varckk

Yo, this is so weird and I love it

As a fellow horror writer I loved this short story and I'm exited to see where this is going.

It grabs you from the start

The story concept is interesting and I'm genuinely intrigued to find out what happens next. I do have some issues with the writing style though, it could definitely use more editing and as of now the pacing feels a bit sluggish at times. I think the earlier chapters can benefit from adding more information about the main character so we can have a better idea of what they are about.

Grabs you from the start

I love the fast pacing and the mix of gore and humor. You get the idea right away what the main character is about and I feel exited to see where this story goes.

A fun short read

I liked the story, but I feel it would do better as a one-shot comic rather then a short story. For a short story it has too much dialogue and characters, whose names are hard to remember as the plot progresses. I would personally give them a character trait which can stick to the reader's head instead of a name. The writer is good, the only gripe I have is there are a lot of sentences with similar structure. Overall it's a fun short read.