Jacinta Horgan

A hooking, layered mystery

I really really enjoyed The Pinkie Promise. The characters had huge depth to them and were each very well developed. I loved how the author brought us back and forth between past and present without it feeling choppy. Palpable description is also a strong point in this author's work. You can really see what you're reading. A very nicely woven together mystery with a satisfying twist at the end. I really liked how you incorporated that last pinkie promise and the end, which brought the story full circle in respect to the characters' pasts.

So Inspired!

I love the many motivational and inspirational messages that this story sends out. I think many people will relate to this, whether or not they are athletes or wrestlers, merely by the resonance of the many philosophies that the author exudes throughout this wonderful piece of writing about the importance of strength, determination and perseverance in our daily lives. it definitely has me inspired to work harder and aim for better in many different aspects of my life. Thought provoking!

A compelling narrative of past and present

This extremely well structured story, which has a strong focus on the contrast between the present and the past, and how the past could've potentially shaped the present differently with one decision, is a compelling narrative with a vivid use of description throughout.

The narrative has a predominant focus on the possibility of what could've been, shaping the present and future of the main character, Cooper.

Throughout the story, we see him reconsidering and reevaluating his life, as conflict develops in one of his most central relationships. It sends him revisiting the past and reaching out to an old friend whose presence has had a strong impact on him. We see him toying with the idea of putting an end to the relationship and rekindling an old one.

With the help of this friend, the conflict resolves itself nicely by the end and closes with a depiction of Cooper leading a life with someone he could've had with someone else, but ultimately did not work out.

A quick, enthralling and intriguing read, that with a touch of editing to correct some minor punctuation and grammar overlooks, would be the perfect choice for anyone who has a couple of hours to spare. I highly recommend.

Greg McLaughlin Has Done It Again!

Wow is the first thing that comes to mind when I think about Broken English. It's got a plot line relevant to current events, it has a cast of strikingly contrasting characters, it's engaging, and keeps the reader flicking the page to the very end. Another masterpiece by Greg, who, time and time again, always manages to outdo himself with his thought provoking stories and their evocative description. Cannot wait for the next novel by Greg.
(I did notice a couple of typos which can be fixed with a quick scouring of the novel, but this is me really just being finicky!)
Well done!

Ignorance's Lesson

This story had me hooked from the opening paragraph. The plot is very good and I like how mystery surrounding Damin's character. The plot is great and the writing style very good. The author exudes a nice balance between dialogue and description. A nice quick easy read ideal for someone with ten to fifteen minutes to spare. One tiny criticism though - don't be afraid of using the word 'said' more often. Keep up the great writing.

Phenomenal Poetry

Whispers of Owls and the Black is a mesmerizing collection of poetry that I'd highly recommend. Jam packed with poems of resonance which captivated me with their evocative language and clever imagery, this is not one to miss.

Sinister Re-imagining of a Classic Tale

I really love fairy tale re-writes, so I was excited at the opportunity to read this piece. I liked how you flipped the story on its head and gave it a dark ending. Great job on that. Your use of description is vivid, but I think it could be a little more consistent in places. Overall, I really liked the story. A nice, quick easy read.

Enjoyable Story

This book has all the necessary elements for a good story; strong characterization, an intriguing plot line, vivid description. I'd recommend to anyone who enjoys a good story. I thoroughly enjoyed. Well done.

Unique and Compelling

Love the concept of this story. It's refreshing and keeps the reader engaged. Great characterization also. The author has a lovely writing style too. I thoroughly enjoyed. Keep writing!

Can't wait for more!

So far, this is an excellent read (based on three posted chapters). Nice plot and solid characterization. I look forward to your future updates :)

Highly imaginative, quick, easy read

I really enjoyed this short, snappy story. The author has a great imagination, in that this story puts a fantastical spin on something so simple and apparent to our everyday lives, we barely notice it. I like how you highlighted it.

Engaging Plot and Characters

I think this was a great read. The characters are well drawn and the plot is very good. I like the MC a lot - feels very real. Your writing style is solid and concise - adding some more description to balance out the heaviness of the dialogue would be of benefit, I think. Other than that, this is a good read that I recommend.

Intriguing

An intriguing piece which transitions between two worlds chapter by chapter, all the while keeping is wanting more information as to what's going on. Looking forward to reading more. The most prevalent issue for me was grammar and punctuation overlooks, so maybe take a look at that. All in all though, a good start :)

Good Story!

I like the plot line of this story. The narrative moves forward at a nice pace and the characters are well drawn and developed. Echoing another review I saw, I think the story could do with a few rounds of thorough editing to improve it as right now, the littering of grammar and punctuation errors really distract from the good content that you have produced. All in all, a good start.

Beautiful!

I love this. Such a quick, sweet, beautiful, heartwarming read. I really liked the composition of poetry in this. It was so touching and I really loved it.

Unique and Compelling

There is a lot to be said for this riveting story. It's got a unique plot line, a cast of adeptly drawn, interesting, flawed, relatable and interrelated characters, which complement each other very well. Despite being a Christian thriller, I think the story will appeal to Christians and non-Christians alike. I thoroughly enjoyed this story and would definitely recommend it to my friends. I look forward to reading more from this writer.

A Silent Game of Spies

This story has a great plot, supported strongly by very well drawn characters. Luvian was, in my opinion, one of, if not, the best developed character and felt very real to me as a character. I really like how you focus in on a different character each chapter and how their stories tie together.The dialogue is smooth and realistic, and I really like the use of colloquialism in the character's exchanges. It makes it feel very real. Fantastic read, best of luck in getting it published :)

Tense Psychological Thriller

I loved this book. The writing style flowed so beautifully and so flawlessly that I was captivated from the opening pages and gripped right until the ending, which was adeptly crafted by the way. I love how you ended the story. The interesting plot line is also supported strongly by extremely well drawn characters, who I really felt a connection to while reading. This shows how real they seem and illustrates this author's strong talent and flair for writing. I definitely recommend this read and hope that this author continues to write thrillers in the near future, I'd definitely read them.

Good Read

Good characterisation and lovely use of description apparent throughout. I also really liked the plot line. This book has a lot of potential and with a bit of editing, I think it'd be superb :)

Intriguing Read

Great plot line in this book, supported strongly by adept characterization. An quick easy, gripping read that engages the reader from start to finish. I highly recommend :)

Great Story!

I like how this book not only had a predominant focus on the two leads of the main romance plot of the story, but also delved into the added dimensions of both their family lives. The two leads are very likeable in different ways and I like how there was instant chemistry between them. Great story which I would highly recommend!

Wow!

As always, Greg never ceases to keep me captivated and wanting to read on. His vivid use of description brings the narrative so clearly to life in my mind and has kept me enthralled throughout the entire story, much like his other works.

The Third Party has an intriguing plot line. It's a refreshing story, in that, it gives a good insight into the mindset of politicians rather than presenting them through the perspective of their people. It gives more depth to their characters too, which is the next thing I'm going to talk about.

You have very skilfully developed each of the main characters. They all feel very real to me, and this adds to the power of the narrative. Great characterisation! My personal favourite character is Chase.

I hope to see more stories from you because I never seen to think that one will be able to top the next, because it was so good, and then, you always do. What are you doing on Inkitt? Go straight ahead and publish your books on Amazon!

A catch from the start.

This story grabs your attention quickly and it held me until its closing paragraph. Fred's character was very well drawn in particular, in that, little details were teased at a gradual pace over the course of the novel.

I was supposed to read 10 chapters, I've read all of the book, which illustrates the captivating power of this author's writing style. I love the vivid use of description.

One critique I have is that there were numerous spelling and technical mistakes in the draft, which once fixed, would make this story the perfect read in my mind.

Melons and Emeralds

Good plot and structure here! Your characters are very well drawn, Devin in particular. My main critique would be to maybe add a little bit more description into the narrative, as I found it be a little bit overpowered with big chunks of dialogue. Maybe separate it out a little bit. But other than this, I like the overall story :)

Good Plot Line

This story has a strong plot. It is written quite well and structured nicely. The character development is also very well done. I loved Kyle's character by the way :) The relationships between the characters are built very strongly too.
However, I respectfully ask that you read back over the draft a couple of times, as there were a lot of grammar and punctuation errors. They can be easily fixed but can really put the reader off the great story you have written. And that would be a real shame, as it is a brilliantly written and thought out narrative. With a bit of editing, this would be perfect, I look forward to reading an edited version. All in all, I really enjoyed your story and I hope you continue to write :)

Interesting.

I like this book so far. Caroline is very well developed, and I look forward for a gradual progression of plot and characterization as the story goes on. Apart from some grammar and punctuation errors, this is pretty solid from what I've read.

Comical story with a very humorous ending!

I loved this story so much. It wasn't my usual kind of story, but I enjoyed it immensely. Filled with witty characters and comical one liners that kept me laughing throughout.
I love the dynamic between Chess and Cora, and how their respective back stories affect them. I also liked the character of Emma very much. The story has really great potential, and with a touch of editing, it'd be perfect.
I found the ending chapter extremely satisfying, particularly the final scene, and its closing dialogue. It really brought the story full circle in its hilarity and delivers the reader with an equally as great, if not, better impression of the story as a whole. Thanks for such a great read, I look forward to reading more of your work very soon :)

So Far So Good

I like the concept of the story so far. I look forward to reading on. Small piece of criticism- I felt that the first paragraph was littered with overuse of "she did" or "she was" etc etc. Can be easily edited, but is a bit too repetitive for the reader. All in all though, so far so good. :)

Looking forward to more.

I've read all the posted chapters, and while I feel that this is a story where it'll take a while for the plot to develop and take off, I think it has a lot of potential. The world you are bringing to life is quite believable and intriguing, and I look forward to finding out more about it and the characters. I would advise reading back through a couple of times to revise grammar/punctuation errors, which are scattered throughout the book. But don't fret over it too much, it can be easily remedied, and it's more important to do justice to the plot narrative and the characterization of the story. I hope this review is useful to you, and I wish you the best of luck with your writing :) Good work!

Gripping!

This story is beautifully written. The author has such a powerful, intriguing and mesmerizing style of writing, I was hooked from the off. The characters are so well developed that the reader can clearly visualize them at almost every moment throughout the story. I love this author's work, and cannot wait to read more of your material :)

Bobby's journey

Just finished the first chapter, and I'm really liking this. Some of the sentiments expressed are sadly relatable, and this has kept me reading. The simplistic but effective use of language kept me engaged, and I look forward to reading on. Good work! :)

Good Read!

Good plot so far! It would be good if readers were given more of an insight into Anodine, but other than that, an encouraging and rather impressive start. Keep writing :)

Page 105

Page 105 is a cute love story. It is written very simplistically, which makes it easier to connect with the characters, I think, and proves to make the writing voice clear and effective. My main critique would be that I think the writer could've developed some characters a lIttle better. I feel that the side characters, such as Nichol's father, should be delved into a little more. I also think Johnnie is slightly underdeveloped at times, which takes from the story a bit. All in all though, a good effort.

Very Intriguing

Although the author could've used a little bit more of descriptive language throughout, the story was a very gripping one. It had me intrigued, and at the end of almost every chapter, I wanted to know what was going to happen next. The plot was also very well paced. I started reading and have also finished the story today, which shows how engrossed I was in the world the author has created. This shows how gripping it was. Well done on writing such a good story :)

Intrigued

I'm roughly halfway through the story and can't wait to get to the end. To me, the dialogue is very natural and it's proving to be a fabulous story so far. The wrItIng voice is very grIppIng and I'm thoroughly enjoying reading the story! Keep writing please :)

Best Book of the Year So Far!

Under the Aurora is an uplifting story about the willpower of one homeless man to rebuild his life, while facing off against corrupt cops tied up in a web of drugs, sex trafficking and gangland activity.
From its first chapter, we root for the MC to defy the odds and overcome his circumstances. The story's dynamic cast of characters bring to life the captivating plot, and help in raising the stakes for their counterparts. A character driven drama and plot driven thriller, Under the Aurora is woven together with such ingenuity, it is near impossible to put down. Had I had more time, I would've easily binged it in one sitting. Another McLaughlin masterpiece. With a round of proofreading to correct some typos, this should definitely score 5 well deserved stars from each and every critic who reads it!

Love it!

I ship James and Skylar so much. This story is amazing and I loved it so ,much. Framed around a girl's insecurities and burdening resentments affecting her outlook on relationships, which is gradually dismissed with the help of her friends, family and boyfriend, this is a sweet romance story spiced p with a lot of drama along the way, which keeps it very engaging. Great story. Such a lovely way to end it too, I just loved it. Well done!

So far so good

Based on what I've seen so far, this story has a good premise. Looking forward to reading further into it :)

Promising.

I like the overall story. I think the plot is solid and the characters are, for the most part, intriguing. With a touch of editing to polish up the narrative, I think this'd be one to watch out for. Good story, which I think a lot of people would enjoy.

The Great Era: Beginnings

A nice, quick, easy read. Just the right amount of description to keep the narrative flowing. Characterization is strong in this author's work. Other than confusion of tenses and some overlooks, there's not much to critique. Good job!

Promising

Good plot, with the emphasis on drug addiction and alcoholism. I think the story is there and very good, but think you should work a little more on the following areas: grammar/punctuation, writing style- could be elevated with more description, I think, and the dialogue, which seemed a bit choppy and stunted in places. With some polishing, I think this story has promise. I look forward to an edited version. Good luck. :)

Nice!

Based on what I've seen so far, I'm really liking this story. The sense of empathy the author evokes from the reader for the MC is commendable, and the language and description use is very very good. Looking forward to more!

Promising Start

Your story is refreshing. I really like your MC. Your writing style is crisp and precise and flows well. Other than suggesting proofreading a couple of times to remedy some grammar and punctuation overlooks, I have no real criticisms from what I've read so far. Good luck with your book :)

Nice.

As with another flash fiction piece I read from the same author, I found it to be a quick riveting read. You should definitely check out some of this writer's work if you want a good read that won't consume much of your time :)

Fear of the Dark

A nice, quick flash fiction piece with an unsettling, creepy vibe to it. I totally dig it. Great description :)

Gripping!

A quick, fluid, easy read that I'd definitely recommend for someone looking for some material and only has a few minutes to spare. Despite only having three chapters, the characters are adeptly crafted and are sympathies lie with them almost instantly. Great use of description also.

Thought Provoking Satire

This book exudes the right amount of humor to entertain the reader mixed with enough sincerity to keep them engaged all the way through. The descriptions are crisp and vivid and the writer has a writing style that allows the narrative to flow so smoothly, you can't help but fall in love with it from its opening pages.

WOW, JUST WOW!

This was a fantastic read, with a great range of characters, who were strongly developed throughout the narrative. The plot was great too; I was absorbed in the world the author created from the opening pages to the very ending and my interest was piqued from start to finish. A gripping story that I'd highly recommend to my friends.

I apologize that I've no critiques to help you improve, but I just loved this story so much and I simply can't come up with any criticisms for this book! Great work!! XD

Great Start

You have the makings of a riveting narrative here, which could potentially be very very good. The character development is solid and the descriptions enthralling. With a touch of editing to polish up the draft, I can see this book getting published.

The most prevalent issue for me was grammar and punctuation. Throughout the story, there are a lot of missing commas, which can be easily fixed, so this is a minor critique, but be careful with this, as it can really annoy the reader and distract them from the fabulous story you've got going here. Another issue was the formatting of your dialogue. I won't go into detail on that here as I've sent some feedback in regards to this.

As I said, this book has a lot of potential and I urge you to keep working at it and polishing it up. With some work, it'd be fantastic. All in all, a great read :) Good job!

Great Read

A nice short collection of creepy short stories/poems which I finished in one sitting, because they were so captivating. This author has a really nice writing style which flows so smoothly. The vivid use of description in the stories especially had be gripping the edge of my seat. All in all, this was a fantastic read and I'd definitely recommend reading some of this if you're a horror fan or want something short to read :)

Beautiful!

I've only read two chapters, awaiting the updates, and I am so riveted. This is amazing so far. Your writing style is absolutely beautiful. You can't help but love it. As I've only read two chapters, I'm not sure what exactly the plot of the story is in its entirety, so it may be deserve a higher rating than I have given it at the time of this review. So far, your characterization is solid. I feel that Ori and Blithe have real depth to them, despite only having known them for a very short while. I really hope you continue to write, because you have such a real, raw talent for writing, which is clearly apparent in the snippet of your work I've read so far. Best of luck in finishing this story :)

Lovely

Wow. Such a lovely, quick tale with a very powerful conclusion. I really enjoyed it :)

Great Read!

This book is very engaging, its best qualities are that of the relevance of the plot line in everyday life - the depiction of controversial social and political issues, the fantastic character arcs. Shelley's character is spectacularly drawn. I also love how effectively the author manages to overlap the thrilling plot with the romantic entanglements of the narrative. All these elements, woven together compellingly with a vivid and mesmerising use of description is really what gives this book its five stars. Thank you for the read, I enjoyed it immensely.

Definitely Not Your Typical Everyday Romance Story

Overall, I really like the concept of the book. I like the way it focuses on the relationship between two people who are cheating and lying to/on their friends/boyfriends/girlfriends. It's a refreshing a change to most romances, and delves well into the mindset of a cheater, presenting us with a very well thought out insight into their thoughts and feelings on the ultimatum Mark and Naveah find themselves in. I also like that we get to see the guilt residing in Naveah, in particular, illustrating that those who cheat are not just horrible people, but that there's always more grey than simply black and white to certain situations.

I really love the characters. Naveah and Mark are very well drawn. I also liked the development of Lucy and Callie sling the way. Nearing the end of the book, I came to like Connor more and more. I think the writer could improve by perhaps adding some more dimension to his personality in the early stages of the book.

With a touch of editing to correct some punctuation and grammar errors and a few wordos throughout, I think this book would be a perfect read for someone wanting a break from cliched romance novels. I hope this writer continues to write in the future and I cannot wait to read more of her work :)

Heartfelt

Good characterisation in the book. I loved Landon. His demise and how it affected Liv was heartbreaking to read.

The most prevailing issue for me, was grammar and punctuation. Oftentimes, the dialogue was formatted incorrectly. I think you need to scan back through it a couple of times to change those. They'll be easy fix, but can really distract and annoy the reader. You also mix up the past and present tenses a lot. For example(made up example) "I told Riley to leave me alone and he looks really hurt." Again- distracting to the reader, so be careful with that.

All in all though, a poignant bittersweet read that will make you cry and laugh and cry again. A refreshing change from most cliched romance stories.

Intriguing

Your writing style flows so beautifully and so smoothly that it mesmerizes and captivates the reader. Your vivid use of rhythmic description kept me enthralled and reading on. You had me from the very first sentence, which was really quite impressive. I love how you have kept the first chapter mysterious enough to keep me wanting more. but have given me enough to keep me engaged with the story to come, I cannot wait to find out what the plot line has in store for Scott as the story develops.

Very Good

I like the plot line. Your writing style also flows quite smoothly. Looking forward to reading on :)

A Poignant Expression of Heartfelt Emotion

I've enjoyed reading the first chapter, and look forward to reading on as updates are posted. I like the state of mind depicted of the character. It's a sad but realistic portrayal. The only thing I would suggest is shortening some of the sentences. I felt that some of them were a little long winded and could've been compacted or re worded into two separate sentences. I'll definitely read on though :)

A Masterpiece!

This is a wonderfully crafted story with great characterization throughout. It engages the reader from start to finish. I loved the plot line, and how it was paced. There are a few unexpected twists and turns along the way until the adept ending, which I was extremely satisfied with. The vivid description in this author's writing really brings the scenes to life in my mind. This is a book I will remember for a while! I definitely recommend :)

Gripping Narrative!

You are a very talented storyteller, in that you keep the reader engaged from start to finish (well, at least to where you've written so far). I'm still craving more and I love the plot line in general. Once edited, this'd be perfect. Nice work!!

Captivating read

I love reading modern interpretations and re-writes of classic fairytales, and this kept my interest piqued. I love your writing style and how you presented the narrative with such a rhythmic flow. Characters are well built also :)

Likin' This

Despite being a first draft, this is a very good attempt at placing emphasis on societal issues. I'm enjoying the narrative of the story so far, as well as your nice writing style. WIth editing, I think this could be fantastic. Nice job!!

Mesmerized!

I was hooked from the off with this story. I love the way every chapter begins and ends. Each chapter unfolded a new layer that kept me reading til the end. I also like the pacing of the plot. Your writing style is mesmerizing. I would highly recommend this story to anybody. Great read!! Please keep writing, because it's a strong talent of yours :)

Amazing

This author has such a great ability to bring characters to life so vividly clear in the reader's mind, and engage them from the off. I loved this book, and can't wait to read more of your work. Thanks for such a great read :) Please keep writing!

WOW!

Halfway through the story and loving it! It grabbed my attention from the off, and still has it. I plan on finishing the book, when I have more time. Very intriguing and gripping :) Keep writing x

Spectacular!

Despite numerous grammatical errors, which can be easily remedied, I have to say that I thoroughly enjoyed this story. I like the author's writing style and the plot was very well paced, constantly intriguing the reader, and making them want more. The character development was also very well done, especially Sara's character, who I liked the most of all the characters. Great story! Please keep writing x

Good plot

The storyline is very good, and I liked the development of the characters. However, I think the author could improve by looking back over the sentence structure throughout. All in all, I enjoyed it. Keep writing :)

Intriguing plot

I look forward to reading on. I'm gripped by the concept of the story and want more. I think the author could improve by proofreading and revising the story once more, as I found the numerous spellIng errors and missing words distract the reader from the great plot line. Great effort though :)

I'm liking this!

Although I've only read one chapter, i'm really lIking this story. I like the overall plot so far, and when i have some spare time, I'm sure I'll be reading further into the story.

The only real critique I would have is that the grammar and punctuation needs to be revised, as there are some spellIng mistakes and grammatIcal errors. All In all, a good read so far :)

Seven Little Queens

I haven't read very far into this story yet, but so far, I am really liking it. It has me intrigued, and I'm looking forward to reading on. 😊 You have a very engaging style of writing.

The Dream

I have only read the first chapter, and I'm in love with this story. Just had to review it now, it's amazing, and I can tell it's only going to get better! Well done on such an intriguing first chapter, I love the world you have established here! Keep writing, I'm going to go continue reading now, just can't stop 😊

Hooked!

I've only read the first three chapters so far, but I'm intrigued to find out more. So far, i'd definitely recommend it and I can't wait to read on 😊