Paiyne Panic

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This is Amazing

Hello! I'm new to this site and I'm been largely just poking around for something good to read, and lo and behold I find this gem. I really like the plot thus far. For a crossover it isn't something too unbelievable that this might happen, and when dealing with fictional characters there is a fine line that can easily be tipped over between plausible and complete crack. Your idea of John picking up the hammer during the timeline you've jumped into makes sense to me, you didn't make it a completely random event and the fact you've incorporated the fact this is post-Fall, pre-Return adds an element that can be expanded on later. The hints of John having a greater back story are great, and over all the entire time I've read through this I've been engaged and extremely interested. There are minor issues every so often with grammar but nothing that I'll complain overly about since my own grammatical issues and the like which are hardly anything to complain about to make a huge deal out of pointing them out as it reads through just fine. I hope you plan to continue this, and I just had to leave a review when I saw no one else had. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more.

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