This was fantastic! I can totally see this as part of the original series. The Doctor and River are perfectly in character and the plot works well with the cannon story. The only tiny thing i can think of to mention by way of criticism is i wish there was more "steamy" moments between the two. It always bothered me in the show how very platonic the Doctor's marriage to River was. I can understand being careful when you're dealing with a version that isn't involved with the other yet, but after they're married? yeah I doubt if River would put up with a sexless marriage very long, even if the Doctor would. But that's just my personal opinion. On the whole this was very well done!
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