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A real page-turner

This well-written mystery story is well paced and ramps up the intrigue as you read, hooking the reader in to keep turning the pages to find out what happened. The shifts between past and present happen smoothly, helping the reader to understand the chain of events by a slow reveal. The main characters are strong, three-dimensional and well drawn, we feel we know them or have met them for real. Their interrelationships and group dynamics play out well both in the past, when they first get to know each other, and later, when they have not seen each other for some time but still feel their connection from long ago. The subject matter touches sensitively on troubling societal issues and handles them well.

The title works well. The references to it are scattered throughout the story and tie the different parts of the novel together. Good choice.

This was an enjoyable read, it kept me hooked and I would definitely recommend it.

An action-packed thriller

This is a terrific novel. It kept me on the edge of my seat and I couldn't read it fast enough. Like all fabulous novels, I'm also sad that I've finished it.

The multi-layered plot tackles contemporary issues, provoking questions and insight while also delivering suspense, tension and action. Greg has taken a sensitive and difficult topic and woven a story that travels through the maze with finesse and skill.

The characters are real and strong personalities. As a reader I became emotionally invested in their plight, wanting them to succeed while dreading failure. I could feel Stephanie's pain and frustration as she tried to deal with the complex problem without hurting her children. I could experience Chuck's disorientation, helplessness, anger/guilt and the sheer shock of his situation while he was trying to find a way back to his family. The teenage daughters were beautifully drawn, each responding to the shock and horror of what has happened in their own, unique way. They felt real and their teenage behaviour played out just like I would expect in real life.

The writing is classic Greg McLaughlin and carries the reader forward at a cracking pace. It flows beautifully with the story being told from different POVs that heighten the drama and tension. Greg deftly weaves in the backstory and delivers a real emotional punch. His attention to detail adds to the context and atmosphere of the story and immerses the reader in the environment.

This is a must read.

An intense religious thriller

This is an intensely religious thriller about a young man charged with praying for the salvation of others.
The novel is well written, the prose flows well and the vivid descriptions, especially the gruesome dream/nightmare sequences, bring the story to life.
The characters are drawn sympathetically and are real, believable and three-dimensional. Their flaws, mistakes and even their bad choices and missteps, evoke empathy in the reader and enable us to relate to them. The dynamics between the characters works well, their relationships are natural and real.. The protagonist was at times preachy but it was in keeping with his character.
The plot has intrigue, suspense and tension that builds throughout the novel. There is an urgency in the novel that is explained by the dramatic ending. The tangled romances add a nice touch and provide an additional hook. The book takes the reader on an emotional journey along with the characters.
Although the intense religious focus of this novel is an unusual read for me, I appreciated the sense of hope and the nonjudgmental approach to human frailty.
There were a few reoccurring misspelled words but otherwise the grammar and expression were of a good standard.

Gripping Psychological Thriller

This tale of two couples in different time zones starts with a curious mystery which builds in drama and tension to a crescendo of surprises, twists and action. The author has written a forceful story, stoking the tension and intrigue until the reader is compelled to read on to the end and find out what is going on.
This is well written, the story flows and is perfectly paced. The drama and intensity is supported by real and interesting characters. This is an example of impressive story telling and it had me thoroughly hooked.
It's a gripping and fascinating psychological thriller which had me guessing to the end and then it delivered a great twist to the plot.
Highly recommended.

Intriguing idea

This forms the beginning of an original and interesting idea. The plot has not yet been fully developed but it is off to a good start. I don't know where Shanice Bannis is taking the story but the characters and story line have potential.
It needs a thorough edit to correct the grammar, spelling, general expression and use of language. It can get a little confusing at times, especially the transitions between the dream and reality (although that may be what you intended.)
Good luck with completing this interesting story.

Highly recommended read

This is a complex and suspenseful novel. It envisages a second coming and it's impact on the current world. The premise is bold, but the story appeals even to those who are not religious. The writer draws a strong cast of characters , giving us insight through backstory and intimate glimpses into their journey. The story builds and pulls the reader into the lives of the key characters, and then unleashes an action packed finale. It is a deep and satisfying story, the plot is complex and realistic, providing a reflection of the social fabric of our times.
The writing style is crisp and uses evocative images and analogies to bring the story to life.
Overall, this is a well-written and enjoyable read, and I highly recommend it.

White Roses

The plot is intriguing and the characters are truly evil and vicious. I've read the first 5 chapters and am intrigued about where this story is going and if the main character, Karin, can come out as a better person. The plot is introduced but we have no idea where it is leading us yet, so the hook has been laid. I think an edit would help, especially with the English expression and I'm looking forward to seeing more depth in the characters so I can understand them better. Well done so far, and I'll be interested to see how the story progresses.

A heartwarming story about modern day dilemmas

I really enjoyed this heartwarming story about a young boy who loves playing baseball, his single mum and her struggles and the new guy, with a few issues of his own, who enters their lives.

The characters are strong and real, with adult and child vulnerabilities that we can all relate to. The petty politics echo the kinds of issues we see in kids sport everywhere as well as alert us to those same kinds of issues playing out on a bigger stage. As an Australian reader, I can also relate to the kids sporting politics and the characters Greg McLaughlin draws so well.

Greg introduces us to interesting and likeable (and also not so likeable) characters and draws them, flaws and all, with a deft touch. He effortlessly weaves in the backstory to give us insights and depth. His antagonists are three dimensional and feel like the people you encounter in all walks of life.

The story raises questions of fairness, equal opportunity and how to deal with those who want to control the access to opportunities for others. It is a universal theme and very timely.

This is a warm, funny, entertaining and real story. I experienced a range of emotions while reading and was invested in the outcome. Well done Greg. Another great story.

A dramatic story for the times

The Masks of Morality covers a range of important issues for our times. The most poignant for me was Anna's story, who struggles with terrible personal losses and then battles with finding the right path between justice and revenge. It is a telling dilemma that touches on an important concept in today's world.

Claryssa's transition from high flying IT executive to mother and volunteer accompanies her awakening to the political machinations in society today and the many complex issues that have yet to be resolved. She is surrounded by friends all struggling with the same issues and trying to find a way to be good parents and care for the future and deal with the undermining influences in society.

The novel presents an interesting story which is made more personal by closely following the characters and their everyday struggles. This was an interesting and enjoyable read (if enjoyable is indeed the right word when so much of the plot is disturbing) and makes a great discussion starter.

A moving human interest story

This drama novel is full of very human characters, each struggling with their own secrets and inner turmoil as they try to connect with each other. The main character, a young girl, Aria, is confused and hurt and is striving to deal with her parents' abandonment as well as adjust to life in a new country with relatives she doesn't really know. Although we don't see her parents' motivations up close, we see the struggle play out as she gets to know her uncles and their wives/partners when she is abruptly brought to live with them. As a reader, I found the scenes with her uncle Kiev touching and sweet. Each uncle grows as the story progresses, finding inner strength and developing a love for their niece.
This well-written story is an enjoyable read. It is a moving story with likeable and unlikeable characters and elements of suspense and intrigue. I felt that it was really several stories rolled into the one novel, Aria's story with her secret and her parents' response and then the various characters within the family and their individual dilemmas.
A lovely story and a good read.

An intriguing fairytale.

This story has tension, intrigue and action. It keeps the reader hooked, spinning an interesting and unique mystery and interweaving it with unusual characters. The plot is original and the main characters grow as they follow their quest and try to find the special items from their late grandmother. It has a fairytale feel and I enjoyed the way the story kept introducing challenges, new characters and new worlds.
The ending leaves the reader waiting for the story to continue in Book 2 (which means it is not a stand-alone). The back story is skillfully woven in and gives us necessary and interesting insights into the present-day drama. Like most books on Inkitt, it will benefit from an edit, but it is a very enjoyable read.

Fascinating story

This is a fascinating story set in Czechoslovakia in 1942 during the Nazi occupation. These beginning chapters set a strong plot building great suspense and tension. Using three different POVs we see the events unfold from different perspectives.
This story has stimulated my interest and curiosity and I look forward to reading more and finding out where the author will take this. The star ratings are based on the first 8 chapters. A good beginning.

A terrific read

Greg McLaughlin has done it again. He has written a terrific story with stunning characters and a plot that keeps you turning the page. Well done.
This well-written novel is steeped in action and perfect pacing. The plot kept me intrigued and reading to the end (I couldn't stop long enough to add comments at the end of the chapter even!) and the conclusion was satisfying and rewarding. The writing flows and takes the reader in close to the action, keeping us on edge and delivering suspense and intrigue along the way.
The characters are three dimensional and feel very real. It is unusual to have principled politicians (perhaps that means this could fit into the fantasy genre too - ha, ha- is my cynicism showing?). Who knew a writer could create a politician that I would be cheering for? The 'bad guys' are also too real (are they based on any real life examples?) and together the story takes us on a fraught and intense ride. Your writing made me really care about the fate of the protagonist.
The only suggestion I would make (and it's only my opinion, so ignore if you don't think it's relevant) is that the first chapter is a little bogged down with back story and factual information. For me, a non-American, the US electoral process is a little confusing and hard to follow which meant I had to re-read that chapter to understand it. I'm sure the important points could easily be dispersed and threaded through the subsequent chapters and therefore avoid that confusion. Also, another edit would easily iron out the small spelling and grammatical errors.
Otherwise, the story is a terrific read, it kept me engrossed in the plot and the characters you created. Well done.

The Courage of the Cowardly Soul

This story is only 8 chapters long at the moment but has the potential to build the plot to make an engrossing and thought-provoking novel.
This very intense story is written in the first person, so we are inside the mind of the protagonist, thinking his thoughts and seeing what he sees. His experiences in the trenches in WWI have left him deeply scarred and we witness two very brutal events described in detail, that are very disturbing, not least because of Jaque's reaction.
The story poses valid questions and follows Jacque's quest to explain what he has endured and the carnage he has witnessed. It is a moving story, well written and the author deftly deals with this difficult subject matter and the complexities of the human reaction to war.
Well worth reading.

A great potential

Against the grain is a novel with an interesting plot and seems built on real experience. The story of a young woman who joins the army without really knowing what she is letting herself in for and without being particularly suited to the discipline and difficulties she encounters has the potential to be a strong character driven tale. At the moment it has the feel of a diary and reads like a first draft. Since finishing the novel, the author has begun amending and rewriting and I am sure this will make this novel one to watch. All the best with your rewriting.