A fun and easy read. Great early draft.
The story starts moving immediately. Elements are introduced and explained naturally. I never fault lost. I never felt like there was too much information at once.
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I'm interested seeing how conflicts play out between Crims, the magic-users/mutants of the story.
The magic system is simple. I'm a fan of that. It's not about the writer trying to be clever. I never felt like Max was trying to impress us, a trap that a lot of writers fall into. The system serves the story and the setting.
I don't personally like the first person present tense, but it works really well for the story. The purpose of it is to create more tension, and I think it works, especially with Nikola's anxious nature.
As it's an early draft, there are a lot of grammar problems, but it's never so bad as to be illegible. Running the chapters through Grammarly would help a lot.
I'm looking forward to updates. This review is written as of having read the first twenty-two pages.