There's really not enough in in the first to chapter's to honestly rate the contents within... Oh, the stories there.. but (How do I say this).. It felt... well like 'box writing'. The outline fought the storyline.. Okay, it was 'gangbuster's out of the gate.. strong... Then, as I read... it was like it was not quite sticking together, like you were reading the words of the story, but not the ambiance within the story. The description of the characters was brunt, almost 'injected' within the conversations.. I got no sense of being there... The storyline has a strong idea to it... more 'meat around the potato's'... more details around the story where your standing (In a read you should almost feel like your 'there', living it though the story, 'escapism'... you want to be there) This felt like it was a figment in the distance I could never get close enough to catch what I was reading.
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Again... YES a good story, Author has the right path... looks to be a lengthy novel... BUt needs to show the readers their actually THERE... I read the words, but there's... no cling to take me into it.
I WISH TO APOLOGIZE TO THE AUTHOR IF THIS SEEMS TO BE A "RUDE" REVIEW / IT"S NOT!...
IT A WAKE-UP,-SHAKE-UP CALL... YES, GOOD STORY! CHARACTERS GREAT! INTERACTION FANTASTIC! but, it don't take me into the story.... i'm just reading the words... nothing forms in my head..