Aviree M.

Hello everyone! It would mean a lot to check out my story and tell me your opinions in the reviews and to smash that thumbs up button to vote! : )

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Wonderful

I greatly enjoyed reading the first four chapters as the story had an extremely appealing setting and dynamic that was overall, really original. The story had an incredible feel about it with the scene spacing, wording, flow, and compatibility with the characterization instantly made this an interesting read. Although
I found very few spelling and grammatical errors, I must also express that the plot and some of the descriptions for scenes and movements are a little difficult to fully grasp and I caught myself having to stop and re-read some sentences that were kinda hard to read. But otherwise, a very good and exhilarating read that I would definitely recommend.

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Good start

I like how you're really descriptive with your writing and how you really are able to blatantly express the directness of the plot along with the story-line. There was some grammatical errors with some hard-to-read dialogue and phrasing that sounded harsh and disruptive against the flow of the scenes and I would have liked to have seen better interpretations with character relations, but other than that, the story is pretty okay.

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When Life Gives You...

The story itself is extremely easy to understand with a very straightforward attitude that I myself found to be quite charming with fun and cute narratives. I would love to see, however, a little better writing expressions with the plot and scene changes so that the reader will have a better picture of what's actually transpiring throughout the whole thing. Saw a couple of grammatical errors along with a couple of drops in the writing technique, and it has a long way to go, but a good starting process.

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Pretty Good

To start off, I think the best thing I enjoyed about this story so far is how quaint, blunt, and slice-of-life-y the overall plot is and how well some of the sentences mash together so neatly between Jennifer and Jeremiah. Although, I would've liked to have seen a lot more finesse with the specific wording that would've gone along better with the continual flow and dynamics of the story itself that would certainly help build up key moments that any author would really like to show-off to your readers to make them stop and think about what they had just read for a long time. I also noticed that you don't have a lot of punctuation and emphasis on the story, and I recommend using the website "Grammarly" to help fix that so you can also create a better writing style. But overall, this story was pretty good.

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Breathtaking

The writing style is absolutely amazing and beautifully interwoven in a very compelling, creative, and elegant manner that instantly sucks the reader into what your trying to portray and express through such immaculate wording. But the best part that I find myself drawn to is how I can physically feel all the expressive and vibrancy that goes along with the dynamics of this story. However, the only concern I see myself having is the fact that there isn't a solid foundation for a whole plot yet, (And yes, I know this is just the prologue,) but the key features of the actual lining for the plot could use just a little bit of work, but otherwise, an absolutely breathtaking read.

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Lucy Wickshire

I absolutely LOVED the way you described certain aspects, scenes, and character descriptions that really, from the get go, draw you straight in and keep you there through it's entirety. Your writing style is very flowy and elegant and for me personally, I can't get enough of such beautiful phrasing and linguistics. However, I did see some grammatical errors and you could make the scene and direction changes of the actual story a little more fluid and a little less strained in some parts. But otherwise, I greatly enjoyed this story. : )

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Time and Tide Wait for Love

First off, I really enjoyed the simplicity and average, day-to-day aspect of the whole story-line and plot. I thought it was really fitting, and I also loved the fact that the main character had an awareness of what was happening and what type of situation she was actually in. The only thing I would suggest is that you should be just a little more detailed with the scenes, surroundings, and the overall gripping descriptions that could really make the reader stop for a second, and take it all in with happiness. But otherwise, a terrific start.

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Pretty Good Plot

The story was really funny and comical in a very supernatural-y way that I honestly wasn’t expecting, but was very happy to see nonetheless. Your writing style is pretty good with nice descriptions of scenes, events, and conversations, but I feel as though you need to work on being more subtle and flowy with big changes or exposures instead of coming straight out and saying it, I’d like to see you show it. I also think that you need to do a little more characterization with your characters since it feels slightly strained with some of their habits. But otherwise, a pretty good read. : )

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The Mysterious Eyre

The whole idea of the story-line is really unique and kind of different from your typical, run-of-the-mill story and in all honesty, it has a lot of potential. I would definitely like to see a lot more descriptive phrasing along with a much clearer visual of what’s happening at all times instead of using such bland, and uninteresting wording that ultimately, throws off the entire reading process. I would also like to see a lot better flow through the scene changes, conversations, and overall momentum that would make the story much more enjoyable to read along with developing your writing style much better. But otherwise, the plot or idea you have for this story is spot-on. : )

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Somebody to Love

I thought that the main idea or point you were trying to get across was very clear and realistic and that it was, altogether, a pretty good start for the main story and how it would later progress. I saw some grammatical errors as well as a lot of hold in your writing style that, I’m sure, you will easily be able to fix once you are a little more experienced. The plot was fairly interesting, but I would recommend in the future to try and be a lot more descriptive and narrative with your characters conversation and how you phrase specific wording that can cause the reader to gasp. But other than that, this story has a lot of potential.

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Needs work

I immensely enjoyed the harshness and the severity that the story had to offer and how your writing style complimented with the hard actions and choices made by many of the characters. Although, I believe that some of the portrayals of scenes, actions, and overall flow seemed somewhat strained and made the story a little hard to read at times. The wording displayed was pretty good, but again, it still needs some work to be more compatible with the plot and how the story later progresses. This story has a lot of room to grow, but a good start.
Also, you didn't really say that you would do a review swap with me, but I would greatly appreciate it if you would. : )

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A Marvelous Woman like Lily Louise

Everything about this story screams princess fairy-tale. The phrasing used to describe the actions, the scenes, the conversations... Pretty much everything is adorable, I saw some grammatical errors here and there along the occasional drop in the writing style, and I would really like to see a lot more plot development and a little more action overall but otherwise, a good read.

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