Kai McKay

Basildon

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Love is a river but we must swim uphill

So I just finished Nature Love and Chances. I love how you compared Love to that of a River and to me that is a beautiful way of describing the most powerful human emotion. To me, love is a river where the mistakes are what pull you downstream, and fighting for it is what helps you push further. You’ve got a beautiful way of writing your poems that has done nothing less than warm my heart.

Chances is definitely a more melancholic piece, evoking emotions about a love lost and blaming yourself for how it went. If these poems are about the truth of your life than you have my sympathies, but as a whole I’ve enjoyed reading your poems and while I likely interpreted these wrong, it is still a beautiful piece you’ve written. Well done!!!

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Art. Nothing else can describe it.

As I’ve explained in the title of my work. Your works are nothing short of pure art, you build this amazing world through your poetry that remind me of dreams I have had over the years, you paint clear and vivid pictures that if this was an audio book I’d feel as though I was living in it!

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Blown Away doesn’t describe!

So I very recently got a notification about you asking for a review for review. I’m all for seeing what other authors on this site and I always look forward to seeing what everyone’s about. This story hit all the right emotions for me. You’ve expertly written the characters and made me feel for them despite the fact that this is a short story. In this short time you’ve made me care and for that I am blown away. I cannot wait to see what you come up with next!!!!

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WOW!!!!

I’ve read up to chapter 43 and oh my god I am loving your work! I’ve barely slept and it’s 12pm in the UK and I still haven’t slept because of how amazing this book is!!! I love how you’ve written Katherine and the other characters so far and their stories have gone in ways I truly wasn’t expecting!! I can’t wait to see how this finishes!!!!

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INCREDIBLE

I loved every bit of this book! Your way do describing the fight scenes especially the beginning fight was extremely well done!! I loved reading your work and I can’t wait to read your next one!

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Beautiful

This is a beautiful representation of what illness is, and how it’s not the same for each individual person. It all comes in shapes and sizes no one expects. And it definitely get the point across. I loved it!

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Moving

To begin with I really enjoyed reading your poems, you have a way of writing that really evokes strong emotions within the reader when going into topics like depression. Being someone who suffers myself I feel drawn to poems like this. Keep up the good work!

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A Broken Soul, A Talented Author

As someone who suffers from things like depression and anxiety, it's always sure to hit home for me when someone writes about these problems and really addresses them and doesn't romanticise it like most pieces of media do. For me this story is extremely well written. Michelle does an amazing job at making the readers see the hardships you experience. We are all dealing with inner demons, and as someone who has experienced suicidal thoughts I feel as though Ellie is a real person and I want to help her.

This book is a must read. I can wholeheartedly recommend this piece of work to anyone who enjoys dark and gritty drama pieces of literature.

In terms of criticism I can only suggest rewrites to fix any small grammatical mistakes but these are very easy to overlook when I am as engrossed in this story as I am.

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A beautiful piece

Vampires and Romance are two things in literature that can go hand in hand. The book is a short and pleasant read and I've enjoyed reading the first chapter already. Wholeheartedly recommend for any avid lover of Romance. Only put a four star on grammar due to no grammar being perfect regardless of the talent of the writer. I have enjoyed what I've read so far however and I look forward to reading more.

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Wonderful story!!!

As per my duty as a fellow writer and online friend, I felt as though I wanted - No - NEEDED to review this work! Child of the flowers is a beautiful piece of fiction detailing the oppression of the mages, Skye is a protagonist I very much enjoy reading about and hearing about how she is restrained by the Archmage.

I love how you’ve written her, and how you’ve incorporated a strong magical system into your work. Mages needing a source to use certain magic is an idea that makes the most sense rather than creating magic from nothing.

I personally think Aedan and Skye would have a lot to talk about if our works crossed over. I’ve loved this piece wholeheartedly so far and I’d love to read more sometime.

I can’t wait to see this in hardcover. I hope it’s as detailed as the online cover!!!!!!!

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Dragon Age!!!!

Okay, so first I love the idea you’ve gone with what will be an Elven inquisitor, would have been even more ironic if the “herald of andraste” was of the Qun. You have a unique writing style that I’ve enjoyed reading, it’s quite genius that you’ve described the Anchor as being “Poisonous” I’ve always thought of it as like a biting pain, or like a knife wound in the hand so imagining it like poison makes a lot of sense. I can’t wait to see where you take it, I can’t wait to see who the inquisitor falls for (I’m kinda hoping Solas)! Keep up the good work I can’t wait to hear more!

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Magnifico!!!

Okay, so first off my favourite genres are and will always be Fantasy, Romance and Drama and I love having the chance to read someone else’s work. I love how you’ve written the characters, in particular Ellie and Byron! You’re an extraordinary writer and you show the others readers and myself a great amount of potential and talent.

I can’t wait to read a new Queen! And I hope you enjoy my own work if you can get around to it!!!

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Beautiful Work!!

Okay, so first off it’s refreshing to see another British author on here. (UKrepresent) I very much enjoyed reading your book, Ethan and Ellie to me are really well written and you’re taking the story in a very unique direction which so far I haven’t been able to correctly guess which makes it all the more fun for me.

I’m getting the feel of a Romeo and Juliet ending here in the sense of an ending where no one really wins and there isn’t the happy ending people want.

On the hole I think you’re a very talented writer, I can’t give you a 5 on your grammar as tbf 5 grammar is almost impossible for most people but that isn’t to say your story isn’t perfect in my eyes :) I can’t wait to see where you take it and I can’t wait to hear your review on Tale of The Wanderer.

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I loved it!!

Okay so I loved the fact that Sienna doesn’t like to be reminded of her Mafia family background, an understandable thing for someone who's father could order their death.. She doesn’t want people to fear her or treat her special like most mafia children would.

This was an interesting love story with a fun mafia side story. I liked the characters, Sienna was a fun character to read and it was interesting to read about Xander, even if he can come off as a little arrogant at times. I loved your work!

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*Italian Hands* Magnifico

I can’t put into words how much I enjoyed your work. I loved how Nina is Mexican and that her mother speaks to her in Spanish, it’s a trope I really enjoy in both books and TV. This was a really pleasant read, I really enjoyed reading. I can’t wait to see what comes next, I can’t wait to see how your talent develops!!!!!

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A good read, highly recommended

Okay, so first off I enjoyed your book! I was expecting something completely different when I saw your cover as Kaneki from Tokyo Ghoul. Most of what I have to say has been said by other authors, namely the grammar and spelling I feel could be improved but for the most part I have enjoyed reading your work!

Michael and Joel are well written and I can’t stress enough how much I truly enjoyed this!! I can’t wait to see what you come up with next, and I will heartedly read and review your next piece! Keep up the amazing work!

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I can’t even express it 😭

Your summary was what drew me into reading your work, you only have two chapters done as of now but even then I have enjoyed reading your work. I can’t wait to see what you come up with next!!!!!

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Loved it!!!

So I’m usually not one for romance, despite that being a central part of my own work, but nonetheless I have enjoyed reading your work. I can’t wait to see what you bring out next, and as you yourself wrote: I can’t wait to see what milestones come next! Keep up the good work, I loved this piece and I even felt myself crying 😭. Thank you for such an amazing read.

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An interesting beginning

I just want to start by saying I love this story so far. It’s been a nice quick read for me early in the morning, and in a way it reminds me of noughts and crosses. Can’t quite put my finger on where though, but seeing Cambree try and get Oliver caught by screaming for help has me excited for the next chapter to see where they end up.

HIGHLY recommend this currently short read!

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Short and Sweet read

I like to be able to sit down and read short chapter stories like this. I was shocked to see the most recent chapter with Meghan punching Noah, It’s been a pleasant read over all and I enjoy your writing style. Can’t wait to see what else you have in store!!! 9/10!!!

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Pleasantly Surprised

I have nothing to say save for the fact that this is a nice short read for me when I’m on my way home from University. I love your writing style and even the titles you give your chapters, Demon with a halo is a good play on words that can have multiple meanings. I can’t wait to see how your work plays out! I’m very excited to read more :D!!!

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A.R.T!!!!

I managed to read this on my train to university today, and I got to admit that I love where this story goes! Curious to see what happens with Adam, I haven’t read any other works yet so I don’t know if he’s a character in another piece. Can’t wait to read more.

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Chapter One Review

So I decided to leave a review on the first chapter, and I will be leaving a review again once I’ve read the whole book. For one, I enjoyed the first chapter, more than I was expecting quite frankly. I loved the comparison of Carr to a rat, I thought that was quite clever and I loved that the whole opening chapter of this book reminds me of the start of a D&D campaign which makes me smile. I’m looking forward to reading the rest of this book!!

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I’ve finished the book after reading your review on my work, I’ve loved this journey reading Carr’s story and I can’t wait to start the second book! I know I’ll enjoy it just as much as this one!!! I can wholeheartedly recommend this to everyone who loves Fantasy!

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I loved it!

I enjoyed this much more than I was expecting. When I usually read stories with dialogue only I tend to have low expectations for it but I really enjoyed reading this and I look forward to reading more of your work! You have a unique writing style that I enjoy. All I would suggest is to write with quotation marks “” rather than apostrophes ‘’ and to check where you put your upper and lowercase letters. Other than that I loved reading this!!

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THE BEST!!!

I’ve taken my time reading this piece and I for one LOVED the relationship between Carter and Josh. This has been one of the best fan fiction retellings of Until Dawn I have read, and I can’t wait to read more of your work!!!!! I usually don’t agree with OC’s but this to me was really well done!!!

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I’m loving it so far, but edits are needed

The first chapter of any book can be daunting, and you prove that the first chapter can be as smooth sailing as a boat ride. The first chapter reads well, save for a few spelling / wording mistakes and I enjoyed reading it :) looking forward to reading it later on and seeing how Jane’s friendship / relationship with Luca will develop!!!!

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I enjoyed it!!

Okay, this is my review of your prologue. For one I really did enjoy your chapter, I liked the concept of both Crystalite and Startanium, unique names for metals in my opinion. I like the concept of Seventy Six people being turned into Demonic Creatures (The Numbered), and I think that the idea for it, while not original, is unique in its own way. It has an anime feel to it which I expect you already envisioned.

For things I think need improving, I would say the spelling and the pacing of the chapter are the two big things that hold the story back. If you ever need my help with any of this, I'm always free to give advice and even co write parts of the book with you. My advice would be to use a spelling/grammar check, poor spelling and grammar can make or break your story so it's a good idea to try that out.

Something I think should have been elaborated on more would have been the King himself, while he did play a short part in this chapter I think someone who ruled a Kingdom at least deserved a name.

As a whole though, I think this story shows potential. It's definitely a fun read and I look forward to read more of it.

- K.M Blue (Kai McKay)

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