Aaron Robinson

Good so far

I found this book whilst going through the groups you were posting on, and I couldn't help but want to give it a read. I like the book, the plot overall is good, I am wanting to read more. My only hangup is that the POV's can be a little confusing, going from 3rd POV to Azure's POV within the same chapter confused me a little as I did not know what I was reading. The second chapters line spacing was all wrong and it was really hard to read, it's a little nitpicking but I'm a sucker for good grammar and formatting. Overall, I really like the idea, I think it could be great if you were to go through it with a fine comb and fix all the line spacing and punctuation issues that it has.

Please do not take this review as me saying the book is bad = in no way. But use it as constructive criticism in order to improve!

That end was not expected

I usually don't read these types of books but thought I would give it a chance and I'm glad I did. That ending was very unexpected, to say the least, I do wonder what Jack and Dana are doing. The one thing that I would do is try and go through the book with a fine comb and work out the kinks in the punctuation and grammar, there were some words that weren't spelt correctly that could really hurt the book if you don't fix them - things like 'unfortunately' was spelt 'unforechanantly' - not sure if this was intentional but if it wasn't then I would fix it. I do like the writing style and think that providing you go through it - it could be good. I am interested to see where the characters go and any development that might occur as well. Please keep it up! Writing is hard but you are doing better than most who want to do it - you've picked up that pen and actually done something about it, Just keep going!

Good, but too many emoji's

I think that without the overuse of Emoji's the book could be good. Remove the capital letters and space out the book, add some filler and some more information about the characters that relates to the plot. Think of it as a fully published book - books don't usually have emojis. I know it's probably a little bit of a stretch for me to say that is what ruined it, but a lot of people on this website probably wouldn't read on because of the amount of Emjoi's included.

Overall, a good book, just need to edit it and work on the outline. All constructive criticism. Hope this helps.

Wow

This is so beautifully written for something so harrowing and hard to go through. I am so happy that you are getting your life back on track, it will take time but you will sort something out, I am sure. I am sorry that you had to go through that at such a young age and make so many hard choices you should never have had to. I hope you get to see your sister again eventually, and that your life is happy once again - and good luck with your degree!

Interesting idea!

Love the idea of this! Can't wait to keep reading