Safieri

Please keep going!

I started your series with book 1 and it was almost painful when I got to the end of Part 5 in Book 5 and realized this one isn't finished yet. It's an intriguing and complex world that you've created within the Harry Potter Universe and I for one am loving it. The way Leshia is growing and developing as a character and as she gets older is very believable and easy to relate to, which is a lovely touch. Once I started the story I've become emotionally attached to the characters and have to see it through to the finish.

There are a few grammatical and spelling errors but they don't detract from the work as a whole. Occasionally I was confused as to who it was that was speaking but it's gotten better from book 1 till now (I am horrible with dialog tags myself, my poor proofreader has threatened bodily more than once over it). Overall there is very little I can suggest as to improvement. Excellent story! Please please update soon! I need to know what happens!

More please?

That was not what I was expecting, it was a lot more. Excellent job! Have you considered continuing this? I know it says complete but after that taste I'd love to read more! I'm also curious about Nevil's parents too. The twist with the glasses of water was a lovely touch as well.

Red tape. Can't even get away from it by leaving the planet.

Love your writing style, a very entertaining read. I enjoyed the premise but it was a little sparse on the details. A bit more description of the alien city and their trek back to the ship might have been good or more interaction with Mithran. After the build-up it was a little bit of a let down when he did meet the castaways and that was it. Overall though I really liked this one.