Yagami19

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Hi! I’m looking for honest and constructive feedback on my story, Perspective.
This is a personal writing project that I’ve been working on and improving over time. I’d really appreciate it if you could read it and tell me honestly what you think—not just about what works, but also about what doesn’t.
I’d especially like feedback on the story, characters, pacing, suspense, atmosphere, dialogue, emotional moments, and overall flow. If something feels confusing, rushed, predictable, unrealistic, or unnecessary, please tell me. Don’t worry about being too critical—I’d rather know what needs improvement.
You don't have to focus only on grammar. I mainly want to know how the story feels to you as a reader and whether it keeps you interested.
This is still a work in progress, so your feedback may help me decide what needs to be changed, expanded, or rewritten.
Thank you for taking the time to read Perspective. I genuinely appreciate your honesty.

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