Sympathy for the Devil
A clever twist on the devil and how it takes its victims. The story reads a bit like a journal entry but you really get a feel for the devil's personality. The soul in question might have been gotten a bit too easily, but you can still appreciate the satisfaction of an evil person getting what's coming to them. Also, as a short person, I appreciate the title. Kudos, my friend.Read the story now
Punisher and Deadpool have competition!
This story is a brilliant beginning to what promises to be a spectacular dark superhero story! Each character is described well with clever abilities, distinct personalities, and iconic designs and names, each one unique and recognizable. This world you've created stands as a true embodiment of crime, rampant with great detail on the dirty, grimy nature of the place. The concept of the Anti-Heroes is entertaining but also very realistic, wanting to help out but also get famous and/or rich in the process is very much in accordance with human nature and what one would expect of people born of such a desperate city. Along with some really funny lines, an iconic logo, and some great action, The Anti-Heroes promises a great ride for readers. Move over, Kick-A$$. Nightfire is in town!Read the story now
Reads like a true addition to the Star Wars EU
Wonderfully done! You managed to brilliantly capture the personalities of two of the greatest Star Wars characters in an intelligent clash of titans. Vadar's intimidating presence and Mara's confidence play off each other in an intriguing fight that's not only physical but mental. Well done, good sir!Read the story now
A classic example of traditional storytelling!
This story really and truly feels like a tale that's been around for a thousand years. You captured the voice of a fairy tale wonderfully with great voice and use of vocabulary. The moral of the story is clear and haunting, as it should with any good fairy tale. Not a misspelling or grammatical error in sight. Well done, Whisper! Keep up the good work.Read the story now
A sickening dive into the mind of a killer...and I love it!
This story is really well written and delves into the mind of a depraved killer, her dual with her sanity and insanity and it just leaves the reader thirsty for more. I spent most of the story wondering if the character of Charlotte was real or if she was just inside of Bernadette's head. The way the story plays out, there's no real way to know for sure. That's the beauty of insanity stories. You also don't leave is guessing as to whether or not she's cured, but straight up tell us that she's still crazy and is still out for blood. I like that about this story. Masterful job. Well done indeed!Read the story now
You had me at "Dolls"
I have no idea where you're going with this, but dang do I look forward to it. This Wendy character has a real dark edge to her, and all these diseases makes for an interesting take on the story. Grandpa sounds pretty creepy too. I wonder what he's got up this sleeve. Anyway, this story sounds like it's gonna be pretty cool! I look forward to seeing more from you!Read the story now
Really hits home
I really appreciate the lesson in this poem. In this day of having to get married three or four times in order to get it right, this really speaks to the beauty of lasting love that's not quite appreciated as it should be. Even though I'm not one for poetry (I'm one of those losers who needs everything to rhyme), the message in this is pure and it flows well. It has rhythem and structure and it's message is conveyed loud and clear. Very well done indeed!Read the story now
All fun and games...until you get to the end!
A very interesting dive into some really twisted new versions of fairy tales. The Red Riding Hood story is a touch more re-written than the Cinderella one, but both stories have you simply skipping along in a happy, innocent story until the last minute twist attacks you like a one-two punch to the gut! Do not let these things lull you into a false sense of security! Nice job to the writer for carrying you through such a pleasant story only to get attacked at the last minute. It takes really skill to pull of this kind of a surprise. Watch your grammar every now and then and you, Ms. Akatsuki, are going to do just fine! Great job!Read the story now
Elegant in its simplicity
Beautiful writing and voice that comes through in every description and character. It read just like a book with lots of character and great descriptions. The story is told with style and even if you're like me and not much for romance, it still grabs you hook, line, and sinker with fun characters that you'd like to meet and hang out with in real life. Great work!Read the story now
Always a fan of Wonderland
This is a vastly interesting dive, not only into Wonderland lore, but also into the character's psyche. I liked the additions to the story, like the Pisces, as well as the complete mystery of who we're dealing with as readers. Keep in mind story structure, though. Start new paragraphs when different characters start to talk, because if it's all in one paragraph, it's easy to get lost and not know who is talking anymore. That said, the descriptions of Wonderland are both fantastical and creepy. Very American McGee, but not so much it feels like a rip off. Great job, Jace!Read the story now
Death's perspective always promises a good time
It's always fun to read stories from Death's point of view. You did a good job, telling a realistic story about the hard life and times of a man his constant interactions with Death. You made good use of the word 'acquaintance' in this story, because that's really what the characters are. They never go out for coffee and talk about stuff. They just meet up and recognize each other. I am a little confused why you decided to use a cockney accent for Rick's character, as the rest of it seems so formal, but maybe that's just me. Regardless, a very well put together story. Sad, but not 'glass case of emotion' sad. The kind of sad you feel when you embrace Death as an inevitability. Great job, gesunheit!Read the story now
It's fun! It's fun!
The moment I saw the title of this I thought to myself, "Oh please be a reference to the vocaloid song!" and it was! You really managed to capture the narrative of the story while putting it together in short story form without making it feel song-fic-y. The descriptions of the characters in the song are spot on, everything looks like it should. If you've got any more of these, count me in! Great work, Winter!Read the story now
Straight Outta Pemberly!
A well written, character driven excerpt from the famous novel, this story feels like the insider scoop in an otherwise canon retelling of the events of Pride and Prejudice. True, this is coming from someone who has not read the original book (to my own loss, I'm sure) but if there are any major differences from the source material, I certainly couldn't find it. The writing style is great, mixing modernity with the crisp, elegant language of the book/movie/what-have-you. All in all a great rewording of an extremely popular story and told with class and ease. Great work!Read the story now
Off to a great start!
This story does a really good job of building up suspense as any proper horror should. I really liked the description of the creatures and the sense of doom and gloom as the story progresses. I wished I could get a little more out of Robert, though. Maybe if we saw more about what his day was like before this, as opposed to just telling us what happened, and had him spend more time realizing the town is deserted (looking for friends, neighbors, family, etc.) might have added more to him so we'd feel more when he ends up a snack. Still, a very polished start. I would totally read more if you wrote it. Great job.Read the story now
A promising start
After reading through some of your fanfictions, I look forward to giving your original work a shot. Seems like it's going to be quite a ride! Already your main character seems spunky without being annoying or rude (a truly difficult thing to accomplish) and I want to know what kind of a world has aliens attacking at 3 in the morning. I'm looking forward to hearing more about it.Read the story now
After reading your other Guardians story, I wanted to see what this one was like. Sure enough, I found another tale that'll leave your heart aching. The story is a bit forward and to the point (get in, BAM, over) and doesn't waste time. I would have liked to see the reactions of some of the other Guardians rather than only Gamora, but that's just something to think about. Nice job.Read the story now
Title's a little misleading
When I decided to check out this story judging from the title that actually made me laugh, I was expecting something pretty different. The humorous title implies a humorous story, but that's not quite what I got. Maybe that's the beauty of it, that I had no way of seeing this story coming so, as it got more intense, I was caught off guard. No grammar errors in sight (if there is, I couldn't catch them so I guess it doesn't really matter), so well done. This brief story really gets a reaction out of you, just not the one I would have figured. Nice job!Read the story now
The ideas and the set up and this are amazing! The feel of the story goes from science fiction to horror to suspense all in a big, thrilling ball. I really like your character so far and her powers and the idea of the ark being a person. The world is intense and gritty and clever as well. While a little lost in the first chapter, you did a great job of taking time to explain a lot of those mysteries in the next, without it feeling like an exposition dump. I look forward to where this story goes. Keep up the great work.Read the story now