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Captivating premise

This is a great start to an interesting story. I like the unique way the main character is created, and the tie in with the girl. Im curious to see who she's looking for. There are a couple minor errors in punctuation, some of the dialogue tags are questionable. I would suggest slowing the pace down just a bit to set up the' meet cute' a little better. Otherwise this is a great story!

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Heartwarming

This is an amazing story, I couldn't stop reading it. With its unique characters and clever sentiment, this story could go far. It needs some polishing, minor punctuation mistakes and paragraph separations, and a few issues with tense. Brilliantly told, well done you!

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