Quite a shock
(Reviewed at Chapter 10)
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This story starts out feeling something like a children's book. The first few chapters have that sense of wonder and excitement that I'd expect from similar works in the "dragon rider" genre. However, in Chapter 8, that.... changes. There's a sudden DROP in mood and tone, with the story going from that "wonder and excitement" to something much darker. And while I'm not at all against darkness in stories, the change (including the assumed death of a major character) feels quite sudden. It was a bit of an "emotional whiplash" moment, honestly.
Overall, the plot is a mix of expected and not. There are quite a few tropes present throughout the story, which add to it in places and detract in others, but there are just as many places where some very original takes are present. The portrayal of dragons so far is surprising. It's not what I would have expected of a "dragon rider" story. I don't think I've ever seen one where the dragons are quite so cruel and violent. I like where it's going in that regard, and I enjoy the darker and more unique aspects of the story quite a bit. That said, in line with the tropes I mentioned earlier, the plot can be a little weak in places. There are a number of occasions where the story feels very /done/.
Worth mentioning, though, is the sort of "telepathy" system that the story employs. It's a fairly original idea, with a lot of aspects to it that I haven't seen done before for that kind of concept. I do feel like it could use better explanation and more clearly defined rules, but considering that the story is told from the point of view of a relatively young character, it does make sense that she wouldn't quite understand her power, either. I like what's being done with it so far!
As for technical skills, the author does just fine. There are a few grammar issues and places of awkward wording, but I don't have distinct issues. The style suits the subject matter well. The writing style isn't as polished as it could be, but in a way, that works well with what's being written.
As a whole, I enjoyed this story a fair amount! It's not exactly my taste, but it was a fun read as I was getting through it, and I hope that the author keeps going and gets through it well! :D