RoseBadwolf1000

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The One is here to rob you of your dreams

That poem is the creepiest part of the story, and that is a very good thing. However, the ending should have been just as strong and it should have captivated your readers and chilled them to the core. You just didn't do that to me. If the main character had been the one affected it would have made since for them to remember, but having the brother be affected, that seemed like a bit of a disappointment. The one also seemed to be a metaphor for a predator/stalker/domestic-violence person. I'm sorry if you think this is a bad review, but I really want to see you improve. You have a good foundation, but it could be better, such as adding more back-story, more poems, and maybe a personal experience with the one.

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A deal with the devil

I love the idea of this. This is a very interesting concept, however there are some areas you can improve on. You could extend the story so that it is longer and/or has more build up. You could add more of a character or have the person insert themselves into the character's shoes. However instead of the skin another organ that is very vital is your brain, just imagine that one. I thought that was where you were headed but this was also a very good turn about for it. :)

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The recesses of the mind

I love the way you wrote this story. The emotions felt real and I could understand the character motivations. However, the details and backstory behind the man could have been developed more. All in all it was well rounded and to the point.

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