Very Well Done
I don't have much experience playing the Elder Scroll games myself, but I have watched friends and family play them, and I find the stories, characters, etc. fascinating.
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Your writing is excellent, with only a few misspellings, typos, and other grammatical errors present throughout. It had me interested from the very start, and your character, Kiz, is a very well-rounded, believable person. She had just the right balance of talent, human frailty, and emotional depth to make her relatable, and someone easily sympathized with.
The ending was certainly something of a surprise, and I really do hope to see more of the story in the future. I'd love to see what happens, now that Haim has just caught her, and what his motives might be.
Really, your work should get a lot more reviews than it does; but whether it's because people treat fanfiction as a joke (I've seen some fanfics that are far better than some of the "original", published works out there), or whether it's because there's an inherent flaw (where people get more votes not because of written talent, but because of how many people they know), I can't say.
What I can say is this was excellent, and I'll certainly be reading the one you have entered in the current writing competition, and more than likely voting for it. :)
Keep up the great work.