Be The Crown
I really like your main character in this story, and even though it's only two chapters, there is a lot of good ideas here. Here are just four suggestions I have.
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1. Your sentences have a slightly stunted feel to them, almost like they're forced. There are many things that contribute to this, but a good place to start is correct punctuation, A classic mistake is when you have two complete sentences joined by a coordinating conjunction (like and, but, or, etc.) make sure to put a comma before it. Another tip is to restrict the number of prepositional phrases in your sentences.
2. Be careful that the comparisons you make fit with your story. For example she says she was so desperate for work that she was willing to work as the first lady for a queen; however, we find out later that she has no knowledge, experience, or interest in the nobility.
3. Make sure to show us things about your story instead of telling us. For example, Venus tells us that Mrs. Courts is very religious and that is why she is so wise. Instead of telling us straight out, you can show she is wise and religious by what she says, does, and wears.
4. Don't be afraid to give us information. Often times it is fun to withhold information, especially at the beginning of a story, to inspire suspense in our readers. Just be careful that you don't withhold too much information. For example, you say that Mrs. Courts. often gets called to parties put on by rich hosts, but why would a simple, strictly religious woman be invited to lots of royal parties?
Anyway, thank you so much for writing. I think that this story has great potential. Keep up the good work!