Robin Kidd

This was really fun

As a lifelong Tolkien freak, this warmed my heart and made me smile :) Frodo or Pippin might have written this and sung it at The Green Dragon Inn - the pulse of the rhythm is unmistakable, just begs to have some music put to it.. A few spelling and punctuation mistakes - not a huge issue, but it might have a distracting effect on some readers. I could offer suggestions for re-writing a couple of lines as well, although I wouldn't presume to tell you how to use your language - if you would like my input, let me know :)

Goosebumps

This story will stick with me because I don't completely understand it, but it leaves a feeling - like an itch you can't quite scratch. The fact that it's so short just heightens the effect - the reader can hold the whole story in their head to be pondered over and over, like a Zen koan. I have a couple of ideas as to what's 'really going on' in the story, but I'll just keep them to myself and continue thinking about it. Great piece!

Let me explain

This story was inspired by the 'Bad Hemingway' online writing competition, a funky little contest that no longer exists, although some excellent pieces are still floating around in cyberspace. Worth a Google. My story is not a particularly good example of bad Hemingway - I just ran in my own direction with it. Still pretty bad. Enjoy :)