Your can improve its weak points
Disillusioned Fairytale got my attention after I read its summary and I enjoyed it as a whole. I feel sorry for the nameless princess misfortune. You know how to write a sympathetic character. However, I have trouble following the flow of the story due to the poor grammar found throughout Disillusioned Fairytale. The paragraphs are group into one piece of writing. I only have a problem with the technical side of your writing, but revising it and fixing the words to read better and breaking the paragraphs into small sections of them to focus on the key moments of Disillusioned Fairytale will make a different.
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