The story did a great job of telling what if Dumbledore was a villain. The writing is commendable. However, I am more a fan of showing than telling, so I would like to see more of that.
If Dumbledore was evil, it would make sense for him to hunt down and obtain the remaining Hallows and take them for himself. Perhaps it would make more sense to fit in his doings with his intentions. And what of his background story? Did he still have a dead sister?
Overall, it was a good attempt and I would love for it to do more.
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