ago for this story, but never got around to it. I really enjoy this story and can't wait for an update on this story.. As a long time fan of Phantom of the Opera, this story does justice to the original source!
Also, I really like the cover art of the Opera Populaire, moreso than the roses that used to grace the cover!
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