Aviree M.

Hello everyone! It would mean a lot if you guys could check out my story and leave your opinions in the reviews and comments! : )

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The Curve in the Road

Amazing narrative and descriptions that really draw the reader in first thing. The way the scenes and interactions are written out gives the whole story a truly magnificent visual that for me, I just can't get enough of. The plot is gold, the characters are stunning, the details are thorough... Really, an amazing story indeed. : )

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Good start

I like how you're really descriptive with your writing and how you really are able to blatantly express the directness of the plot along with the story-line. There was some grammatical errors with some hard-to-read dialogue and phrasing that sounded harsh and disruptive against the flow of the scenes and I would have liked to have seen better interpretations with character relations, but other than that, the story is pretty okay.

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Pretty Good

To start off, I think the best thing I enjoyed about this story so far is how quaint, blunt, and slice-of-life-y the overall plot is and how well some of the sentences mash together so neatly between Jennifer and Jeremiah. Although, I would've liked to have seen a lot more finesse with the specific wording that would've gone along better with the continual flow and dynamics of the story itself that would certainly help build up key moments that any author would really like to show-off to your readers to make them stop and think about what they had just read for a long time. I also noticed that you don't have a lot of punctuation and emphasis on the story, and I recommend using the website "Grammarly" to help fix that so you can also create a better writing style. But overall, this story was pretty good.

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Breathtaking

The writing style is absolutely amazing and beautifully interwoven in a very compelling, creative, and elegant manner that instantly sucks the reader into what your trying to portray and express through such immaculate wording. But the best part that I find myself drawn to is how I can physically feel all the expressive and vibrancy that goes along with the dynamics of this story. However, the only concern I see myself having is the fact that there isn't a solid foundation for a whole plot yet, (And yes, I know this is just the prologue,) but the key features of the actual lining for the plot could use just a little bit of work, but otherwise, an absolutely breathtaking read.

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Behind Bars

The viewpoint you have given from Finn's POV is comically transpiring and adorable - Just as I imagine a dog would say. The simple writing style is bubbly and personable with serious emphasis as well. However, I feel as though you could have made better descriptions about what Finn was going through, etc... The plot felt fast-paced and there wasn't exactly a build-up of important scenes that, unfortunately, strained the reading experience. Good start. : )

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Lucy Wickshire

I absolutely LOVED the way you described certain aspects, scenes, and character descriptions that really, from the get go, draw you straight in and keep you there through it's entirety. Your writing style is very flowy and elegant and for me personally, I can't get enough of such beautiful phrasing and linguistics. However, I did see some grammatical errors and you could make the scene and direction changes of the actual story a little more fluid and a little less strained in some parts. But otherwise, I greatly enjoyed this story. : )

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The Mysterious Eyre

The whole idea of the story-line is really unique and kind of different from your typical, run-of-the-mill story and in all honesty, it has a lot of potential. I would definitely like to see a lot more descriptive phrasing along with a much clearer visual of what’s happening at all times instead of using such bland, and uninteresting wording that ultimately, throws off the entire reading process. I would also like to see a lot better flow through the scene changes, conversations, and overall momentum that would make the story much more enjoyable to read along with developing your writing style much better. But otherwise, the plot or idea you have for this story is spot-on. : )

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Somebody to Love

I thought that the main idea or point you were trying to get across was very clear and realistic and that it was, altogether, a pretty good start for the main story and how it would later progress. I saw some grammatical errors as well as a lot of hold in your writing style that, I’m sure, you will easily be able to fix once you are a little more experienced. The plot was fairly interesting, but I would recommend in the future to try and be a lot more descriptive and narrative with your characters conversation and how you phrase specific wording that can cause the reader to gasp. But other than that, this story has a lot of potential.

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Needs work

I immensely enjoyed the harshness and the severity that the story had to offer and how your writing style complimented with the hard actions and choices made by many of the characters. Although, I believe that some of the portrayals of scenes, actions, and overall flow seemed somewhat strained and made the story a little hard to read at times. The wording displayed was pretty good, but again, it still needs some work to be more compatible with the plot and how the story later progresses. This story has a lot of room to grow, but a good start.
Also, you didn't really say that you would do a review swap with me, but I would greatly appreciate it if you would. : )

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A Marvelous Woman like Lily Louise

Everything about this story screams princess fairy-tale. The phrasing used to describe the actions, the scenes, the conversations... Pretty much everything is adorable, I saw some grammatical errors here and there along the occasional drop in the writing style, and I would really like to see a lot more plot development and a little more action overall but otherwise, a good read.

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