This is a fairly good story. I found the human of characters normally so...machine, amazing. You put in a lot in so little. You showed that your narrator was an actual person, not just a nanny-nator.
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There were, though, quite a bit of issues. For one, the style didn't really fit the story. The descriptions were confusing - you were describing the man one moment, the girl the next. The actions were rather erratic with minimal explanation to any of them. You're grammar wasn't its best, either. In the first paragraph you use was rather than were with "locks".
The story was great - the technical stuff...not so much.