Aly

San Jose, CA

eLearning Developer by day, daydreaming writer by night.

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Will always keep you guessing!

(That awful moment when you realize your review didn't actually post when you made it weeks ago! I'm so sorry I didn't notice!)
Remnant is a mysterious young adult novel that follows primarily the experiences of a teenager by the name of Ethan. With the ups and downs of hormones and uncertainty, we navigate his struggles with memory loss in a new world where such an experience is common. But secrets have a way of getting out. Strange tattoos, "glitches," whispers, missing time, or memories that don't make sense. Some people know more than they let on, and some are just a bit too suspicious to trust. Who's the real enemy, here? How did they wind up here? What's real, what's not?
The strongest bit of this story is the foundation, a great idea. There's passion and clear intent in the writing, and I truly look forward to the next version of this. I will note that Ethan's perspective is my favorite. I'm not sure how much we need the bits from anyone else's POV, even if it gives us more information. I'd like to see what would happen if we only got everything from Ethan, how that would change the way the book reads?
Thanks for the story!

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Interesting!

This story is shaping up to be an interesting read! This plot-driven mystery follows a dreary highschooler named Frank in a town that definitely feels more Twin Peaks than anything else. Always with a subtle, eerie edge to it, we follow Frank and his friends as they begin to experience some weird happenings. A murder, a threat--things that seem to be tied to Frank's past. To top it all off, a strange new girl that's connected to it all shows up. But the real question is... Is she a friend or foe?

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Addicting

Clicked on a whim, stayed for the very likeable Persephone and her incredible relationships with people. I'm not done yet but I'll probably binge the rest just like I have from the beginning!

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Fun start!

We're only given a little taste of what's to come, but I can say I'm excited. The blurb got me trading, and the tone of the writing is easy enough to just keep going without noticing any time passing. I look forward to keeping up with future updates!

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Addicting!

Binged it all in one go. So what if I meant to fall asleep two and a half hours ago?
Just juicy and addicting. I'm loving this.

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Why did it have to end?

I desperately hope the author is still writing this. The snippet caught me and by the third chapter, I was in deep. Loveable characters, fascinating setting, and a plot that's just gotten started. I look forward to more!

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Great start!

Just a small taste of what's to come. It hooked me, and I'm quite excited to see what's next!

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Addicting!

I swear I read the beginning of this when it was first getting written. It was so strange to stumble upon this by chance to get to know the rest of the story. I'm not done yet, but it's hard to stop reading!

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Great start

Dean is dusted with powers and lives life selfishly and for survival, until a beautiful faerie named Myth gives him purpose a la prophecy.
This book is definitely a romance fantasy adventure. Told through Dean's eyes, we see things as he does, flawed and ironic as they are. The plot is fast in time and pace, but props to the author for allowing the reader to keep up. It's a polarizing style choice that only works with a lot of thought, and I feel as if the one consistent is a balance of reader information. I never felt "but wait, what does that mean?" which is definitely a must for a fast story.
The strength in this story is in the love. The descriptions of love are so romantic and sweet, you may get a cavity ;)
Kidding aside, if the author is interested in another draft, my advice is to just write more.
I'd love to see more pre-Myth Dean. Just a day so I can decide if I like him. I want whiplash from Myth's affects, and I feel I will get this if we just get a couple more scenes in the beginning exploring his life and power.
I'd love more Myth exploration. We're told of her power, but Dean doesn't see it. Maybe he could hear tales from Bob or accidentally walk in on her practicing. A little insight would go a long way.
Finally, a note to the author: your female lead is named Myth but you have no puns about it. I feel this is a Myth-d opportunity. (Half-kidding.)
Great, quick read!

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Delicious Vengeance

A lot of stories surrounding vengeance or revenge end with a sappy moral about how it won't make the victim feel better. I'm pleased to feel that this won't be the case. The first few chapters really lead be to believe that we will get a fully violent, sickening and satisfying end. This is a dark tale--no false advertising there. If you want dark, you've got it here.

We follow a severely tortured soul who is looking to torture whoever wronged him. Unfortunately, he wasn't able to get ALL of his enemies, and so now he must find a way to use his evil form to find relief from this burning hatred he has for a deeper kind of evil.

As far as improvements, you're already aware that a savvy editor can clean up some comma help, so I won't repeat it. But finishing it will help too ;) I look forward to a disgusting and satisfying ending!

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Compelling!

We follow a simple farm boy, Leo, on the cusp of adulthood as he navigates a horrible tragedy and crime committed to his lifelong village. A true fantasy, this story has magic, stories, creatures, and adventures. It is a lovely draft. I love the plot, I love the characters. With a thorough editor, this story has an impressive future ahead!

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