What would be a promising plot is overshadowed by descriptions
Imagery is nice, but descriptions need A LOT of work. Too much description piled on is off-putting and ends up either being ignored or struggled through. The right amount of gradual description allows the reader to create their own mental image so they can enjoy the actual story more.
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Descriptions inconsequential to the plot or non-enhancing to the scene/narration should be removed (e.g. 3 windows, detail body descriptions). If they are involved in the plot or enhance narration, it'd be better if phrased in more general terms or more vague terms, with no fluff. One adjective or attribute per noun is usually enough. If they are necessary for the plot, they are better introduced gradually, here and there through relevant narration or paired with actions. If the point is that the character is beautiful, just saying the character is beautiful comes across as less superficial.
Lots of technical errors, but those can be dealt with after the writing style is fixed.