Demonic Art and Angelic Politics
This is an entire world, set up with species-specific traits, a history that is revealed in reasonable, digestible portions, and political maneuverings that leave me with questions. The back story that was revealed in tantalizing tidbits makes me want to read what comes next at least as much as the romance that is the primary advertised plot line. The story made me care about the characters and their worlds, and mixed movement and action with exposition very smoothly. High marks for the art of writing!
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I give average marks for the technical aspect because the seasonal setting got confused a bit, there were some jumbled sentences that forced me out of the fantasy to parse their intent, and the lunar cycle that was so key to the timeline was mishandled. Starting with an Earthly month's deadline at the dark moon puts a full moon in the middle of the timeline and necessitates a waning moon as the deadline approaches. I really liked the idea of the demon taking power from darkness such that the full moon's light weakened him, so it was jarring when a stray reference to a return of the full moon was made only four days after it had already happened.
Thank you for the image of an angel shielding a demon from sunlight by shadowing him with his wings. That will stick with me for a while. Well done!