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Startling

I don't know where to start, the story is truly amazing, perfectly portrayed with emotions, you can feel them for real.
Initially, I found wilder a little weird but later on, when you peep into the story you will get to know the truth.
Let's talk about Eli she is a lively person living with lots of problems but strong enough to deal with them. How hard it is for her to learn the truth about her father, then leaving the house of Lucas, leaving a person who is a fatherly figure to you, well I felt bad for her but still, she stands high to face the world no matter what. It's funny how she always spells vanellope's name wrong.😂
Then she met Joshua
Josh: a handsome boy with blue eyes as described in the story, heart stealer of lots of girls, totally funny, amazing, ketchup lover, charming, mischievous, self-obsessed boy. But you never know what a person hides behind that smile. That's what Josh is.
Josh and Eli are a perfect duo as best friends like made for each other type best friends. Damn, I admire their friendship, true crime partners no matter what there for each other. It's hard to read the ending where josh is finally leaving.
Eli meets Abe
Abe: again charming, handsome, blue-eyed, brown curly hair boy. Perfect with everything. A kind-hearted person. Who can see good even in evil, he is just too good and innocent for this cruel world. Always a helping hand when you need it. He gave Eli a new vision for life and helps her in discovering her true self.
Lucas: kind-hearted person, who took care of her baby sister so well, a fatherly figure to Eli, he did a lot for her I kinds of feel bad for their spoiled relation due to some circumstances but in the end, things are fine between the brother and sister.
Tris Baker: a strong person, facing all the odds, living her life on her conditions, broken from everywhere but still stands up against all the hurdles just for her grand mere. End hurts tris.

Let's talk about the story. The story is amazing it shows the true meanings of friendship and love.
Glad that Eli alet'set's let that the community centre which further leads to the friendship between Josh and Eli. Later on, she met Keith, Allen and others all seems to be supportive friends, there for each other but the bond between Eli and josh is next level. All their mischievous deeds and everything leads to a perfect path towards friendship. I think this is the beginning when Eli starts to realise that there is a life without drugs as well. Josh's love for ketchup is something else.
Keith josh and Abe are great friends as they know each other since childhood. I enjoyed all the bickering between them.
Dwayne is such a humiliating character how can he even think like this.
I don't know eli survive all this if abe is not there for her. After the incident of vanellope's kidnapping brother-sister duo gets back which is good for eli as she is already suffering from a lot. Finally, she went to rehab to get all clear and she met Tris, what a strong character she was. That chapter where she died was so intense I felt the emotions, I'm like why Tris, why you did this I know after grand meres death it's hard for you to breathe but at least give a chance to the bond which is forming between you and josh. He never felt for anyone like this before. He wrote letters to you. At least once you should give a chance to your and Eli's friendship. Those letters she wrote for everyone are so emotional. I felt and feeling bad for losing such an amazing personality. I expecting more between her and josh. When Josh was quiet it broke me into pieces. He was such a happy go lucky personality and all of a sudden he becomes quiet. Finally, Abe and eli are together officially. Elis birthday was amazing. Finally, she found a new way to live without relying on drugs. She can feel happy. Happy for that again things come to an end and josh is moving. The movie part was so sentimental. That stars part too. But the entry of josh out of nowhere lighten the atmosphere.
Let's talk about critics, I hope you don't feel bad. I am also not perfect but here I found some regarding spelling mistakes. Just go through once and you will know. When the scene changes and they indulge in some other conversation mention that other, wise it sounds so confusing. Some scenes create confusion in between the chapters read and you will know.
Over all work is amazing.
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Great start

Great start. As story is at initial stage but still makes things clear. Waiting for them to meet .
Overall story is going smooth. Let's see what's next
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I read upto the fight till now, but I really liked your story . I love the character of Claire , she is so dedicated towards her duty. You had me in rogues part , at one point you makes me belive that her birthday and story begins with her kidnapping but later the fight amazed me .
Just wondering one thing , if she is capable of doing magic , as her mom taught her about it and she is practicing from early age , then why didn't she performed some magic during the fight.

Little punctuation mistakes nothing else the rest is easily understood.

Looking forward for more
Overall amazing!!!
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Astounding

I'm in soooo love with your storyline. Everything, every chapter draws the readers deeper into the story. Full of mysteries, a perfect friendships, amazing relation between family and every character has their own impact.
I really adore the bond between Anastasia and Eliana. The twins are nice, protective towards her sister, the caring and possessive nature of Vincent and little scary description of Andrew at few point, Xavier and waytt and everyone holds a whole different personality which depicted so well. Every character is on the point .
I love the bickering and funny conversations between all of them. Insanity on a whole different level. This feels so realistic😁😁🤣. Already fallen for these babies.
This concept of supernatural world is amazing and the way you mixed them up is perfect.
Looking forward for more. Update soon
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On-going (18 chapters)

Start of the story is nice, but later it confuses a bit as everything is going in past tense and then the scene with her dead mother, I mean it's little confusing you don't get to know that now she is in flashback and now the flashback ends.
After Destiny turns into vampire, she accepted the fact unlike other stories where a lot of drama lies in acceptance.
Really feel bad for people who died due to her bloodlust. Happy to see that after spending long time alone and surviving a toxic relationship, she found her brother ( the kissing idea was creepy BTW, sorry if I sound harsh but this is what I feel 😅) and love of her life, Taylor
I like their group, meeting all new people and they get along well.
Last few chapters are intense, every emotion in those chapters are portrayed perfectly. The plot you set up, totally surprising and unexpected. The water elders. I mean who expects them to be a villain, I think there is lot come.
Overall nice story, reunion is amazing, very well portrayed. Plot and twists are on point. Emotions are painted well. Amazing work.
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Early stage

I read the first chapter and it clearly shows Sara is a strong and courageous women who loves her husband and do anything for him.
Janet's character bit annoyed me, I mean whatever the reason is, you can't kiss or pretend to kiss a married man. She may apologized to Sara but it seems like something fishy is going in her mind.
Sara is brave enough to hit her with her slipper. Here u feel bad for Janet and her face but if we think from Sara's point of view she may did the right thing.
At someplaces punctuation mistakes spotted, read it once and you will know.
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Amazing

Your story is truly amazing. I like all the characters, very well explained. This story has capability to stuck the readers with chapters.
I really like the character of Blythe, she is strong, facing the daily problems like a courageous person. Instead of sitting and doing nothing she decides to set some rules for herself and fight the odds.
I really like her relation with father and Julip the mare as well. After death of her mother their lives get scattered but still she is coping up well.
Thomas I mean MacKenzie( if you know😉) is a strong, intimidating personality and these two gets along well.
Overall amazing
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Emotions are perfectly painted in words

Your story is amazing. I really appreciate you brings this topic up. It will surely influence people to accept themselves and also others to be okay with people's feelings irrespective of their gender.
I love the way you portrayed the emotions in your story. It feels so real. You can literally feel every emotion of Micheal towards David. The tension you created between the two. Everything is going smooth with a perfect pace. They are not moving too fast with the things.
Initially I get confused with the characters, but as I continued the reading I get to know them. It draws me more into this.
I like little bickering part between Cathal and the other friend.
Your story represents an early stage of life of teens, how they deal, the way they feel. Everything on the point.
Overall amazing
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Interesting

Your book is amazing, good start . It draws the readers more into the story . Uptill now story is going smooth not too cheesy ,with a hint of comedy. Both the characters (Blake and Amelia) are different and unique. You represented their personalities so well.

Little bit mistakes with punctuation, use of pronoun and create some confusion with tenses . Read once you will know.
I am also not an expert, so according to me your story is going well. Amazing!

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Full of mysteries

I really like the way you write. You are portraying every character's emotions with their P.O.Vs so well. The thing I liked the most is your not focused on only one character but every character holds their importance .
Zel and Lilium's friendship was great( this is what I got after reading upto 10 chapters) . I really wants to know what happens to Zel? Why he was so afraid to come closer to Lilian again.
About Lilium she is amazing, I really like the waves and vibes concept and I appreciate her daringness. She is unique in her own way.
About Ian, glad despite getting so much attention, he do not runs behinds the fake beauties instead he finds comfort in natural beauty.
Their duo is best I mean the twins.
Kiki, I know she is pampered too much during her childhood but she have to step out of her little bubble . I am enjoying the chemistry between her and Ian , the way he stands up for her. The way he encourages her.

These people get along so well. I hope it will help Kiki in stepping out of her little world.

About criticism, I don't find much mistakes. But sometimes I got confused about who you are expressing about. Some people needs early introduction to avoid confusion but when you continues reading you will find out .

Overall story is amazing, portrayed so well.
Characters are unique . storyline going great.

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Creative writer

Your story is amazing. You put your imagination into words so well . It has the potential to take the readers into a different world. I really like the Okinizeus, how badly he wants to live peacefull6vand attached with nature. Your imagination is truly next level. Loved it.
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Great start

Hey ,
Your beginning of the story is great , I liked it. Things are moving not too slow, not too fast , on a perfect pace.
Here we get the idea that William is typical boss . Well a lot to come yet .
I found a little punctuation mistakes and the rest is perfect.
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Amazing

I really like the way you portrayed the emotions . They sounds perfect , you can feel them. Two groups with rules ,lots of mysteries and secrets to reveal . I really wants to know from Noah's point of view. Either he is changed or there is something hidden , yet to discover . Looking forward for Ava and Eva's story , how they are completely opposite , what actually happens with sophia's family , secrets between Lucas and Noah . I really like the character of Lucas , he is really helping and man of few words . I found similarity between the two main characters that they hide their faces .

Overall story is amazing with little punctuation mistakes .
You did amazing working , looking forward for more.
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So creative

First of all , you are an amazing writer Liz . I really appreciate your way of writing . The way you think is out of world. Your story is so different and unique. I really like the idea of immortal going to marry a mortal . I am looking forward , how this will work between the too. They totally opposite of each other . You portrayed the story in a very innovative way. I like those short chapters sort of poems or chanting , that distinctive . A lot of suspense creates a curiosity to know what happens next. This supernatural world ,you painted so beautifully with your words .

Sometimes I got confused with what's going on but its really fine . You comes up with astounding story , with lots of mystery and thoughts about so what comes up next .

Lets see how well these to get along . Lot of mysteries to reveal . How will she react when she found out truth ? And lot more questions.

Looking forward for more .
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Introduction

The name 'behind mask' and the introductory part gives little bit idea. May be its about today's generation how people hide their true emotions behind a mask . Well looking forward for more
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Quotes

Just read aal your quotes
Like the idea as you comes up with something different
Your quotes are amazing buddy!!
You can add more
If there is something or you are suffering , you can talk

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Good start , the prologue itself creates a suspense to the readers . It arise number of questions in reader's mind which leads to generate curiosity about what's going to happen next. Looking forward for more. Expecting lots of suspense.
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Nice

Till now I am enjoying this novel, with interesting plot . Initially where you describe kingdoms with unique colours , thoughts strike in my mind be like 'wow, that's unique' .
About Mr Red and Ms White, you are putting them along very well.
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Imperfectly beautiful

I like your way of writing with nice and understandable vocabulary, not too difficult .
Not much mistakes , easy going .

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