Nice and warm.
I liked the way how you described every single detail poetically and the plot. And there are things that i would like to point it out for you to improve, only as a reader not as a writer. Too many nicknames for Mila and everyone calling her with different names makes me confused while reading. It would also be nice if you don't switch POV's often in a single chapter. I get it that you want to cover everyone's thoughts and emotions but it will only confuse the readers and makes them lose interest in reading further. There are some grammatical mistakes switching from past to present but its not a big deal, you can correct it once you do your proof reading. So overall it's a nice story. I could actually imagine me being there reading your words and it makes me feel warm. Don't worry there is still room for improvement. Try to read your own story as a reader, it will help you a lot to make this wonderful story of yours into a perfect one. Good luck on your story and i hope that you enjoy every single step of this journey -T😊👍
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