Aarvi

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Addictive

You are an amazing writer, the way you portrayed emotions in the story, the relationships, the cousin's thing and the most important feelings of a person. Everything feels so real yet so creative and out of the box. The story gives a perfect tour of the fantasy world correlated with reality as well.

Overall I love this book and waiting for part 2.

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Great start

Great start. As story is at initial stage but still makes things clear. Waiting for them to meet .
Overall story is going smooth. Let's see what's next
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I read upto the fight till now, but I really liked your story . I love the character of Claire , she is so dedicated towards her duty. You had me in rogues part , at one point you makes me belive that her birthday and story begins with her kidnapping but later the fight amazed me .
Just wondering one thing , if she is capable of doing magic , as her mom taught her about it and she is practicing from early age , then why didn't she performed some magic during the fight.

Little punctuation mistakes nothing else the rest is easily understood.

Looking forward for more
Overall amazing!!!
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Love this

This book amazing, I kinda need break from fantasy and mafia world, so I'm searching for some humor and romance and guess what this books pops up in my feed. I love this. Very well written. Emotions portrayed perfectly. Few grammatical mistakes but for the sake of this amazing story we can ignore.

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On-going (18 chapters)

Start of the story is nice, but later it confuses a bit as everything is going in past tense and then the scene with her dead mother, I mean it's little confusing you don't get to know that now she is in flashback and now the flashback ends.
After Destiny turns into vampire, she accepted the fact unlike other stories where a lot of drama lies in acceptance.
Really feel bad for people who died due to her bloodlust. Happy to see that after spending long time alone and surviving a toxic relationship, she found her brother ( the kissing idea was creepy BTW, sorry if I sound harsh but this is what I feel 😅) and love of her life, Taylor
I like their group, meeting all new people and they get along well.
Last few chapters are intense, every emotion in those chapters are portrayed perfectly. The plot you set up, totally surprising and unexpected. The water elders. I mean who expects them to be a villain, I think there is lot come.
Overall nice story, reunion is amazing, very well portrayed. Plot and twists are on point. Emotions are painted well. Amazing work.
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Early stage

I read the first chapter and it clearly shows Sara is a strong and courageous women who loves her husband and do anything for him.
Janet's character bit annoyed me, I mean whatever the reason is, you can't kiss or pretend to kiss a married man. She may apologized to Sara but it seems like something fishy is going in her mind.
Sara is brave enough to hit her with her slipper. Here u feel bad for Janet and her face but if we think from Sara's point of view she may did the right thing.
At someplaces punctuation mistakes spotted, read it once and you will know.
Great start
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Amazing

Your story is truly amazing. I like all the characters, very well explained. This story has capability to stuck the readers with chapters.
I really like the character of Blythe, she is strong, facing the daily problems like a courageous person. Instead of sitting and doing nothing she decides to set some rules for herself and fight the odds.
I really like her relation with father and Julip the mare as well. After death of her mother their lives get scattered but still she is coping up well.
Thomas I mean MacKenzie( if you know😉) is a strong, intimidating personality and these two gets along well.
Overall amazing
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Interesting

Your book is amazing, good start . It draws the readers more into the story . Uptill now story is going smooth not too cheesy ,with a hint of comedy. Both the characters (Blake and Amelia) are different and unique. You represented their personalities so well.

Little bit mistakes with punctuation, use of pronoun and create some confusion with tenses . Read once you will know.
I am also not an expert, so according to me your story is going well. Amazing!

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Full of mysteries

I really like the way you write. You are portraying every character's emotions with their P.O.Vs so well. The thing I liked the most is your not focused on only one character but every character holds their importance .
Zel and Lilium's friendship was great( this is what I got after reading upto 10 chapters) . I really wants to know what happens to Zel? Why he was so afraid to come closer to Lilian again.
About Lilium she is amazing, I really like the waves and vibes concept and I appreciate her daringness. She is unique in her own way.
About Ian, glad despite getting so much attention, he do not runs behinds the fake beauties instead he finds comfort in natural beauty.
Their duo is best I mean the twins.
Kiki, I know she is pampered too much during her childhood but she have to step out of her little bubble . I am enjoying the chemistry between her and Ian , the way he stands up for her. The way he encourages her.

These people get along so well. I hope it will help Kiki in stepping out of her little world.

About criticism, I don't find much mistakes. But sometimes I got confused about who you are expressing about. Some people needs early introduction to avoid confusion but when you continues reading you will find out .

Overall story is amazing, portrayed so well.
Characters are unique . storyline going great.

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Creative writer

Your story is amazing. You put your imagination into words so well . It has the potential to take the readers into a different world. I really like the Okinizeus, how badly he wants to live peacefull6vand attached with nature. Your imagination is truly next level. Loved it.
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Amazing

I really like the way you portrayed the emotions . They sounds perfect , you can feel them. Two groups with rules ,lots of mysteries and secrets to reveal . I really wants to know from Noah's point of view. Either he is changed or there is something hidden , yet to discover . Looking forward for Ava and Eva's story , how they are completely opposite , what actually happens with sophia's family , secrets between Lucas and Noah . I really like the character of Lucas , he is really helping and man of few words . I found similarity between the two main characters that they hide their faces .

Overall story is amazing with little punctuation mistakes .
You did amazing working , looking forward for more.
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Introduction

The name 'behind mask' and the introductory part gives little bit idea. May be its about today's generation how people hide their true emotions behind a mask . Well looking forward for more
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Quotes

Just read aal your quotes
Like the idea as you comes up with something different
Your quotes are amazing buddy!!
You can add more
If there is something or you are suffering , you can talk

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Good start , the prologue itself creates a suspense to the readers . It arise number of questions in reader's mind which leads to generate curiosity about what's going to happen next. Looking forward for more. Expecting lots of suspense.
Keep going!!! Its nice

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