Black_Heart♥

Erotic one shots

Awesome collection of stories. Loved the way of your writing and expression of emotions. Keep up the good work and enjoy writing.😊

Good

The plot you chose is good. But first of all, you might wanna write more to a chapter. Your chapters are too small. At least try to write 1500 words for each chapter. You are good with the words and delivery. Just try to extend it a bit more and let the readers feel what you feel.
And then there are spelling mistakes and punctuations misplaced but you can correct them when you proofread but try to upload an edited chapter which makes it better for the reader.
Overall nice story, keep up the good work and enjoy writing 😊

Unique plot

I can see you did a lot of behind work to write this story. This is a unique plot and I was hooked immediately. The only thing is I haven't understood a single thing that you wrote on the first page. I mean I don' understand the link between that and the story. You might wanna explain it more simply for the readers to understand better. Overall all it's a good story and you did a better job at portraying it. Keep up the good work and enjoy writing😊

Whi is my husband

Nice story but needs a lot of editing which I am sure the author is working on it. I hope readers gives this a chance to this story and help the author to grow. This story has the capability to grow into something more and I am looking forward to see it.

Amazing!

Your stories are really underrated. I just read two of your stories in 2 days. I loved each every chapter and the it took me on an emotional rollercoaster ride. ❤️

Loathing Ryan

One of the best stories I have ever read. It's amazing!❤️

Out of the world story!

It's been so long since mere words make me feel something, makes my heart race and my chest tighten. The author has a way of writing which lures you into her world and makes you stupidly think that you are the character in her story. One of the amazing things about this story is that it keeps you hooked from the moment you start reading and there were no dull moments. Her words and the way she depicted the emotions of the characters make me wanna just drown in this story and never look back on reality. The thing is... It's not entirely fantasy. You could actually see yourself in some of the moments where the main characters talk about their emotion and that makes this story more enjoyable.
Overall I really love it. I am gonna definitely finish this story once I have time and also gonna give it a shot at her other works. I am sure they all are equally amazing as this one. Keep up the good work author!

Amazing!

The author's got lots of imagination and I've never read a book like this. although I only read a few chapters I was amazed and hooked. I would definitely read your work once I got the free time. You were right Grant Ayers I do love your book.
If you are bored reading the same type of stories and looking for something different and fiction is your genre to go then I would definitely recommend you this book. Go for it and I am sure you won't be disappointed.

Read it!

I have just read a few chapters and I am sure it sounds like every other teenage romance out there in the first few chapters but it isn't. So go for it. i am sure you won't regret it.

Good

Nice storyline. Lots of potential to be a great book but I do hope that the author edit some parts, lengthen the chapters and cut out unnecessary parts.

Definitely attracted to the story 😉

The plot is awesome. I think this book has the potential to become something more once the proofreading is done. Good work author... Keep writing 😊

Bleeding hearts

The plot is so good and I like your writing style. There are some mistakes here and there but it's not a big deal once you proofread it. This is a different plot and I wish it would get more attention. Keep up the good work and enjoy writing 😊

My accidental roommate

Your story is good. I like the way you write. But it would be nice to read if you don't switch POV's often. Try to go with the flow and if needed you can switch Pov's. There are some grammatical errors but they can be sorted out once you proofread.
Keep up the good work and enjoy writing.😊

The feud

It's a great plot and I like your style of writing. It's just that making Andromeda's thoughts look like a conversation was a bit confusing to me. Other than that everything is beautifully portrayed. Keep up the good work and all the best for future chapters. Enjoy writing. 😊

In the dark

The story is good. I got hooked up in the first chapter. The way you described Eve and Ben's first meeting, I thought Eve already knew Ben since he came back again and all. I felt like the story was rushed, maybe it would be nice if you slow down a bit. But that was completely my opinion if you thought of writing that way then it's fine. Overall it's a good story and I wish you all the best for your future writing, looking forward to the next chapter. Enjoy writing.😊

Good

I hope you take this review in a good way. Because I am gonna be honest here, you have some serious improvements to do to your story.
First of all, you have to give a clear picture of your story in the blurb. Tell the readers what's interesting and unique about your story. Give them snippets of your unique writing to read so that you don't have to literally mention 'it's a cute story with an interesting ending.'
Then I think you need to improve your way of delivering. Try to write in a way that the reader can visualize your character and her surroundings and feel her emotions. It shows that you are new to writing or maybe English is not your first language. Either way, keep writing you will improve gradually. Please don't give up. Just read various books, try to understand different author's styles of writing, you will get the hang of it eventually.
Finally, grammatical errors which is not a big deal. Use Grammarly or some other app to check your grammar after you finish jotting down.
Your story has potential. Just a few simple corrections and it will be decent. Looking forward to your next chapters. Keep writing and all the best.

Wow❤️

So this is my first horror story to read...like ever and it's amazing. I love the way how you expressed Chris's emotions. Your detailed words made me felt like I was there all along. The most important thing about a horror story is the author needs to make the readers feel thrilled and on the edge and you did a good job on that. There are few grammatical mistakes here and there and it can be sorted out once you proofread it. Other than that the plot is awesome and I am looking forward to reading more of your story. Keep up the good work and good luck with future updates.

Good

I like the plot but then that's it. Please don't take this in a discouraging way. Your story has potential but you need to do some alterations. It feels like there is no emotion in your story. When you read a story you should feel what the characters are feeling and that is missing here. I wish you could put more emotions in your writing. Then it's a bit rushed and it's too hard to continue reading. It makes the reader to give up on reading your story. Try to form more words around your thinking and put some emotions in it and that's it... Your story will be perfect. As for the grammatical errors you can use apps like grammarly. I think your story has a better chance once you rewrite it. All the best for your story. 🙂

Amazing

The plot is amazing and your way of characterizing is remarkable. Apart from some typos and missing punctuation marks, I don't have anything to point out. I am halfway through the story and yet to finish it. Overall it's a good story and I am excited to read more. Congratulations and good luck on your future writings.😊

Very engaging story.

This story is definitely good and different out of all the other stories that i read before. The way you portray the characters and their emotions is excellent. Your way of telling story is different and the flow was very smooth but not boring. It gives you the edge and keeps the readers engaged. You are doing a great job and i wish you all the best.😊

Distinctive 👍

This is a great story. I like the way the flow of the story goes. There is nothing i can say about mistakes in this story than others have and it's not a big deal. This story is different from all the other fantasies i have read. At the end of every chapter you have instigated curiosity in the readers mind. Kee up the good work ang all the best. Hoping to read your other books too😊

Great story 🙂

So far so good. I like the story and where its going. Your story is good and you are a good writer. Waiting to read more. Keep up the good work. I wish you good luck😊

Love it

Love it. This is one of the best novel, here in inkitt

Five times

I love the plot and the way you say it. Overall its a good story. I can see that you are correcting some of the errors that has been mentioned by the readers. That is great. I don't know what to say because even i am a begginer. I wish you to keep up the good work and good luck for i hope your story gets published.😊

Great

I just started to read this out of curiosity because i am not that into this genre. After finishing one chapter i couldn't stop. I didn't finish it but so far its great. Your writing skills are amazing... its just different and amazing and i can learn many things from your writing.

trapping quincy

I love the way of your writing. I don't have enough words to say how much I love this story and the character Caspian. every day I am waiting for the next update