Harper

A smol bisexual fangirl with a dream to share her stories with the world...

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A great read

I haven't gotten very far into the book, because the themes were a little intense for me. But I didn't think it would be fair to leave without letting you know how good I thought it was.
The plot and characters are well-structured and feel real. It moves forward very well without seeming rushed or too slow due to too much filler content. It's that happy medium in between.
I love your writing style, from the way you describe the things in the story to just giving us some basic info. Even speech styles are well appreciated.
I don't think I've noticed a single error. Not bad punctuation, poor grammar, everything is perfect. And that's when you know a book is good, because they put time and effort into making it a good read.

This book isn't my style, but that doesn't mean it wasn't a great read. I hope others see how wonderful this book is and give you the appreciation you deserve.

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I loved it!

I love all the emotions this put me through and I love how you describe things. In most places the grammar and punctuation are on point, which makes it easy to read! You've done an amazing job!

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I have no words

This story is amazing! I clicked on your profile a while back because Inkitt recommended it to me, and decided to check out this story. And I'm impressed!
Right at the start you show the external and internal conflict between characters and paint images so well I'm practically watching a movie! (That compliment made no sense, but I hope ya get what I'm saying)
The plot is kind of confusing at some points, but most it's easy to follow. Might I suggest writing a bit of background information instead of just focusing on characters? You might've already done that, but if I'm not in "The Zone" I tend to skim-read. Just let me know if you already did that because now I feel bad.
I never notice any grammatical errors, and your writing style is just so beautiful!
Well, somehow I'm getting writers block over a review so I'll just be done.

But still, I'm going to tell my friends about this story and how well-written it is!

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This is an amazing story!

I love your writing style and the way you built up the relationship between Draco and Hermione. However, it's a bit strange how it constantly switches between past and present tense. Nonetheless, I will recommend this to my Harry Potter fan friends!

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Could use improvement, but worth the read

So far, the characters are interesting and so is Realms Night, but there are some things that could be improved.
The plot isn't quite moving forward yet, so I can't exactly say whether it's good or bad. However, I do feel it's a little rushed. It seems like there was hardly any struggle with Adriana going with the mystery man. I'm not saying go write four pages of filler content on the characters brushing their teeth--you just need to find that nice in-between spot.
I might write a new review as you write more. But I do like what you have so far, it's intriguing.
I love your writing style, mostly the way you describe things. It's a major book turn-off for me when I see blocks and blocks of text describing a character we've barely met, but you keep it short paced yet still informative. We have a basic sense of who the characters are without wanting to turn away from the story because of how long the writer spent with background info.
You punctuation and grammar could use a little work, but don't worry too much or take that personally. I don't think there's a single story out there that doesn't need at least a little editing.
The main thing I realized was that you'd have several characters talk in the same paragraph, which could make it confusing until you'd read who said what. I haven't noticed that many spelling errors, so props to you for that!
I hope this review didn't come off as rude to you. I think this story is very intriguing and has a lot of potential in it once it starts moving.
I'm excited to see what will happen next.

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My only regret is not reading sooner

I wish I'd had time before to read this right away, but I'm glad I'm getting to it now!
The characters are all different. Each and every one has their own unique speech style, and you can especially tell the difference with the Apions and the teens. They all are unique and interesting in their own way.
The thing I think I enjoy most about this story--aside from the mysterious, intriguing plot--is your writing style. It's in a third person point of view, yet in present tense, kind of like the style of The Hunger Games, but with your own little twist to it. I've never read a book in this style, with such eloquent wording yet so simple and easy to read, and so immersive, too--as if you're actually in the story.
The only real thing that can be improved is the punctuation; mostly problems with commas. Maybe I'm just a grammar Nazi, but I've noticed on several occasions some errors repeated. For example, you often end the sentence with a period, then keep it going even after it's been split in two. I'd suggest changing them to commas or adding more to the next sentence to make it flow better.
I've also noticed some random letters here and there, but you can easily tell you just accidentally typed them. I'd say a round or two of editing should make this perfect.
Overall, I think it was a really good read, and I'm excited to see what happens next. I wish I could rate this 4.5 stars, because four seems a little low.
Keep up the great writing!

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Cliffhanger!!!

First off, cliffhanger??? Don't do this to me, the suspense is to die for!
The plot? Ah-mazing! You've managed to capture the clichΓ©s of new-girl-in-school and make them intriguing.
Your writing style? I love it. Short but descriptive sentences and a realistic point of view are a win-win for me!
I'm really looking forward to the next update!

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In love already

I'm already blown away at how well you describe characters (something I struggle with), develop their personality and give a real hook to the story, all in one chapter!
I picked up very few grammatical errors, and apologize for only giving the plot 4 stars. I might change it when there are more chapters, though!
I'm already loving the characters and I can't wait for more story to come.

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hAlP i LoVe HeNrY tOo MuCh

I love this book so much because Henry Danger has been one of my favorite shows on Nickelodeon for a while, along with my sister! It's pretty underappreciated, which is why I was so eager to pick up this story.
While your technical writing skills could use some improvement (no offense), your actual writing style is really cool and creative! (By the way, the "Grammarly" app could help with spelling and punctuation suggestions)
I really like the plot so far and I feel you've done an amazing job of creating the characters just like the show. As a tiny Inkitt fanfic writer who's only seen the movies and tv shows for things I like writing, I find that incredibly hard to do.
I'll try and recommend this to some of my Henry Danger fan friends! Peace out! *peace sign bc I'm on PC so no emojis*

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Hidden Marks

This story is too good to put down! I've seen the post on pinterest and I was just wondering when someone was going to write it, so here we are!
I can't even put into words how much I love this, but I do have a theory.
In the post, I saw a comment where it was her hair or something that could naturally be a mark, so I'm wondering if that's the case. Also, I'm 99% sure Jocelyn bumped Cohen.

I'm in love with your book and can't wait for the next update!

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Good plot, not so much spelling or grammar...

I picked up this story because Draco Malfoy has *always* been one of my absolute favorite Harry Potter characters, and I was always upset we didn't see more of him. I like how you introduce his parents with more personality than the books or movies show, because we don't get to see them often. I love finding fanfictions like this because they're so full of life, but if you take constructive criticism, I'll say where I thought things could go further and how I think the grammar and punctuation could improve so that more people will read this amazing book!
One thing that really stood out to me is that every sentence ends in a period. However, when writing, that's not always needed. You can end the sentence in a question mark, exclamation point or a period, but after that you don't need to add another punctuation.
Another is that when adding quotation marks, if you need to add a space, add if before, not after, you put the quotation mark down. For example:
" This will split up your writing and make the paragraphs a little strange ".
"But adding a space beforehand will ensure it works out fine!"
I don't really notice any capitalization problems, but a couple spots could've had commas or something.
As for where the story could've gone further, in the first scene with Voldemort you could've given more context on how he knew about the books. And when they first see Draco's sister, I'd love it if you gave just a tad more description.
No hate, just trying to help! I saw two other reviews that said the story had bad grammar, so I thought I could help. Thanks for reading my review and keep up your amazing writing journey!

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Suspension is killing me!!!

I love this story because it's interesting and always keeps the reader on the edge of their seat. I'm dazzled at how you describe Montana's emotions, and how she's torn between the two boys.
I love how you describe the characters and make them sound so vibrant an interesting and developed. I also think it's crazy how you manage to bring out some of the details about people she admires in a good way, but when the mood shifts it can be used against them when describing the people.
The only thing I don't love about this story is some of the grammatical errors. On a few occasions I've been confused because of two sentences bleeding together or some spelling errors. So I can't really rate five stars on that. Then again, when can you on Inkitt?
Nevertheless I'm recommending this to all my friends and followers and I can't wait to see what you do next!

(P.S, I'm thinking she's gonna meet Isaac in the mall while she goes with Harrison)

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Outstanding talent!

This book is crazy awesome! Your writing style is amazing and I love how much conflict there is between each and every character -- especially Abhaya and Theo.

I'm only 2/3 of the way done, and I don't know how this could get any better!

Keep up your outstanding work!

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This is outstanding!

I love how you wrote Adrien's side of things, because we usually don't get to see much of him besides when he's Cat Noir. I love how you painted a picture of what's normally a happy, joyous boy into an abused, depressed teen.
The only thing I could say isn't ideal about this is how little of Ladybug, Cat Noir and our other three heroes in this, but I guess this is a story about his life, not a superhero.
Anyways, I'm dazzled by your work and I can't wait to see the whole outcome of this story!

Keep up with your Miraculous writing --

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I love it!

I loved this story from the start! From the way her identity was accidentally revealed to the way everyone treats her, it's downright amazing!
I love your writing style and I love your whole plot, and I will definitely be recommending this to my (simply miraculous) friends.
What, cat got your tongue? Make some puns? OK, I'm done.

Bug out!

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I loved it.

I loved the plot of the story. I loved the relationship development and all the plot twists as well. The punctuation is off in some places, but the overall story is such a treat that that's ignored.

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