Aria Fermata Forte

Needs Character Development

While I do find something poetic in the way this ended, I never felt connected to any of the characters. I kept waiting for something to be revealed that made me like the main character. Something to make her make sense. And the husband and her family also never made sense to me. All of them seem very shallow as far as character development is concerned, even though the story is centered around them all. I would have liked to understand them better. Why they did what they did. Things that make them tick. Rather than telling me they’re all terrible people, show me. The one character I did like was the Duke and he had the most misfortune of all. That being said, the plot was compelling and kept me reading in spite of not particularly being fond of any characters. I did secretly wish for a happy ending for the Duke. There were some awkwardly worded phrases and a few grammatical errors, but all in all this was a decently written story.

Binge Worthy Writing!

The chemistry between the ML and FL is off the charts! I found myself rooting for them to figure it out. They seem very realistic and conversations flow so naturally between them. So much was happening in the second half of the story that it felt a little rushed in the end. Without giving anything away for future readers, I would have loved to have more details on the drama that was unfolding in the chapters leading to the end. That being said, the characters are believable, the author has a unique writing style, and the story is very well written. Definitely a must read!

Not My Cup of Tea…

But this might be someone’s shot of whiskey. There were no major grammatical mistakes. The plot is odd, to say the least. It seems like this is written simply with the intent to shock. If you are bothered by sibling relationships, do not read. That being said, this does not read as a believable relationship between brother and sister. Aside from the sexual aspects of their relationship, he has no regard for her as a human being. Which unless he’s a legitimate psychopath, could never happen. When you grow up with someone you’re bound to care about them whether you like it or not. So is this a believable bad dom story? Yes. But siblings? No.

Original and Fascinating

I’ve never read anything quite like this. The characters are complex and the plot is compelling. This is too good to stop reading. I can’t wait to read more!

Rough, Rough Draft?

I’m not finished reading. I needed a break. I’m typically a binge reader, but this needs so much editing that it’s quite difficult to follow. There are spelling and grammar errors galore. On top of that, there is far too much dialogue, much of which seems awkward unlikely. The story could use a lot more character development and more details overall. I’d love descriptions of places, more emotions, more thoughts, more actions. That being said, I think this has potential. The plot seems interesting. It just needs more meat.

Interesting Plot, but Needs Editing

This story definitely could use some editing. There are a ridiculous number of repetitive words and phrases. My advice is to remove every single usage of “sit there,” “sit here,” “almost,” “truly,” “whatsoever,” “eventually,” and “seriously.” There are some grammar and spelling issues as well and the formatting is odd. The dialogue is very unnatural and stiff. All the characters use the same awkward wording. Adding some word variety would help with this immensely. The plot is interesting, but could be summed up with the following two excerpts: “It didn’t take him long to eventually say something” “I felt like a broken record.” Overall, it reads like a student who is trying to get to their page count on an essay by adding “fluff” words and by repeating the same sentences over and over. Which, for me as a reader, really detracts from the plot.