Attention - Dear readers, please don’t listen to those two fu*kers up there blaming the writer for plagiarizing someone else's work. It’s not true at all! I have read both of the stories and can tell they draw nothing common (except the characters are both nerds, which is a characteristic, not the main theme/plot of the book). Think before you blame someone for plagiarizing. The writer had poured her heart and soul to write this book. You have no right to blame her, a**holes.
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Coming to the review, as a new writer, you have done an excellent job in maintaining the structure of the story without drifting away much from the plot. The story was beautiful and heartwarming, and the characters are well rounded, which is something I truly love about this book. Good work!
Now the nit-picky stuff.
The plot is a bit too feminine, you know what I mean? It's not a big problem but I would at least want the male characters to act like a man. They do not have to be strong or masculine but their way of speaking and reacting to certain staff should be like a male.
Your characters are great and funny, especially the protagonist. Her battles with her thoughts were hilarious and genuine, but it’s a bit too long. I mean, readers don't like reading an entire paragraph based on just The character’s thoughts. They can get a little bored and can end up skimming through the paragraphs without reading them.
Coming In a short conclusion, the story is great but it needs a final touch. Just keep on reading and writing, and you’ll soon get better.