You know I love your writing. I've read plenty of it. This one spoke to me more than anything else I've read from you. I don't know why. I don't know how. But I relate to it on a deeper level than I've related to many stories. Somehow, you literally took the thoughts in my mind and spread them out on a page. It's wonderful.
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The story in its entirety is amazing. Lots of wonderful details, funny quips, amusing background. I really like it.
The plot only gets a 3 because I want to see more. I want to see where this goes, love. So, I know it's not done yet. You're a wonderful writer, and you always work hard for what you write. I know you can do more with this, and I hope you do.
The style, as usual, is perfect.
And the spacing was a bit off in some areas, but I'm sure you have a reason for it, hence the 4 in technicality.
All in all, I loved it. Please, please add more to this. It's such a good little hint of a truly wonderful work of literary art, my dear. Please continue writing.