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It may be useful for your story If you go over it again and check the grammar since I noticed a lot of mistakes and it took me out of the mood of the story. Your writing style is not my favorite but it was still a nice story. Good job :)

Really enjoyed it

I must admit that I was sad to see that only six parts had been published. I enjoyed reading your story; it was very entertaining for me, and I found the dialog to be a little refreshing, as it can be overdone at times. I'm not a big fantasy fan, but your story really drew me in; great work.

Amazing

You did such a good job with this story, I seriously enjoyed it. it took me some time to finish since it has more chapters than I usually read but now I get why its a little slow at first. You did a great job, I love the way you write, bravo :)

Interesting

Your story was promising, if a little fast-paced for my tastes. The details you included and the characters you described are great, and I love the plot. There are a lot of punctuation errors, but that's okay you can always go over them. I really liked your idea for this story and had a lot of fun reading it; great work:)

Enjoyed it

I enjoyed reading your story; it took some time, and I apologize for the delay in my review, but I am here. I believe you should review your grammar and sentence structure, but it is not too bad. I liked how you developed your story and how you wrote it. Overall, great work; I definitely enjoyed this :)

Lovely

Lovely story, lovely experience, I really enjoyed it. I loved Sebastian he seriously reminded me of Lucifer Morningstar, I loved the ending and the drama you added. this story was something easy to read, not unnecessarily complicated, simply entertaining. keep up the great work! :)

great

this is my review for the review swap :)
I must say its a pretty interesting story. I liked Melissa I thought she was a goofy fun character, Max is good too but I like her more. I think personally that the romance was a little fast but I won't say anything more so I won't spoil for anyone. overall good job, cant wait to keep reading.

Amazing

I loved it right from the first chapter honestly. You have such a way with words that it kind of makes me jealous. It was a little confusing for me at times, some sentences need a bit of rewording but, great job. I can't wait for you to update it :)

Enjoyable

I definitely liked reading it, it was a light read and the plot was interesting. I am not a huge fantasy fan but I had no problems finishing it. Keep it up :)

Good job

I really like your idea, I think its unique and deserves more reviews and attention even if I am not a fantasy fan. I would recommend going over the grammar a few times just to make sure its perfect but other than that Good job :) I enjoyed it

Loveeeee

I loved it, your writing style is my favorite and I think its obvious you know what you are doing. I can't wait for you to update it! Amazing job

I like the start

there is only one chapter posted so I can't judge much but it is a nice start!

Nice Start

It looks like a promising start but I would suggest going over the grammar once again so its perfect, I also would recommend using italic font for the thoughts since it makes it easier to read

good job

I really liked that chapter, keep it going! :) it is a nice start, but maybe look over the grammar

Great job

I really enjoyed reading this, I like your writing style a little too much

Love

I loved it, just the right amount of action for me, the flow was great and your dialogues were amazing. Great job, I seriously enjoyed reading this. I would suggest going over the grammar one more time but its not that important. I loved it, keep writing :)

Good job

I enjoyed reading this, I felt like the events were a little rushed for me personally, if it were slower it would've let me enjoy what was happening or even process it at times. I would say reread it and see if you'd like to add some chapters to slow the action down, but it's up to you if you meant to write it this way. Overall, good job :)

Fell in love

I fell in love with your characters, your way of writing them is so interesting and really draws you in, I think that you really know what you are doing and that is always so nice to see and read. I read this in one day, couldn't let it down honestly. I think you should write more, I can't explain how much I liked this one, so great job. I loved it :) I would give it more stars if I could

Enjoyed this

I think from my comments its safe to assume I'm a fan of the cat chapters ahahah I liked reading it, it was very pleasant, and got better the more I read. I would go over the first chapters to make sure they match the quality of the rest since the first ones are always different when you're just getting into the plot. Other than that, great job :)

Great idea

What inspired you to come up with this? It's so unique. To be honest, I had a great time reading this. Excellent work; this has to be close to the top of my list. Great language, perhaps a little less detail because there's a lot to keep up with, and I didn't like how some of the information was in parenthesis because I thought it would be better to introduce those details in the story somehow, but I really, really enjoyed this! excellent work

Loved it, as always

I always enjoy what you write, even if I have no idea who wrote it. I began reading without first checking the name, and by the end, I realized it was you. Jess, I hope you had a wonderful birthday! I really enjoyed this story; I would suggest that you check your punctuation in a few places, but it's not a big deal; great job as always.

Intense

This story has been described as intense by a few people, and I agree. I enjoyed reading it, but it took me longer to complete than the other stories I usually read. While reading, I became puzzled at times and began skipping paragraphs that I didn't fully comprehend. I believe it would be beneficial for you to reread this to ensure that it is completely understandable and that the grammar is correct. Overall, you did a good job :)

Great job

I really like the idea you have, but I think the way your sentences are structured brought me out of the mood. I suggest you look into that more, but for the first short of them I think you did really well, nice job :)

Nice Attempt

I liked the plot idea you came up with, but your writing style isn't my favorite. If this is your first attempt, good job; however, I recommend that you read more; this will help you develop your writing style in the future. I believe you could revise this and make it a great story with some edits; keep writing:)

Great Job

I really enjoyed this read, I personally don't mind slow stories, and I love details so this was perfect for me. I would say some parts were unnecessary so I do suggest going over it one more time to filter out those bits. Other than that, I really enjoyed it. Good job :)

Loved it

This was a terrific book for me. I'm not a huge fantasy fan, but that didn't stop me from enjoying this book. Your writing style is great, and your ideas are unique and enjoyable. You did an excellent job! I had a great time reading it :)

Sad

I would have loved to see more chapters on this, I absolutely love your writing style and your ideas are so amazing. I would have given this five stars but I feel like with one chapter it would be unfair, it is completely your right to want to use your talent however you'd like and write what you want, and you're a great writer writer so I will support you no matter the book, but I really would've liked more chapters on this story.

Liked it

I think your story's concept is nice; there are some issues with run-on sentences and punctuation, but you can always go back and fix them. I think it's great that you kept me wanting more after only three chapters, but I think you should go back and reread your first three chapters before continuing; this story has a lot of potential:)

Great job

I think you did a very good job; the story is engaging, and I read it in one sitting. I enjoyed how I felt like I knew a lot about your characters after finishing it. Your language isn't overly complex, and I think you did a wonderful job!

Must read

I loved it; I loved the character development throughout the story, I loved how unique it is, and I loved the fact that it focused on mental health and how is was written from his point of view. It was a lot of fun to read, and you did a fantastic job with it. You might want to brush up on your grammar, but it's not bad. This story is a must read for anyone who enjoys adventure, fantasy, and action.

Good effort

I think that for your first story this is pretty good, you have a lot to work on but that is okay :) Try to add more commas to your story, and maybe work on making your sentences a little shorter. Trust me compared to my first writing this is absolutely great. Try to make some edits every now and then and in no time your story will be a lot better!

Beautiful

You have a wonderful way with words; I haven't finished it yet, but I felt compelled to give it a rating based on what I've read so far. The story is intriguing; there are a few punctuation mistakes, but that's fine; also, some phrases break off unexpectedly and continue in the next line; you might want to check why that happened. It's a fantastic work, and I'm really enjoying it!

Interesting read

I must say that I found this to be a very interesting read; I enjoy your writing style and the suspense you created, as well as the drama you added to your story. Some of the sentences were a little off, but that's something you can always work on. Overall, a great read that I truly enjoyed!

Loved it

I found your story to be very well written, I loved the details that you gave and at a lot of parts during it I felt the emotions that you characters felt. Simply great, I really enjoyed it! keep up the great work :)

Needs some work

I like the idea of the story, I think you should keep going with it. There are some spelling and grammar mistakes in there but that's okay you can always go back and fix them. overall good work, keep going :)

Love it

I have read a few chapters and so far it has been a really fun experience, I like your writing style and how you speak about the characters, and the story definitely caught my attention I couldn't put it down until I had to. Great job! can't wait to keep reading :)

Amazing

This is probably the best horror story I have read in a few years, I did not see any of those plot twists coming. Amazing work! I can't wait to keep reading :)