Kai McKay

A Short & Fun Read!

So after connecting with you on TikTok I thought I’d come along and review this short piece. All in all I love the idea of it, following Simon with his Fourth Wall Break provided with me with a nice little read to kill the time at work, and proved to be a splendid read.

Only criticism from me would maybe be an overuse of Ellipsis and italics but this is more my own personal preferences rather than actual grammatical error.

All in all I’ve loved it! Can’t wait to read more!

Pheonix

The author does an exceptional job of painting the picture of the scene, coming into contact with the supposed hero of the story and facing off straight away. I’ve never really been a fan of the first person perspective in books, but that’s more a personal preference for me. This is a really good and short read with a definite need to rewrite and improve it, the story is a little too fast paced with not enough build up on the chapter. I like the premise and the way it’s been set up, but could definitely do with some editing in the pacing department.

All in all an enjoyable read though.

A Great Read

I’m never usually one for the fantasy romance type books, but reading The Daughter of Demons has been an experience. I’ve enjoyed reading your work, and as a writer myself I’ve seen things and learned more about how I could perhaps improve myself. The only complaint I have is that there were pieces a little too dialogue heavy but all in all a very good read that I have enjoyed!!

Blown Away doesn’t describe!

So I very recently got a notification about you asking for a review for review. I’m all for seeing what other authors on this site and I always look forward to seeing what everyone’s about. This story hit all the right emotions for me. You’ve expertly written the characters and made me feel for them despite the fact that this is a short story. In this short time you’ve made me care and for that I am blown away. I cannot wait to see what you come up with next!!!!

A.R.T!!!!

I managed to read this on my train to university today, and I got to admit that I love where this story goes! Curious to see what happens with Adam, I haven’t read any other works yet so I don’t know if he’s a character in another piece. Can’t wait to read more.

WOW!!!!

I’ve read up to chapter 43 and oh my god I am loving your work! I’ve barely slept and it’s 12pm in the UK and I still haven’t slept because of how amazing this book is!!! I love how you’ve written Katherine and the other characters so far and their stories have gone in ways I truly wasn’t expecting!! I can’t wait to see how this finishes!!!!

INCREDIBLE

I loved every bit of this book! Your way do describing the fight scenes especially the beginning fight was extremely well done!! I loved reading your work and I can’t wait to read your next one!

The Beginning

A piece reminiscent of Martin's Fire and Blood Anthology, the Chronaculum is the beginning of many short stories to help build the world of Empire of Will. Rene's work is spectacular as always!

JUST A FLESH WOUND

So, I recently came into contact with the author and already I've fallen for their writing style. In a world where every fantasy novel is filled with edge and angst, a little bit of laughter isn't such a horrible thing.

Boxer has a clear idea in mind of how the want to write, giving us a novel similar in style to Monty Python and the Holy Grail. A lovely short read, I'm looking forward to the next chapters and hopefully release!

The Nature of Will and Doubt

A book reminiscent of the likes of Dune, and Warhammer 40k, The Empire of Will is a book that is on its way to greatness. The Author has yet to finish this piece, but the summary drew me in almost instantly. This genre isn't something I typically read, being drawn more to the world of fantasy, but I thought I would give this book a read after coming into contact with the author themselves.

Paradyxm's style of writing is intelligent, and strays from the clichés of typical science fiction. It's written in a way of being unknown, but not impossible to grasp and though it travels between timelines, this doesn't affect the overall flow and feel of the story.

Following two brothers at the centre of things, It gives you a great idea of the overall tone of the story. They are brought to us in the midst of their struggles, greatly affected by their past. The author seems heavy on the dialogue but doesn't over saturate the chapters with it, its easy to follow.

I'm eagerly waiting for the way the story finishes. Overall rn its a 10/10!

A legend in the making!

First off, this is the kind of book that I could only dream of. The world you have created will forever live in my mind, you have an entire pantheon of gods and goddesses who have built and destroyed their creation through the actions of the humans and it is interesting to see how these gods perceive this progression of mankind!

I do love the feel of the piece, your way of describing the characters and their powers as well as the realms they inhabit give you a great sense of how large the world in question is. The idea of the gods watching and sometimes interacting with them reminds me of some of the ancient Greek myths.

As we go further into the book, we see the rise of fall of the Kingdoms, the beginnings of the inevitable wars. The plot really draws me in and your work is just impeccable. Perfect grammar and the pacing keeps me locked in.

Overall I have enjoyed this book and I will 100% buy this book next payday and leave this exact review on your amazon!!

A new light!

Okay so I would like to put my two pennies here and admit that horror is more the genre I dip my fingers into when writing than the one that I read. I don't find the time to read often but when you recommended a review swap and I saw the effort you have put into your ideas I had to keep reading!

Candyland is only two chapters in and already you have established the characters in a way that reminds me of Stephen King himself! Right from the start where she says those cursed words in the mirror I felt well... hooked (Pun Intended). The character of Claire is what you would expect from a young adult. She comes off as angry as well as somewhat hot headed and like the rest of us during those transitioning years into adulthood, she resents a great deal of the decisions that led her to where she is now.

I've thoroughly enjoyed what I've read so far and its to a very professional standard. I like you're writing style, I feel like if this was a real book I had in my hands, I know for sure that I wouldn't be able to put it down. Claire is a great example of a multidimensional character that gives you what you need while leaving things in the shadows for us to potentially learn later. Chere, you do an excellent job of weaving together a great story, and like a thread and needle pulling together a blanket, I cannot wait to see what the final piece looks like!!

Moving

To begin with I really enjoyed reading your poems, you have a way of writing that really evokes strong emotions within the reader when going into topics like depression. Being someone who suffers myself I feel drawn to poems like this. Keep up the good work!

Wonderful story!!!

As per my duty as a fellow writer and online friend, I felt as though I wanted - No - NEEDED to review this work! Child of the flowers is a beautiful piece of fiction detailing the oppression of the mages, Skye is a protagonist I very much enjoy reading about and hearing about how she is restrained by the Archmage.

I love how you’ve written her, and how you’ve incorporated a strong magical system into your work. Mages needing a source to use certain magic is an idea that makes the most sense rather than creating magic from nothing.

I personally think Aedan and Skye would have a lot to talk about if our works crossed over. I’ve loved this piece wholeheartedly so far and I’d love to read more sometime.

I can’t wait to see this in hardcover. I hope it’s as detailed as the online cover!!!!!!!

Magnifico!!!

Okay, so first off my favourite genres are and will always be Fantasy, Romance and Drama and I love having the chance to read someone else’s work. I love how you’ve written the characters, in particular Ellie and Byron! You’re an extraordinary writer and you show the others readers and myself a great amount of potential and talent.

I can’t wait to read a new Queen! And I hope you enjoy my own work if you can get around to it!!!

Beautiful Work!!

Okay, so first off it’s refreshing to see another British author on here. (UKrepresent) I very much enjoyed reading your book, Ethan and Ellie to me are really well written and you’re taking the story in a very unique direction which so far I haven’t been able to correctly guess which makes it all the more fun for me.

I’m getting the feel of a Romeo and Juliet ending here in the sense of an ending where no one really wins and there isn’t the happy ending people want.

On the hole I think you’re a very talented writer, I can’t give you a 5 on your grammar as tbf 5 grammar is almost impossible for most people but that isn’t to say your story isn’t perfect in my eyes :) I can’t wait to see where you take it and I can’t wait to hear your review on Tale of The Wanderer.

I can’t even express it 😭

Your summary was what drew me into reading your work, you only have two chapters done as of now but even then I have enjoyed reading your work. I can’t wait to see what you come up with next!!!!!

Short read but enjoyable!

I had to scroll through my wall to find you again, but I’m glad I have. I enjoyed reading the first few chapters of your piece, I can’t wait to see where Emily’s adventure takes her, can’t wait to see what happens with Connor and most of all I wanna see what’s inside this damn castle 😂.

Pleasantly Surprised

I have nothing to say save for the fact that this is a nice short read for me when I’m on my way home from University. I love your writing style and even the titles you give your chapters, Demon with a halo is a good play on words that can have multiple meanings. I can’t wait to see how your work plays out! I’m very excited to read more :D!!!

I loved it!

I enjoyed this much more than I was expecting. When I usually read stories with dialogue only I tend to have low expectations for it but I really enjoyed reading this and I look forward to reading more of your work! You have a unique writing style that I enjoy. All I would suggest is to write with quotation marks “” rather than apostrophes ‘’ and to check where you put your upper and lowercase letters. Other than that I loved reading this!!

THE BEST!!!

I’ve taken my time reading this piece and I for one LOVED the relationship between Carter and Josh. This has been one of the best fan fiction retellings of Until Dawn I have read, and I can’t wait to read more of your work!!!!! I usually don’t agree with OC’s but this to me was really well done!!!

I’m loving it so far, but edits are needed

The first chapter of any book can be daunting, and you prove that the first chapter can be as smooth sailing as a boat ride. The first chapter reads well, save for a few spelling / wording mistakes and I enjoyed reading it :) looking forward to reading it later on and seeing how Jane’s friendship / relationship with Luca will develop!!!!

I enjoyed it!!

Okay, this is my review of your prologue. For one I really did enjoy your chapter, I liked the concept of both Crystalite and Startanium, unique names for metals in my opinion. I like the concept of Seventy Six people being turned into Demonic Creatures (The Numbered), and I think that the idea for it, while not original, is unique in its own way. It has an anime feel to it which I expect you already envisioned.

For things I think need improving, I would say the spelling and the pacing of the chapter are the two big things that hold the story back. If you ever need my help with any of this, I'm always free to give advice and even co write parts of the book with you. My advice would be to use a spelling/grammar check, poor spelling and grammar can make or break your story so it's a good idea to try that out.

Something I think should have been elaborated on more would have been the King himself, while he did play a short part in this chapter I think someone who ruled a Kingdom at least deserved a name.

As a whole though, I think this story shows potential. It's definitely a fun read and I look forward to read more of it.

- K.M Blue (Kai McKay)