Chethex

Untapped Potential

This story has a lot of potential. It starts from the perspective of an ordinary person and gradually unfolds into a suspenseful murder mystery, which kept me interested. The plot is solid, and the mystery itself is well thought out. Personally, I felt the story could have had an even bigger impact if it had taken a little more time with its pacing. More space for character interactions and bonding would have made the emotional moments stronger, and stretching the suspense a bit longer could have made the mystery even more gripping. I think a slightly longer story, written in the same style but with room for these elements to breathe, would have elevated an already good plot into something even more memorable. That said, this is just my personal preference. Overall, it's an enjoyable read with a compelling premise, and I definitely think you have created something worth checking out.

Absolutely loved it

It was really wonderful! The emotions were portrayed beautifully, and I felt so connected to the story that I ended up reading all seven chapters in one go.

Captivating story

Hey, this is such a wonderful concept! I’ve really enjoyed what I’ve read so far, and I’m sure the upcoming chapters will be just as good. The character development and descriptions are great — especially Cassian, I absolutely loved how you’ve written him!