Sami

Wow.

This short story reads like a poem almost. The clarity of art is seen easily when reading this piece. At first glance I couldn't believe how short it was. Then, once I finished I wanted more. Why did this happen? Who is falling? These questions tumble in my head now, as I try to make a story of the situation. The depiction of the character's "Hell" I can't imagine it any better. Well done. Please write more.

Waiting for more

A writing style that makes reading easy and fast. For just the beginning of a work in progress this short story does well to spark interest and make the reader demand more. I am not a punctuation expert, still everything seemed to be in place and as I said before it is easy to read. Good word choice.