I just stumbled into this account a mere hours ago, but I can already tell you have a great talent for conveying emotions through the simple acts, (great showing not telling!). This one-shot was also enjoyable, but I found a few things that left the reading experience a tad lackluster. I advise to possibly reconsider the summary, because it heavily focuses on Sean, so you'd expect his narrative not Anna's, and it also included context that wasn't really tackled throughout the story itself. I don't know if I have read it wrong, but it felt like Sean was dismissive, and minimized the complaints and discomfort of his wife, who's essentially suffering the most by carrying his child. I'm not sure if he was supposed to learn to take responsibility with this baby, but it didn't seem like it was happening in this version, at least to me. Again, I might have read it in a certain manner. Personally, I prefer the original version of this one-shot, but again, you're amazing with description.
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