Doughnuts&Cupcakes

Bait!

This is spectacular! Had me hooked from the first word to the last word I read! Absolutely amazing! There's nothing much to improve other than in some places I think the paragraphs need to be shortened to help with readability but apart from that, magnificent work! Do keep it up!

One-Shots

These stories are absolutely awesome! You've done a great job in exciting the reader with your descriptions and I do see that you've got actual potential!
For improvements, I think in some stories the paragraphs are too long which makes it difficult for the readers to engage continuously with your story and at some part where dialogues are used, it gets a little off because they sound a little forced. But apart from that, I thoroughly enjoyed it from the very beginning and all the best!

Obsessed

First things first, I love your writing style! It kept me hooked from the very beginning and I think you've described everything almost very well, apart from a few grammar mistakes, but trust me, I don't think it's a big deal!
I think it would be better if some paragraphs were shorter to help the readers engage in your writing better

but apart from that I don't really see anything wrong. It's perfect. Amazing work and do keep it up!

Verlore

Your concept is spectacular! I like how the scenes and characters are introduced and the plot is amazing and exciting! However, I think if there's any advice I can give you, I'd recommend you to go through your work carefully, chapter by chapter and look out for any grammar mistakes or missing punctuation. Because I did find a few errors, but I'm sure with a little editing, your story will be perfect! I admire your writing skills, because I started your story only to read the first few chapters, but I couldn't stop reading until chapter 9! So I guess that's enough proof as to how well you've written this! All the best and keep up the good work!

Finding the Light (poetry)

Hey Savannah,
I am a big fan of poetry and I write poetry myself so I was pretty excited to read what you had in stock for your readers! I think you wrote your heart out here. Every word, ever feeling, you wrote it from your own heart and that's what makes this piece special. I'm sure we've all felt this way at some point in life and you've done a great job in speaking to the readers' hearts. However if there's one thing you should be more considerate about is the flow of your poem. At some points, I noticed that the verses of your poem don't tally with each other, almost as if one line is a little detached from the other. But I'm sure you have what it takes to become a talented writer so all the best and keep up the good work!

Our Secret Melody

I have to say that I thoroughly enjoyed this book and ended up reading more than I planned to!
I believe that you're a K-pop fan yourself, which has made it easier for you to switch with the personalities of your characters, especially MelRose's sister's obsession with the group!
I love how you've brought out the theme of family, here and there, because I think in most stories it isn't brought out enough. MelRose's family, including their dialogues and their lifestyles, were realistic and I think that was also a major reason why I was hooked over this beautiful story!
If there's anything I believe you have to improve, I think it's your dialogues. I did mention that they seemed realistic, but that's when considering the kind of content you put into their discussions; not the way you presented it. Perhaps your first language isn't English so when planning the dialogues in your head, there could be places where without you knowing, things get a little chunky. But I believe, the more stories you read and the more stories you write, you'll be able to improve it and slay in your writing with your eyes closed!!!
Much love and wishing you all the best!!!

Don't smile at me

Hi! So I think this story is pretty good. I love the character interactions and how you've given each character a personality of their own while making it obvious to the readers because in most stories I've read, sometimes the writers tend to lose the purpose of other characters while trying to highlight the main character. So hats off to you for that!
I adore you language style; it was a natural flow and helped your readers to enjoy the story thoroughly, although there were a changes in tense (but I guess that's okay and not very noticeable unless you read it to find mistakes other than to enjoy the story lol)
The plot though, I think could be improved with a sharper conflict but either way, I understand that it may not exactly be your purpose of writing this story so I guess it's okay as long as it's enjoyable for your audience.
Amazing work and keep it up!

Dark Tales (Mystery of the murderous boyfriend)

I am indeed surprised to find that I'm the first person to review this amazing thriller! I wouldn't lie, when it was revealed who the killer was and what the motive was, I thought it didn't quite make sense. But then the twist came along and I was absolutely shook!
I normally read a maximum of 4 chapters to review a story but here I read the complete story of the Mystery of the Murderous boyfriend because your writing skills kept me absolutely hooked! I think that itself makes you a successful writer.
However, although I've only read one story out of a lot more, I am fully aware you have potential to continue writing even more shocking stories like these! However, if there's one thing I would advise you on, I think you should have a stronger plot. I feel like the motive the killer had to do the killing doesn't justify his deeds as much as it should. So maybe more relevance from the past or some additional connection between the two would've improved the plot! Just my thoughts :D
You have used your language beautifully and I didn't find any noticeable errors because the tension and mystery you created made me overlook those!
Amazing work and I hope you write more stories like these! Much loveee :D

Rebirth of the Witch queen

Hi! I'm the first to review so I thought of leaving a few comments on what I noticed, which I believe would help you to improve your story! Point number 1, your structure.
I think many of your readers would agree if I said that this structure makes it a bit difficult to engage with. For an instance, in the first chapter, all your lines, may it be dialogues or descriptions, they're all packed into a big fat paragraph which may cause your readers to lose interest! I do understand if you bring out a point like this; Shakespeare's plays are big fat paragraphs too, but people don't lose interest in those! Well the answer for that is, people don't read that kind plays on computer screens; it's always a hard copy. But when reading a long set of lines digitally, it may cause your readers to distance themselves from the story and that would be a disadvantage for you!
But I assure you, with a few paragraph breaks and a few separated lines, here and there, you could easily fix it!
And also the dialogues; most stories have either " or ' to indicate the beginning and ending of a dialogue, but in your story you haven't used them. I understand that it may be your preference, but once again with the packed structure of your writing and the difficulty in distinguishing between your descriptions and dialogues, it may affect your reader engagement.
I hope this review helped you and wishing you all the best for your future career!

Saved

I particularly took interest in this story because mystery is definitely my cup of tea! And I have to say, you didn't disappoint me! I've only read a few of the first chapters but dear readers, you're in for a pretty exciting ride!
Your descriptions are up to perfection and I enjoyed it thoroughly as I read along. I love the plot and I can't wait to read more! Beautiful work and wishing you all the best!

Harmony

First of all, I enjoyed this single chapter so much so cheers to you for that! Your descriptions were perfect, your writing style was top-notch and your arrangement of paragraphs made it easier for your readers to engage throughout your story. Your flow didn't seem forced and to be honest, there's not much to criticize about it.
But if I had to give my opinion on one thing, I would insist you put a few more chapters, maybe involve a teeny tiny twist. I understand that this is a short story and it's how you prefer it to be, but I think with your creativity and your writing style, your story would pretty much be receiving the love it deserves if you spiced up things a bit with a few twists, all while keeping it a short story! But I do understand it's completely up to you and I respect your ideas!
Amazing work and do keep it up!

Finding Ash

The plot sounds interesting and you've done a good job in shifting the scenes smoothly. I think there are a few things you have to improve on the format of your chapters and a little bit of your grammar but once you've gone through your chapters, I think that could be easily fixed!
Good job and keep it up!

The Alpha Affair

Amazing read! Loved it!

Finding Paradise in Hell

This story is beautiful and you have described everything so well! A round of applause for you for that! The way you've moved from scene to scene is beautiful indeed! I would recommend this to anyone who loves a good heart touching read! All the best!

Caged - Free Bird

I like the plot of the story and I do sense some real excitement coming up. But I think it's better if you could maybe re-read your story again. That way I believe that you could add more description to places that deserve more description and also correct any grammar mistakes you find on the way!
But I love your idea, the creativity you've put into it is awesome!
All the best and keep up the good work!

Loveless Lover (Poetry)

I have no words to describe this masterpiece !!! So beautifully written! This spoke straight into my heart, every single word, and I know that every 'loveless lover' out there will get the true feels of this! The writer's style makes it easy for the readers to involve and I really want people to come across this amazing book and that is mainly why I gave it a 5 stars <3
For anyone who's going through a tough time and simply wants to read something that relates to everything they feel right now, I think this is the best book you could read!
All the best and do keep up the good work!!

Queen of Death

There's only one chapter of it, but so far so good! The plot seems great and I can't wait to see the upcoming characters (especially Haylan, I wonder whether he'd ever show up :D) Although I think if you could maybe go through your chapter again and look out for grammar mistakes or places where you could add more description, it would be perfect! Amazing job and all the best!

A soulmate who wasn't mine

I absolutely love this story! It feels so real and although I picked up a few grammatical errors, it just didn't matter. Your work is amazing. So realistic and much of the "show, don't tell" kinda thing which makes it a thousand times better. All the best and keep up the good work!

Intern

Amazing work! I love how you've used descriptions that keep your readers hooken and your use of language is perfect! There's nothing wrong that I noticed, I was hooked from the beginning itself. All the best and I can't wait to see how this story goes!

Secret Enchantment

Hey, your story is super exciting! I love the characters and the concept and I'm sure the readers have a hella excitement coming up! I like how you've written everything naturally without forcing too much into your sentences but I do have to say that at some points it would have been better if you kept some information hidden, for the readers to figure out. Like in one instance you've mentioned that the Sarina's best friend is talkative but Sarina is not, so I think that it would be better for the readers to find out as the story proceeds.
However, you truly do have potential and as for the above stated point, don't change your story now because I know how annoying it is to rewrite particular parts of your story, so maybe save it for your future stories?

I love your work and hoping to read more! All the best and keep up your good work!

The Last Sorceress

Okay, so I was supposed to review your story, just as a part of our review swap, but I absolutely LOVEEEE THISSSS! The storyline is so unique and the characters are carefully introduced, to make sure the readers aren't confused and I love the natural calm flow of the story. No unwanted chaos, just a little girl who's specified as different, but in a good way (I'm still in chapter 7) and the writer has used short paragraphs and easy language for anyone to understand the story and what can I say, this is a masterpiece!!
I've seen that some people have commented saying how annoying your grammar is, but trust me the interest I had while reading your creativity covers up for that, so job well done! (And I've added this to my reading list, so I'm hoping to read it til the endddd!)
All the best and I hope many readers out there would get a hold of your beautiful piece of work!

Ray of Sunshine

Hi, I think this is pretty good for a start. Especially with English not being your first language, I feel like you are really good at language to a certain extend. However, I would recommend that you read your writing once you've completed writing, slowly, analyzing every word. I believe that would help you to get rid of most of your grammatical errors. Either way, I'm sure you've got an exciting read for your readers and I wish you all the best!

Bad Blood

I absolutely loved this! The characters were brought up smoothly and the scenes were full of description and the writer has done a great job in creating this masterpiece! The plot sounds exciting and I can't wait to see what Aurora has in stock, yet to reveal. All the best and job well done!

In The Shadows

This story is surely going to win the hearts of many! I'm sure about it! I love how the writer has used simple language with complex sentences, because in most stories I've read, the beginning is always a little confusing, but this is just perfect. However, one small thing I noticed is the fast flow at the beginning. I think it would've been better for the writer to maybe describe situations slowly than running from one scene to the other. Overall, I love the plot and hope this will become an exciting story once it's completed!
All the best and keep up the good work!

Obey

Hello!
I'm only through the first chapter but I do have a few things to say. First of all, I love how you've taken a different approach to the story, unlike the ones I've read before, with the use of a narrator in the middle. It makes the situation easier for the readers to understand so hats off for your creativity. However there are also a few things I noticed that I believe would help you to improve your story. One thing is, I feel like you have to be more careful when introducing characters into the story. Because honestly, I was a little confused to differentiate between the characters and it may cause confusion for the other readers as well. But overall, I love your language and can't wait to see your hard work win the hearts of many!
All the best and keep up the good work!

My Rude Husband

Hi Stacey,
So, I've read the first 4 chapters of your story, and I admire your plot. I'm pretty sure the readers have quite an exciting story ahead of them. But however, the grammatical errors and the lack/absence of punctuation makes it a little bit hard to read. It would be top-notch if you could maybe edit your story a little bit, go through it again and maybe look into elements like capitalization and make sure you make it easier for your readers to engage in. However, I love the plot and I'm excited to know how this girl's life would go as she get married, after escaping her toxic father.
All the best and keep up the good work!

These Gilded Doors

So, I read the first chapter in hope only to comment on it but I thought a review would be a bigger support for you. First of all, I love your variety of language and how you've included complex sentences, an attempt to describe the moment, exactly as it is. I adore Hella, who I believe is your main character, because through her actions you've made her look like an ideal female with a spirit, even stronger than a man. However, I still feel at some instances, particularly the start, instead of describing the situation raw, you've restricted some very important information you should've included for the readers to understand it better.
But however, I do see great potential and believe that this story will become a masterpiece!
Good luck! Keep up the good work!

Destiny Responds

Although I'm only through the first chapter, I've felt a great deal of emotion within the writer's words. I believe that Raven Snow lives within the character of this young girl and I believe that this story will continue to become a heart-touching story as it proceeds. I also admire the writing skills of this author for a wide variety of words have been used to bring out the best of the character's feelings. All the best to the writer and congratulating him/her on continuing this story!

It's Complicated

Heartwarming story! ❤️

Should've Seen It Coming

The cutest short story ever ! ❤️

Amazing Plot!

The story and the plot overall was amazing although at some points, the errors in grammar and punctuation were kind of annoying. But the characters and the scenes were perfectly chosen. I wish the author all the best! Hoping to read more productions!