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Eighteen years old. Irish gal. Writes stories and poetry. Also an aspiring screenwriter. Follow me on Twitter and give my Facebook page a like :)

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Waves Break on Unknown Shores

This book epitomizes why I enjoy reading thrillers so much. The development of the characters, individually and collectively, and their relationship to one another is brilliantly written. I find the author's writing style intriguing and mesmerizing. While reading this, I was always hungry for more, and couldn't stop myself reading. I was hooked from the off, and was kept guessing throughout. I would definitely recommend this to anybody who's a fan of thriller or mystery stories. I can't wait to read more of your work :)

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Rats in the Pipes

Liking this so far! Its very interesting and has me intrigued to read on and find out what'll happen next. Looking forward to reading further. I like your writing style, please keep writing :)

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It has potential

This book could be potentially very good. The dynamic between the characters are humorous and I like the MC. The most prevalent issue for me was grammar/punctuation and the writing style. When describing the events, I noticed that repetitively, the author seems to be listing the sequence of events just as they see them happening. This can be a little detracting from the overall story to the reader. However, a couple of rounds of editing could fix this. Looking forward to a polished version of this story. Good luck.

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Riveting Threequel

Like the preceding books in the "Seams along the Near World" series, this fantastical tale takes the reader on another riveting journey in the lives of our leading characters, whilst immersing us in two worlds at once. Similarly, we join Jake, Jenna, Evan, Belinda and their friends in families as they all play their part in the take down of yet another force of evil.
This book is adeptly written, a page turner of a read, which presents us with a couple of twists and turns along the way, and wraps itself up in a heartwarming ending which satisfies the reader. Thanks for another great read, I enjoyed it immensely.

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A Masterpiece

Great story. I really like the twists and turns along the way. Your use of description is simply mesmerizing and one of the high points of this story. The scenes came to life with such vivid clarity in my mind and as I was reading, it was hard to stop, I look forward to seeing more from you and I have no doubt that this book will be published. Good luck with this story.

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A Silent Game of Spies

This story has a great plot, supported strongly by very well drawn characters. Luvian was, in my opinion, one of, if not, the best developed character and felt very real to me as a character. I really like how you focus in on a different character each chapter and how their stories tie together.The dialogue is smooth and realistic, and I really like the use of colloquialism in the character's exchanges. It makes it feel very real. Fantastic read, best of luck in getting it published :)

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Tense Psychological Thriller

I loved this book. The writing style flowed so beautifully and so flawlessly that I was captivated from the opening pages and gripped right until the ending, which was adeptly crafted by the way. I love how you ended the story. The interesting plot line is also supported strongly by extremely well drawn characters, who I really felt a connection to while reading. This shows how real they seem and illustrates this author's strong talent and flair for writing. I definitely recommend this read and hope that this author continues to write thrillers in the near future, I'd definitely read them.

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Good Read

Good characterisation and lovely use of description apparent throughout. I also really liked the plot line. This book has a lot of potential and with a bit of editing, I think it'd be superb :)

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Great Story!

I like how this book not only had a predominant focus on the two leads of the main romance plot of the story, but also delved into the added dimensions of both their family lives. The two leads are very likeable in different ways and I like how there was instant chemistry between them. Great story which I would highly recommend!

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Wonderfully Crafted!

This is a great read! It's interesting, in that it alternates between a magical fantasy and a bit of a drama, with a little bit of young sweet romance. It's refreshing that the protagonists are twelve/thirteen years old as opposed to main young characters in most books nowadays who are generally sixteen/seventeen year olds. I really like the plot and the dimension of the different universes. Characters are well drawn. It's a quick easy read with a few unexpected twists along the way, which keeps the reader's interest piqued from start to finish. Highly engaging. I'd definitely recommend to a friend.

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Wow!

As always, Greg never ceases to keep me captivated and wanting to read on. His vivid use of description brings the narrative so clearly to life in my mind and has kept me enthralled throughout the entire story, much like his other works.

The Third Party has an intriguing plot line. It's a refreshing story, in that, it gives a good insight into the mindset of politicians rather than presenting them through the perspective of their people. It gives more depth to their characters too, which is the next thing I'm going to talk about.

You have very skilfully developed each of the main characters. They all feel very real to me, and this adds to the power of the narrative. Great characterisation! My personal favourite character is Chase.

I hope to see more stories from you because I never seen to think that one will be able to top the next, because it was so good, and then, you always do. What are you doing on Inkitt? Go straight ahead and publish your books on Amazon!

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A catch from the start.

This story grabs your attention quickly and it held me until its closing paragraph. Fred's character was very well drawn in particular, in that, little details were teased at a gradual pace over the course of the novel.

I was supposed to read 10 chapters, I've read all of the book, which illustrates the captivating power of this author's writing style. I love the vivid use of description.

One critique I have is that there were numerous spelling and technical mistakes in the draft, which once fixed, would make this story the perfect read in my mind.

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Great exploration of a unique concept

If you're looking for an intriguing page turner of a story almost completely free of cliched or predictable content, then read Demon Dusted.

The writing style flows so effortlessly that it was near impossible for me to divert my eyes from the screen and stop reading.

Solid character and plot development, an engaging plot line that's really quite unique, may I add, this story will keep your eyes glued to the screen until you reach the very last page.

As in her other works, CE Turner's passion for writing is clearly evident through her ability to immerse and hook the reader. If you enjoy this, I think you'll enjoy her other works equally as much.

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Beautiful!

Rhythmic and lyrical! Beautifully poetic. Simplistic but very effective. Love it :)

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A compelling narrative of past and present

This extremely well structured story, which has a strong focus on the contrast between the present and the past, and how the past could've potentially shaped the present differently with one decision, is a compelling narrative with a vivid use of description throughout.

The narrative has a predominant focus on the possibility of what could've been, shaping the present and future of the main character, Cooper.

Throughout the story, we see him reconsidering and reevaluating his life, as conflict develops in one of his most central relationships. It sends him revisiting the past and reaching out to an old friend whose presence has had a strong impact on him. We see him toying with the idea of putting an end to the relationship and rekindling an old one.

With the help of this friend, the conflict resolves itself nicely by the end and closes with a depiction of Cooper leading a life with someone he could've had with someone else, but ultimately did not work out.

A quick, enthralling and intriguing read, that with a touch of editing to correct some minor punctuation and grammar overlooks, would be the perfect choice for anyone who has a couple of hours to spare. I highly recommend.

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Melons and Emeralds

Good plot and structure here! Your characters are very well drawn, Devin in particular. My main critique would be to maybe add a little bit more description into the narrative, as I found it be a little bit overpowered with big chunks of dialogue. Maybe separate it out a little bit. But other than this, I like the overall story :)

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Good Plot Line

This story has a strong plot. It is written quite well and structured nicely. The character development is also very well done. I loved Kyle's character by the way :) The relationships between the characters are built very strongly too.
However, I respectfully ask that you read back over the draft a couple of times, as there were a lot of grammar and punctuation errors. They can be easily fixed but can really put the reader off the great story you have written. And that would be a real shame, as it is a brilliantly written and thought out narrative. With a bit of editing, this would be perfect, I look forward to reading an edited version. All in all, I really enjoyed your story and I hope you continue to write :)

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Interesting.

I like this book so far. Caroline is very well developed, and I look forward for a gradual progression of plot and characterization as the story goes on. Apart from some grammar and punctuation errors, this is pretty solid from what I've read.

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Comical story with a very humorous ending!

I loved this story so much. It wasn't my usual kind of story, but I enjoyed it immensely. Filled with witty characters and comical one liners that kept me laughing throughout.
I love the dynamic between Chess and Cora, and how their respective back stories affect them. I also liked the character of Emma very much. The story has really great potential, and with a touch of editing, it'd be perfect.
I found the ending chapter extremely satisfying, particularly the final scene, and its closing dialogue. It really brought the story full circle in its hilarity and delivers the reader with an equally as great, if not, better impression of the story as a whole. Thanks for such a great read, I look forward to reading more of your work very soon :)

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So Far So Good.

I like this story so far, it's intriguing, and I look forward to reading on. I love your writing style, but I think that there is a little bit of overuse of description, which slightly detracts from the merit of the story. Other than this, I'm really enojying it, and look forward to reading more of your work :)

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So Far So Good

I like the concept of the story so far. I look forward to reading on. Small piece of criticism- I felt that the first paragraph was littered with overuse of "she did" or "she was" etc etc. Can be easily edited, but is a bit too repetitive for the reader. All in all though, so far so good. :)

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Looking forward to more.

I've read all the posted chapters, and while I feel that this is a story where it'll take a while for the plot to develop and take off, I think it has a lot of potential. The world you are bringing to life is quite believable and intriguing, and I look forward to finding out more about it and the characters. I would advise reading back through a couple of times to revise grammar/punctuation errors, which are scattered throughout the book. But don't fret over it too much, it can be easily remedied, and it's more important to do justice to the plot narrative and the characterization of the story. I hope this review is useful to you, and I wish you the best of luck with your writing :) Good work!

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Gripping!

This story is beautifully written. The author has such a powerful, intriguing and mesmerizing style of writing, I was hooked from the off. The characters are so well developed that the reader can clearly visualize them at almost every moment throughout the story. I love this author's work, and cannot wait to read more of your material :)

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Bobby's journey

Just finished the first chapter, and I'm really liking this. Some of the sentiments expressed are sadly relatable, and this has kept me reading. The simplistic but effective use of language kept me engaged, and I look forward to reading on. Good work! :)

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Looking forward to more!

The captivating plot, which was brilliantly written, coupled with this author's lovely writing style kept me engaged from the start. I cannot wait for more chapters, and I look forward to more of your work. I urge you to keep writing so I can keep reading your material :)

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Very good!

I admire you for putting emphasis on such heavy subject matter, which is sadly all too relevant today. It is important for us to have conversations about societal problems, such as human trafficking, despite them being uncomfortable to talk about. And writing stories about it is a great way for us to enhance such conversations and for us to empathise with people who have undergone such experiences in real life. So I applaud you for doing so.
However, I think we would have more empathy for Selena, if we were shown larger snippets of what happens to her throughout the story, before showing the effect it has on her afterwards, through her tumoiled, traumatized state. I'm not saying that you should go all out into huge, graphic detailed scenes, but I do think you should show us a little but more, to help us understand her scenario better.
All in all though, this is a very good attempt at shedding light on the horrors of human trafficking and the effect it has on its victims. A very thought provoking piece of work. I hope my advice is helpful and I look forward to reading more of your work. I urge you to keep writing xx Well done!

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Good Read!

Good plot so far! It would be good if readers were given more of an insight into Anodine, but other than that, an encouraging and rather impressive start. Keep writing :)

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Page 105

Page 105 is a cute love story. It is written very simplistically, which makes it easier to connect with the characters, I think, and proves to make the writing voice clear and effective. My main critique would be that I think the writer could've developed some characters a lIttle better. I feel that the side characters, such as Nichol's father, should be delved into a little more. I also think Johnnie is slightly underdeveloped at times, which takes from the story a bit. All in all though, a good effort.

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Very Intriguing

Although the author could've used a little bit more of descriptive language throughout, the story was a very gripping one. It had me intrigued, and at the end of almost every chapter, I wanted to know what was going to happen next. The plot was also very well paced. I started reading and have also finished the story today, which shows how engrossed I was in the world the author has created. This shows how gripping it was. Well done on writing such a good story :)

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Intrigued

I'm roughly halfway through the story and can't wait to get to the end. To me, the dialogue is very natural and it's proving to be a fabulous story so far. The wrItIng voice is very grIppIng and I'm thoroughly enjoying reading the story! Keep writing please :)

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A Promising Start

Great story so far. Full of intrigue and nice twists and turns to keep the reader engaged. Adeptly crafted characters and a riveting plot line so far. Looking forward to more from this author, who has a huge talent for writing.

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WOW, JUST WOW!

This was a fantastic read, with a great range of characters, who were strongly developed throughout the narrative. The plot was great too; I was absorbed in the world the author created from the opening pages to the very ending and my interest was piqued from start to finish. A gripping story that I'd highly recommend to my friends.

I apologize that I've no critiques to help you improve, but I just loved this story so much and I simply can't come up with any criticisms for this book! Great work!! XD

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Great Start

You have the makings of a riveting narrative here, which could potentially be very very good. The character development is solid and the descriptions enthralling. With a touch of editing to polish up the draft, I can see this book getting published.

The most prevalent issue for me was grammar and punctuation. Throughout the story, there are a lot of missing commas, which can be easily fixed, so this is a minor critique, but be careful with this, as it can really annoy the reader and distract them from the fabulous story you've got going here. Another issue was the formatting of your dialogue. I won't go into detail on that here as I've sent some feedback in regards to this.

As I said, this book has a lot of potential and I urge you to keep working at it and polishing it up. With some work, it'd be fantastic. All in all, a great read :) Good job!

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Amazing!

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. It was a quick, easy read which kept me engaged all the way through. The description of the narrative flowed so beautifully and so rhythmically that I found it next to impossible to divert my attention from my laptop. The characters are very well built and I find it easy to empathize with them, Buddy especially. This is an riveting read with a very unexpected twist in the last couple of chapters which sets the tone for the adeptly crafted ending, I would definitely recommend to a friend. This author deserves your attention and I cannot wait to read more of your work!

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Great Read

I fell in love with this book within its opening pages and was kept engaged to the end. I love the characters, they're very well built. This is definitely not your everyday romance. I encourage this author to keep writing. With a touch of editing, this'd be a fabulous book :)

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Great Read

A nice short collection of creepy short stories/poems which I finished in one sitting, because they were so captivating. This author has a really nice writing style which flows so smoothly. The vivid use of description in the stories especially had be gripping the edge of my seat. All in all, this was a fantastic read and I'd definitely recommend reading some of this if you're a horror fan or want something short to read :)

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Beautiful!

I've only read two chapters, awaiting the updates, and I am so riveted. This is amazing so far. Your writing style is absolutely beautiful. You can't help but love it. As I've only read two chapters, I'm not sure what exactly the plot of the story is in its entirety, so it may be deserve a higher rating than I have given it at the time of this review. So far, your characterization is solid. I feel that Ori and Blithe have real depth to them, despite only having known them for a very short while. I really hope you continue to write, because you have such a real, raw talent for writing, which is clearly apparent in the snippet of your work I've read so far. Best of luck in finishing this story :)

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Lovely

Wow. Such a lovely, quick tale with a very powerful conclusion. I really enjoyed it :)

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Quick Easy Read

Nice, short poetry collection if you've got a couple of minutes to spare. I like how this poet gets straight to the point and doesn't go overboard in complicated language use, like I've seen happen a lot before. Simple poems that are easy to digest about a variety of relevant topics and themes. A worthwhile read.

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Intriguing Read

Great plot line in this book, supported strongly by adept characterization. An quick easy, gripping read that engages the reader from start to finish. I highly recommend :)

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Please Let There Be A Sequel

I loved this unique plot and characters. The description was crops and vivid and I loved everything about this story. If there were a sequel, I'd be the first in line to read it. Thanks for writing such an awesome, compelling narrative :)

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A Mystical, Intriguing, Mesmerising Read!

This story has such an intriguing plot. Engagement with the reader is there from the very beginning and doesn't waver once. I was positively gripped from start to finish.

The author has a knack for great characterisation. This read presents us with a range of interrelated characters that weave the narrative together very strongly.

The enthralling descriptions really brought to life the fantastical and mythological elements of the story with vivid clarity in my mind as I was reading. The nice short, snappy chapters made the book all the easier to digest and absorb, all the time piquing my interest as I read further and further.

Once this author gets a publishing deal, which I'm sure will definitely happen for you, I have no doubt that this book will soon be at its well deserved place at the top of bestseller lists. Good luck with this superb book.

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Highly Engaging!

Great character arcs. Vivid description. Enthralling plot line. Effective engagement with the reader. Nice twists and turns along the way. What more could you ask for?

This book is amazing. With each chapter, my interest piqued more and more. I read the whole story in one day, because I needed to know how it ended. This is the mark of skillful writing and a truly amazing narrative. The depiction of an apocalyptic world makes it so much easier for the reader to image the sequence of events as they read. It grabbed my attention from the start and kept me to the end - remarkable!

A superb book, which, if I stumbled upon it in my local bookshop, I would definitely buy and be recommending to my friends and family. I hope you continue to write.

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Great Read!

This book is very engaging, its best qualities are that of the relevance of the plot line in everyday life - the depiction of controversial social and political issues, the fantastic character arcs. Shelley's character is spectacularly drawn. I also love how effectively the author manages to overlap the thrilling plot with the romantic entanglements of the narrative. All these elements, woven together compellingly with a vivid and mesmerising use of description is really what gives this book its five stars. Thank you for the read, I enjoyed it immensely.

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Definitely Not Your Typical Everyday Romance Story

Overall, I really like the concept of the book. I like the way it focuses on the relationship between two people who are cheating and lying to/on their friends/boyfriends/girlfriends. It's a refreshing a change to most romances, and delves well into the mindset of a cheater, presenting us with a very well thought out insight into their thoughts and feelings on the ultimatum Mark and Naveah find themselves in. I also like that we get to see the guilt residing in Naveah, in particular, illustrating that those who cheat are not just horrible people, but that there's always more grey than simply black and white to certain situations.

I really love the characters. Naveah and Mark are very well drawn. I also liked the development of Lucy and Callie sling the way. Nearing the end of the book, I came to like Connor more and more. I think the writer could improve by perhaps adding some more dimension to his personality in the early stages of the book.

With a touch of editing to correct some punctuation and grammar errors and a few wordos throughout, I think this book would be a perfect read for someone wanting a break from cliched romance novels. I hope this writer continues to write in the future and I cannot wait to read more of her work :)

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Amazing Sequel

This second installment to the "Seams Along the Near World" series, is a great read. Like the first book in the series, 'Riverwood,' it takes the reader on a number of twists and turns throughout the narrative which kept me highly engaged from start to finish.

In my opinion, this book is a step up from the first one, although it is necessary to read it to fully understand some of the references and character relationships in the novel. Between the two books, there is a change in target audience. I'd classify this book as more of a YA targeted story, whereas the first is more aimed at the pre teen/early teen years age group. This naturally makes this book appeal more to me, as I fall into the age bracket of YA.

What I loved about this book is seeing how the characters from the first novel have grown since the events of the first, and how the introduction of quite a few new characters help them on their new journey in this novel. It elevates their relationships with each other and spices the plot line up quite a bit.

The ending of this book was adeptly crafted. It leaves the reader with a sense of empathy for the main characters, while leaving us with a sense of hope for what we expect to come in the next installment. Having said that, there were certain points throughout this story where I didn't see what was coming next, so I really look forward to seeing how the author has executed the next part of the story, and where he takes the characters. I have no doubt that my it will be just as, if not, more engaging than the first two. I cannot wait to see what challenges will befall Jake, Evan and the whole crew of characters as I read further.

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Refreshing!

I haven't read many stories like this. It's different. I like your characters and the overall plot line.I think you slow the pace of the story down a little bit because right now, it's a bit rushed. Other than that, a captivating read! Well done :)

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Heartfelt

Good characterisation in the book. I loved Landon. His demise and how it affected Liv was heartbreaking to read.

The most prevailing issue for me, was grammar and punctuation. Oftentimes, the dialogue was formatted incorrectly. I think you need to scan back through it a couple of times to change those. They'll be easy fix, but can really distract and annoy the reader. You also mix up the past and present tenses a lot. For example(made up example) "I told Riley to leave me alone and he looks really hurt." Again- distracting to the reader, so be careful with that.

All in all though, a poignant bittersweet read that will make you cry and laugh and cry again. A refreshing change from most cliched romance stories.

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Intriguing

Your writing style flows so beautifully and so smoothly that it mesmerizes and captivates the reader. Your vivid use of rhythmic description kept me enthralled and reading on. You had me from the very first sentence, which was really quite impressive. I love how you have kept the first chapter mysterious enough to keep me wanting more. but have given me enough to keep me engaged with the story to come, I cannot wait to find out what the plot line has in store for Scott as the story develops.

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Very Good

I like the plot line. Your writing style also flows quite smoothly. Looking forward to reading on :)

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A Poignant Expression of Heartfelt Emotion

I've enjoyed reading the first chapter, and look forward to reading on as updates are posted. I like the state of mind depicted of the character. It's a sad but realistic portrayal. The only thing I would suggest is shortening some of the sentences. I felt that some of them were a little long winded and could've been compacted or re worded into two separate sentences. I'll definitely read on though :)

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A Masterpiece!

This is a wonderfully crafted story with great characterization throughout. It engages the reader from start to finish. I loved the plot line, and how it was paced. There are a few unexpected twists and turns along the way until the adept ending, which I was extremely satisfied with. The vivid description in this author's writing really brings the scenes to life in my mind. This is a book I will remember for a while! I definitely recommend :)

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Good characterization

Strongly developed characters, a good plot line, a very good pacing of that plot line. And examples of vivid description scattered throughout. Highly recommend! Few spelling and grammar errors here and there, but other than that, a good read :)

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Mesmerizing read.

The author presents a great plot line here through a lovely descriptive narrative. Her writing style flows so smoothly that it's impossible not to vividly visualize the scenes and descriptions. More often than not, when books are very descriptive, they go too far, and actually lose the reader's attention through overuse of it. However, this was not the case with this book. The author found a balance which kept me quite captivated throughout. This book also appeals to a lot of different people: It's mysterious, and romantic, with large paranormal elements. As the story progresses, more layers are introduced within the narrative, which keep the reader engaged. With each chapter that I read, my interest grew even more. A page turner of a read, with strong characterization.
Although the development of the characters was very well done, I felt a little bit bombarded with the amount of characters introduced and found it a little difficult to keep up with them for a while at the start. But other than that, I'd definitely recommend this fabulous story!

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Gripping Narrative!

You are a very talented storyteller, in that you keep the reader engaged from start to finish (well, at least to where you've written so far). I'm still craving more and I love the plot line in general. Once edited, this'd be perfect. Nice work!!

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Really good!

A well written narrative that will engage you from beginning to end. Flowing writing style and the characterization is very well done. I find Ash's character fascinating. Look forward to more from you :)

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Captivating read

I love reading modern interpretations and re-writes of classic fairytales, and this kept my interest piqued. I love your writing style and how you presented the narrative with such a rhythmic flow. Characters are well built also :)

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Likin' This

Despite being a first draft, this is a very good attempt at placing emphasis on societal issues. I'm enjoying the narrative of the story so far, as well as your nice writing style. WIth editing, I think this could be fantastic. Nice job!!

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Lost At Sea

Read all the posted chapters. I'm looking forward to more. I'm shipping Pat and Nina. They seem like a good match. I also want to know more about Nina's character, she's a bit of a mystery right now, but I'm sure more of layers of her character are yet to unfold.Nice simple writing style, and a quick engaging read.I'd suggest reading back through to correct grammar, spelling and punctuation errors, but as this is first draft, it's not a big deal right now. Definitely recommend so far.

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Brilliantly written

A captivating read that I can guarantee will keep you engaged from start to finish. A very strong depiction of characters, also of a high standard of realism, as we can see both the character's qualities AND their vices, which I really liked. This, weaved in with the brilliantly paced and gripping plot line makes this story one that will stick in my mind for a long while. Cannot wait for more from you :)

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This didn't make sense to me.

I'm sorry, but I found it really hard to get into this. I didn't understand some of your descriptions, and I found it very hard to comprehend. There was very little structure on the stanzas, which inhibited a natural rhythmic flow, and generally speaking, the poems confused me. Perhaps with some editing, the poems could potentially be good, but right now, they need a bit of work. Good luck with your writing :)

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Mesmerized!

I was hooked from the off with this story. I love the way every chapter begins and ends. Each chapter unfolded a new layer that kept me reading til the end. I also like the pacing of the plot. Your writing style is mesmerizing. I would highly recommend this story to anybody. Great read!! Please keep writing, because it's a strong talent of yours :)

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Captivating!

I love the author's mesmerizing writing style, which has kept me going, equally as much as the brilliantly written development of Alastrine's strength of character. I am someone who generally doesn't read medieval fantasy but I cannot wait to read on, and see what else the plot has in store. I love it so far, and look forward to future updates. Would highly recommend. Captivating read!!

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Amazing

This author has such a great ability to bring characters to life so vividly clear in the reader's mind, and engage them from the off. I loved this book, and can't wait to read more of your work. Thanks for such a great read :) Please keep writing!

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Love this

I am a huge fan of romance in general, and this story was no exception. It hooked me and I couldn't stop reading. Looking forward to part 2. I urge you to keep writing, for you have a mesmerizing style of writing which keeps your reader engaged. Can't wait to read more of your work :)

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Fire Breathers

Love your plot. I really enjoyed reading this story, and I really like how well your mesmerizing style 0f writing flows, and keeps the reader going. Would highly recommend this to anybody.

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Love this!

This poetry collection is very heavy, but there is a beautiful poetic ring to each and very poem in it. I loved it!

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WOW!

Halfway through the story and loving it! It grabbed my attention from the off, and still has it. I plan on finishing the book, when I have more time. Very intriguing and gripping :) Keep writing x

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Spectacular!

Despite numerous grammatical errors, which can be easily remedied, I have to say that I thoroughly enjoyed this story. I like the author's writing style and the plot was very well paced, constantly intriguing the reader, and making them want more. The character development was also very well done, especially Sara's character, who I liked the most of all the characters. Great story! Please keep writing x

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Soulful and heartfelt

Phenomenal poetry!! This wrIter has such a powerful sense of lyricism, when it comes to composing poems. There is such an emotive ring to each and every poem in thIs book, which strengthens the connections established with the reader, and keeps them engaged! I really enjoyed this, well done and keep writing. Cannot wait to see more of your poetry :)

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Good plot

The storyline is very good, and I liked the development of the characters. However, I think the author could improve by looking back over the sentence structure throughout. All in all, I enjoyed it. Keep writing :)

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Intriguing plot

I look forward to reading on. I'm gripped by the concept of the story and want more. I think the author could improve by proofreading and revising the story once more, as I found the numerous spellIng errors and missing words distract the reader from the great plot line. Great effort though :)

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Interesting

I really liked this story. It is very interesting and really keeps the reader engaged. The plot was great and was very well paced. The author has a very effective style of writing that keeps the reader wanting more. The character development was also very well done.

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I'm liking this!

Although I've only read one chapter, i'm really lIking this story. I like the overall plot so far, and when i have some spare time, I'm sure I'll be reading further into the story.

The only real critique I would have is that the grammar and punctuation needs to be revised, as there are some spellIng mistakes and grammatIcal errors. All In all, a good read so far :)

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Seven Little Queens

I haven't read very far into this story yet, but so far, I am really liking it. It has me intrigued, and I'm looking forward to reading on. 😊 You have a very engaging style of writing.

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WoW!

You have such a lyrical writing style and your story has hooked me. I would suggest cutting back on the description a little bit, as overly wordy sentences can detract the reader's attention. Sorry I took so long to post this review, I had it written ages ago, but I only noticed now, that for some reason, it didn't post. Good luck with your writing :)

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The Dream

I have only read the first chapter, and I'm in love with this story. Just had to review it now, it's amazing, and I can tell it's only going to get better! Well done on such an intriguing first chapter, I love the world you have established here! Keep writing, I'm going to go continue reading now, just can't stop 😊

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Hooked!

I've only read the first three chapters so far, but I'm intrigued to find out more. So far, i'd definitely recommend it and I can't wait to read on 😊

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As The Clock Struck Ten

I don't what else to say about this story other than I absolutely loved it. It had me hooked from the beginning and was a thoroughly enjoyable read. Very engagIng plot 😊

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