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The plot of Anonymous keeps the reader guessing as it clearly has a main plot and a sub-plot. Will they intersect at some point? We will have to read on to find out. The pacing was good, quick and tight. I would definitely recommend this story.

I do have a couple of suggestions that I think will improve the story overall. The reader doesn't find out where or when the story takes place until Chapter 3. I would really like to see more description of where the characters are; since I can 'hear' their voices, I would also like to be able to 'see' them.

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As for the story itself, it promises to be full of romance, excitement and teenage angst.
I think the author has a good handle on the development of her characters and made a good choice in using a first person point of view. Knowing that teenagers share much in their style of language, it would be helpful if Haley, at least among the other characters had her own distinctive voice.
Please take my review with a grain of salt, as I only completed the first five chapters. I do feel that the work would be greatly improved if the author had edited the piece a bit more thoroughly. I was distracted and pulled out of the story by the unintentional run-together words and the mixing of tenses (past and present) in the same sentence.