Ahsia👊🏼🕶🌹

Beacon Hills.

A random girl who writes for fun. ALL MY WORKS ARE COPYRIGHT PROTECTED. Peace ✌🏼

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To Trap A Billionaire.

I enjoyed reading this book, it wasn’t a mind boggle and was far better than some that I’ve come across over the weeks while on Inkitt.

The book was smooth, sleek and pretty classic, a good read with a calm pace to it. It wasn’t a emotional rollercoaster which was a positive sign.

Rates:
Plot: 3.5/5
Authors writing style: 3.5/5
Punctuation: 3.5/5
Overall: 4/5

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The Secret Babies.

The book has potential to become a good read, the let down is mainly the sentence structures, punctuation, spacing and lack of research.

Character analysis isn’t very present nor is character description. The prologue is more like telling us what happened in bullet points, a prologue is usually a short snippet of the past or present and can be written in first or third person using minimal detail. Though it also depends how much detail the writer wishes to put in.

Also I’d like to point out that through the story wrote “Pick up the twins from preschool.” Also “The twins first day school.” Now in the book the twins only just turn 4 and in the UK infants don’t go to school till they’re actually 4 years old and in the UK we don’t have preschool, it’s nursery. Preschool is American not British.

I know you may think this is another bad review, but that’s not what I want for you to think. Think of it as a honest review, a review that you can build upon. I have your story 2.5/5 altogether because of all the errors. I know no story is perfect but it can be written to look at least its high potential, every story has high potential of becoming successful and a audience favourite.

Your story does have potential, but with a few tweaks here and there to help it reach its target. Now with the bad reviews you get on this story, rather than taking them to heart maybe you should use them as a ladder to success. What I mean is take them in to consideration and when you start to write your next story, look back on the reviews for this story and take in what areas you need to improve on.

The bad reviews are only there to give you a boost, they are there to help you improve and become better not to make you feel upset.

If you don’t have anyone to proof read, I suggest to try and find someone on Inkitt who will be willing to proof read for you.

Kind Regards,

Ahsia Naissuh.

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Marrying The CEO

The book was good read, interesting plots, well detailed characters and had lots of potential in gaining full 4 stars in replace of 3.5.

But the massive let down was the research, the story was based in the UK, yet I felt as though it was originally based in the US. Due to every time the character saying “High School Graduate.” Must I inform the writer in the UK there is no such thing as a high school graduate. In the UK we don’t graduate from high school, it’s university where we graduate from. So for the character to say “Nobody would accept a high school graduate.” doesn’t fit well if the character is from the UK.

But other than that, the book was interesting, characters especially the Male characters were well written.

Overall I give the book 3.5/5.

Kind Regards,

Ahsia Naissuh.

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What I Needed.

Not very happy with the book, story was bland, bleak and very long. The story had no gripping moments and had lost its thrill along the way, the plot was slow and the climax wasn’t really the best also character analysis could’ve been better. It seemed as though each character was exactly the same, the first and last couple seemed to be exactly alike. Both men met the girls when they were barely breathing, both looked after them, both had a attraction to them and it felt all symmetrical.

This story could’ve been better this book could’ve been done within 120 - 300 pages. Overall the book dragged a lot and it made me lose interest very very quick. But I still kept reading because i prefer to not leave a book halfway read plus I also thought the book would improve over the upcoming chapters but it didn’t.

I’ve given this book 1.5/5 stars.

I understand that’s it hard to write a book and take time out for it to be written. I also understand how hard it is to deal with writers block, as I’m a writer myself. My written work isn’t published on here because I haven’t had the opportunity to write them up properly and publish them. But just know I do understand and also don’t take my review as a review, take it as a gateway to help you broaden your mind more towards successful writing.

Also another thing the book has a bit too many mature scenes, if the mature scenes were somewhat kept minimal it would be better, for the readers could then focus a bit more on the plot line.

If you think that whatever I’ve written isn’t fair and not appropriate then must I tell you that I am only trying to help aspiring writers.

Kind Regards,

Ahsia Niassuh.

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Stolen Moon

Stolen Moon,

The book was good, it was a good read; not gripping though.

Despite all the pros regarding the characters, there was still that cliche scenario where the girl falls for the guy yet constantly fights against her growing feelings. Also I think had she been more strongly adamant on her first mission which was to accomplish in getting the role of Beta of her pack passed on to her, the book would’ve been somewhat a strong read. Also there were a few spelling mistakes as well as some grammatical errors.

Throughout the book I disliked one character, her dad. The fact that he wasn’t supportive of her idea made me dislike him the most.

What I liked about the book was the character analysis, especially Magnus. Though every time I read name the thought of the mortal instruments kept coming to my head.

I hope there’s a sequel would like to know what Sigvard mate would be like. Sigvard in a way reminded me somewhat of Stiles, he had this funky cocky playful and sarcastic attitude but he also had a alternative side which came towards the end of the book. I’d say he was my most liked character throughout the book because he somewhat balanced the books humour along with Magnus’ beta and Thane.

But everything to one side, I rate the book a strong 3.5/5 stars.

P.S: The end twist of the twin was a good line, but the fight wasn’t very entertaining and neither detailed properly.

Regards,

Ahsia Niassuh.

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Painted Scars

There wasn’t really much to this story, which is kind of a down side to it. But the story was well written, intriguing and captivating all at the same time and was a really good read. The rape issues were pretty traumatising but were the writer has done a excellent job on showing casing each characters raw emotions based on the topic.

I liked how both the lead’s became each other’s cure and reason to fight. Though the books cons is that there wasn’t really a sense of much ups or downs, it felt as though it was going at a single slow pace with only minor bumps and drops here and there.

Also there was a plot hole within the story, what happen to the lady who assaulted Shade where did she disappear to after her mate and daughters were killed?

Overall I rate the story 3.5/5 stars, this book was really good but it also reminded me of a fantastic werewolf trilogy I read on Wattpad 4-5 years ago.

The Volkov Brothers Trilogy by Monstreph.

Kind Regards,

Ahsia Naissuh.

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Eclipse Child.

The story was really gripping and had a very good roller coaster feeling to it. It wasn’t too dramatic at the high points and it was too depressing at the low points. It was level on both sides and it balanced well with the story’s plot.

The characters were well written expect on Orion’s part. His character was very vague the writer didn’t explain well as to why everyone was concerned about his way of shifting. It seemed Orion’s past was written in a jumbled up manner, it didn’t exactly make much sense.

The story had a few plot holes which weren’t much concern but other than that the is a good read. Interesting and very well detailed when regarding character’s emotions.

I give it 3/5 stars overall.

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Alpha Jax

The book is really good, interesting, but very similar to other fantasy books based on Greek mythology.

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